Trials of Adam

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LGBT ADVENTURE ACTION DRAMA SUSPENSE/THRILLER

Contemporary

Mary Ramsey

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Logline

Adam Severgine wakes up, left for dead, a long way from his duty station in Alaska. He is sent a series of angels and who lead him through 7 trials, each representing one of the seven deadly sins. Adam has lived a life of addiction, and sin, but now he has one last chance to find true redemption.

Genre

LGBT,Adventure,Action,Drama,Suspense/Thriller

Short Summary

Msgt Adam Severgine wakes up, left for dead, a long way from his duty station in Alaska. The last thing he remembers was being on the road, attempting to make his way back to his family in Mississippi. So much had gone wrong in his life and now it appeared as if he was going to die alone.


Only by realizing the truth of his past; coming to terms with what mistakes were his vs what mistakes/sins were the result of abuse and trauma, Adam finally transcends to a higher plane of existence.

Setting

Louisiana, Colorado, Alaska, Mississippi

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth

Plot - Other Elements

Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions

Mature Audience Themes

Extreme Violence,Nudity,Sexual Abuse,Substance Abuse, Language/Profanity

Main Character Details

Name: Adam Severgine

Age: 50

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Masculine,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Honorable

Additional Character Details

Name: Leo

Age: Immortal angel who appears 30

Gender: Male

Role: Mentor

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Gracious,Sexy,Religious,Funny

Additional Character Details

Name: Felicity 'Cece' Severgine

Age: 18

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Gracious,Naive

Additional Character Details

Name: Noah

Age: Immortal angel appearing to be in his early 20's

Gender: Lgbt

Role: sidekick

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Narcisstic,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Funny

Development Pitch

Master Sergeant Adam Severgine wakes up, left for dead, a long way from his duty station in Alaska. He is sent a series of angels and who will lead him through 7 trials, each representing one of the seven deadly sins. We start with the typical story of a masculine, soldier who has lived a life of addiction, and sin. (And now he has one last chance to find true redemption.) Adam's past is filled with demons; from a serial killer father, to rampant sexual abuse and exploration. He is more than a soldier, a father and husband, and a man; he is more than a body destined to suffer through a linear life. He has choices, but it's up to him to own his destiny. Only then can he find love, peace, and redemption.

About The Author

Mary Ramsey is a blogger, artist, and writer. She served in the United States Air Force and has a BA degree in Cinema. Although she was born in California, her work in the military took her all over the world including the diverse Midwest, from the beautiful landscapes of the Dakotas to the small towns of Wisconsin. She has always had a fondness for unique superheroes--underrepresented minorities, LGBTQ, and abuse victims. She loves an inspiring story that will make her cry. Her favorite movie will always be 13th Warrior. Mary lives in San Francisco, California with her husband.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34

Target Gender: LGBT Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Amazon Kinde Direct

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

979-8617827264

Genre

ROMANCE, MATURE AUDIENCE, DRAMA, RELIGION, LGBT

Brief

Adam recalls his past mistakes with the guidance of seven angels who represent his errors of the seven deadly sins throughout his life. Before Adam dies and joins one of the angels, he is able to make peace with his family and finds happiness that the two women he loved found each other and are starting a family with his adopted daughter and unborn child.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: FAIR

Structure: GOOD

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The book profile somewhat reflects the narrative. One difference is that the character of Noah is noted as a major character as he is chosen to be in the four characters of the character details when Jamie has a bigger influence in the story. The description of the seven trials is confusing as Adam is just observing different perspectives about his past that he can't change, he can only change his mindset so it is unclear who the seven sins are trials as described in the profile rather than as past history or scenarios.

Draw of Story

Adam meeting angels that guide to learn a new perspective about his troubled past provides an interesting modern take similar to the Christmas Carol classic. Adam lived an epic life and his transcendence at the end feels as if Adam is ready after reliving and learning from everything.

Possible Drawbacks

Adam's relationships with the angels can get somewhat distracting in going through his old life simultaneously. Allowing the angels to help guide Adam's inner conflict resolution rather than create a new life with him might make his character feel more three-dimensional.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Adam is shown his past with seven different angels to help understand and prepare him for death. The angel categories are discussing thematic issues in Adam's life with real past examples based around the seven deadly sins. Making the themes stronger than the character dynamics might help clarify the message of each angel.

Fanbase Potential

Due to the mix of LGBT which isn't always accepted in religious environments versus being religious which isn't always comfortable for LGBTQ communities, the audience may be divided into a smaller specific crowd. It could also gain an audience with the experimental crowd due to its structure and angel relationships.

Awards Potential

Due to the religious aspects and heavily mature romantic subplots, this is unlikely to gain awards due to the two polar universes this story is unlikely to earn prestige nominations.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

A CHRISTMAS CAROL, ANGELS IN THE OUTFIELD, TRUE BLOOD, LUCIFER, SEVEN MORTAL SINS

What’s New About the Story

The originality of the story stems from the dynamics with the angels and all of the trauma that Adam survived to still become a good person.

Lead Characters

The originality of the story stems from the dynamics with the angels and all of the trauma that Adam survived to still become a good person.

Uniqueness of Story

This is definitely a rare concept of having an angel hookup with their mortal mentee. However the premise of how they meet and the lessons that the angels teach Adam are unclear based on his inability to change the past.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, Film - Studio, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Clarifying Adam's goal and transformation will help showcase how the angels are influencing Adam's reflection on his past. A clear goal for Adam would also help enhance what the themes of his different past part are meant to represent after a transformation.