The Electrifying Demise

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ACTION ADVENTURE CRIME DRAMA FAMILY RELIGIOUS YOUNG ADULT SUSPENSE/THRILLER ROMANCE OTHER

Contemporary

Joy Munson

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Logline

You seem to know what to do in a crisis; would you like to be my pilot? "Oh my God," Susan cried. "there's that Cuban bastard, the one in the hat and light suit, standing by the Hummer." "Angel Flight. If you copy, Scotty called me about your flying ambulance and also told me about your secret.

Genre

Action,Adventure,Crime,Drama,Family,Religious,Young Adult,Suspense/Thriller,Romance,Other

Short Summary

Mike Murphy has always loved flying. His father's successful business was in jeopardy when Mike Sr. had a heart attack. Mike resigned his Navy aviation career to return to help his father continue to operate the business. Mike met a grandpa fighting with his inebriated pilot.


Angel Flight Medivac charitable services thrived. The Cuban bastard was a threat throughout the story. Finally, Ramon was fleeing, and his car crashed into the power pole and knocked a line down. Hawk, the sheriff, gave Susan the report: We found Ramon. For some reason, he grabbed hold of the po

Setting

The Dalles, Oregon

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Other

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Other

Mature Audience Themes

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Main Character Details

Name: Michael Murphy

Age: 30-40

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Gracious,Heroic,Leader,Religious,Selfless,Skillful,Strong Moral Code,Visionary,Romantic

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Development Pitch

About The Author

Joy was born May 26, 1930. Council Bluffs, Iowa, has been home for most of these many years. The first employment after High School was secretary to Attorneys at Law. Marriage, homemaker, and motherhood followed. Later jobs were Campbell Soup Inventory Records, Western Electric (now AT&T) receptionist, secretary, and retired as Data Processing team member. The Electrifying Demise is my first book, and becoming an author is a surprise but exciting. My long life will give many stories to write about.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

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Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Matchstick Literary

Year Published: 2008

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

978-1648581137

Genre

DRAMA

Brief

Mike loves flying and owns a business flying small aircraft. He gets an offer to fly sick children to the hospital, from a wealthy man trying to save his granddaughter. The business grows but so do the threats. Lots of drama ensues but Mike is just glad to have a loving family to go home to.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

No the book profile does not accurately reflect the book. It looks like an excerpt from the book rather than a summary. It needs to cover the points of the story.

Draw of Story

The story did not draw me in at all. The dialogue is extremely substandard. All the characters speak in long sections of dialogue. The story drags on considering not many events happen.

Possible Drawbacks

The dialogue makes this story hard to digest. The characters are extremely long winded and explain every insignificant thought or feeling. Their thoughts are strung together even when they don't correlate with another. The story is very long considering it only documents a period of time in Mike's life without any real significant events. There is no driving plot.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Mike runs a small flying business. There is some drama with a Cuban businessman. This movie would not be very entertaining. There are too many cliche lines and actions.

Fanbase Potential

This would not have a large fanbase because this story has been done before and much better. It is very unrealistic and the characters' dialogue are extremely predictable.

Awards Potential

This would not have awards potential because the story has a very loose plot and the characters are undefined.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

EVERWOOD, YELLOWSTONE

What’s New About the Story

There is nothing original about this story. It would need a complete overhaul for it to work. A show about a rural private airplane company that is being threatened by a bigger company could be developed. The characters would need to be developed as well.

Lead Characters

Nothing about the lead characters stand out. It is hard to gauge their personalities because they all sound the same. The speech style is the same for almost all the characters.

Uniqueness of Story

This is an average story that is brought down by the formatting and dialogue. If the dialogue were developed and were distinct between characters and the region they reside, it would improve the story greatly. This book does not have it's own voice.

Possible Formats

TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

This would need a complete overhaul with the writing style, dialogue and character development. There are no nuances with the character or how they converse.