ACTION, SUSPENSE, ROMANCE, DRAMA

Dewey looks to end the cycle of abuse of his father and help his mother escape. He gets help from Sady and Willow, two strong women in his town. Sady and Willow have to fight for Sady's grandchild and make peace with their past. Sady ends up finding love despite her loss.

FAIR

THIRD PERSON

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

No, the book profile talks about the novel being about three women, but Eva does not really remain in the story after killing her husband. The story is more about Dewey, her son, and Sady and Willow rather than Eva. The profile also discusses Eddie, Sady's son who is more of a minor character than being mentioned as one of the major character in the profile. By focusing the description on Dewey instead of Eddie and just Sady and Willow's main story, the description will match the book more closely.

The connection between Willow and Sady is interesting especially because Willow knows she is Sady's daughter but let's her treat her like a friend for most of their relationship. This dynamic is unusual.

The abusers language of Roby and Leroy are too on the nose and unrealistic. People do not always say so closely what they mean so more allusion will create more of a threat.

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that three Appalachian women take justice into their own hands to solve their problems. They are tough and take care of their families without waiting for the help of the law.

This could have a medium fanbase of people who enjoy period dramas or empowered women protecting themselves and their families.

This could have awards potential due to the high stakes and heavy subject matter dealing with generational abuse. It is also a WWII drama which is always a contender for multiple awards in the creative departments as well as the filmmaking departments.

MEDIUM BUDGET

WINTER'S BONE, CHRISTIE, THEM THAT FOLLOW, BLACK SNAKE MOAN, COLD MOUNTAIN, DAMNATION, GODLESS

What is original is the fearlessness of Sady and Willow, two Appalachian women who risk death to correct what was wrong. To make them more unique may be to instead of having them solves three separate problems in the story they could have one continuous problem with setbacks to really show their strength and perseverance in adversity in action rather than talk about what they have survived in the past. This will help show and not tell about their inner strength.

Sady and Willow are secretly a crime fighting mother daughter duo. Their fighting crime is not the secret, but that Willow is Sady's mother is the secret. Nothing seems to intimidate either of them neither words, guns, nor knives.

It has three separate adventures of stopping the abuse of Roby, then reclaiming Sady's grand daughter from her heroin addict mother and then solving a hit and run involving an evil priest. Either these needs to be more interconnected or woven throughout the narrative rather than forgotten and moved onto the next event.

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

By connecting the three main conflicts to be throughout the single character arcs of the story or by picking one conflict and saving the other conflicts for separate stories there will either be more space for the characters to develop or more room for the conflict to have a greater impact. When too much traumatic events happen back to back they can loose their emotional impact. The characters of Willow and Sady also start out strong and have no moments of weakness so it is hard to see how strong they are without witnessing them struggle (aside from physical wounds) and put themselves back together again. Their character arcs of what their goal is throughout the story is unclear. Dewey's is clear and he grows as a character but Willow and Sady almost seem too strong and therefore can't grow.