Carolina Blue

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FAMILY MYSTERY ACTION DETECTIVE CRIME ROMANCE WAR SUSPENSE/THRILLER

1940s & '50s

Mary Wagner

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Logline

Bigotry, brutality, murder and love are the common threads that form a relationship between three unique women in the small town of Harmony, North Carolina.

Genre

Family,Mystery,Action,Detective,Crime,Romance,War,Suspense/Thriller

Short Summary

Willow Moone and her faithful dog Wolfe are sitting on the ridge of Blackheart Mountain admiring fall and all its splendor of beautiful colors of leaves from the many trees that encompass the mountains. She hears the earsplitting shrill of a women coming from a run-down home in the holler.


World War II is finally over. Eddie Milsap and his best friend Thomas Tibbits are recovering from their wounds in the Veteran's Hospital in Johnson City, Tennessee. Alec Karastaupolis, a detective from Baltimore, Maryland proposes to Sady Milsap. Her life is changed forever.

Setting

Appalachian Mountains of North Carolina and Baltimore, Maryland.

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Incest,Substance Abuse

Main Character Details

Name: Sady Milsap

Age: 43

Gender: Female

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Aspiring,Badass,Charming,Decisive,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Patriotic,Strong Moral Code,Honorable,Heroic

Additional Character Details

Name: Willow Moone

Age: 70

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Badass,Aspiring,Adventurous,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Heroic,Honorable,Funny,Sarcastic,Lone Wolf,Patriotic,Blunt,Selfless,Outspoken,Skillful,Underdog

Additional Character Details

Name: Alec Karastaupolis

Age: 42

Gender: Male

Role: logical

Key Traits: Aspiring,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Masculine,Patriotic,Selfless,Skillful,Outspoken,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Strong Moral Code,Romantic

Additional Character Details

Name: Dewey Prestel

Age: 16

Gender: Male

Role: logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Educated,Honorable,Skillful,Selfless,Underdog,Modest,Obedient,Secretive,Lone Wolf

Development Pitch

Bigotry, brutality, murder and love are the common threads that formed an alliance between three unique women in the small town of Harmony, North Carolina which is nestled in the foothills of Blackheart Mountain. The Mountain held quite a few secrets during the 1940's. Sady Milsap: Strong, independent, hardworking and caring. Sady thought love died when her husband did. A kidnapping and her perseverance brought her to Baltimore, Maryland where she meets Detective Alec Karastaupolis. Her life starts to change in spite of her antiquated frame of mind. Eva Prestel: Fragile, meek, scared and dependent. Eva lives a life of abuse. Her son and daughter are also the targets for abuse and molestation by her bully of a husband, Roby. Her decision to leave the abuse is over-shadowed by the fear her husband has infused in her mind. Willow Moone: Fearless, crafty, and stubborn with a heart of gold. Willow stands up for the underdog because she and her family were the underdogs for so many years. They were Cherokee Indians and looked down upon by the ignorance of the town people. The tragedy in her lifetime gave her the strength to fight for what she believes is the right way to treat others and live your life.

About The Author

I am seventy-two years old and retired from Lockheed Martin Aerospace in Baltimore, Maryland. I lived there for sixty-five years and finally moved to the Eastern Shore in 2011. I have always had the will to write stories in my heart and finally got that will to go to my head. I love simple but loving and spirited people. I found these people and fell in love with them. The people are from the Appalachian Mountains of North Carolina -people with courage, heart and a love for family. Even though my book is fiction, the people are unique - people who lived their life according to their backwoods customs- people who found hope and the courage to withstand the hardships that fate throws their way. I have also written two more sequels to "Carolina Blue". The first sequel is titled "The Mountain Has Eyes". The second sequel and last is titled "A Stranger Comes To Harmony."

Target Audiences

Age: 35-54,55+

Target Gender: Female Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Mary Wagner

Year Published: 2014

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

978-1-5010-4421-2

Genre

ACTION, SUSPENSE, ROMANCE, DRAMA

Brief

Dewey looks to end the cycle of abuse of his father and help his mother escape. He gets help from Sady and Willow, two strong women in his town. Sady and Willow have to fight for Sady's grandchild and make peace with their past. Sady ends up finding love despite her loss.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

No, the book profile talks about the novel being about three women, but Eva does not really remain in the story after killing her husband. The story is more about Dewey, her son, and Sady and Willow rather than Eva. The profile also discusses Eddie, Sady's son who is more of a minor character than being mentioned as one of the major character in the profile. By focusing the description on Dewey instead of Eddie and just Sady and Willow's main story, the description will match the book more closely.

Draw of Story

The connection between Willow and Sady is interesting especially because Willow knows she is Sady's daughter but let's her treat her like a friend for most of their relationship. This dynamic is unusual.

Possible Drawbacks

The abusers language of Roby and Leroy are too on the nose and unrealistic. People do not always say so closely what they mean so more allusion will create more of a threat.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that three Appalachian women take justice into their own hands to solve their problems. They are tough and take care of their families without waiting for the help of the law.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a medium fanbase of people who enjoy period dramas or empowered women protecting themselves and their families.

Awards Potential

This could have awards potential due to the high stakes and heavy subject matter dealing with generational abuse. It is also a WWII drama which is always a contender for multiple awards in the creative departments as well as the filmmaking departments.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

WINTER'S BONE, CHRISTIE, THEM THAT FOLLOW, BLACK SNAKE MOAN, COLD MOUNTAIN, DAMNATION, GODLESS

What’s New About the Story

What is original is the fearlessness of Sady and Willow, two Appalachian women who risk death to correct what was wrong. To make them more unique may be to instead of having them solves three separate problems in the story they could have one continuous problem with setbacks to really show their strength and perseverance in adversity in action rather than talk about what they have survived in the past. This will help show and not tell about their inner strength.

Lead Characters

Sady and Willow are secretly a crime fighting mother daughter duo. Their fighting crime is not the secret, but that Willow is Sady's mother is the secret. Nothing seems to intimidate either of them neither words, guns, nor knives.

Uniqueness of Story

It has three separate adventures of stopping the abuse of Roby, then reclaiming Sady's grand daughter from her heroin addict mother and then solving a hit and run involving an evil priest. Either these needs to be more interconnected or woven throughout the narrative rather than forgotten and moved onto the next event.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

By connecting the three main conflicts to be throughout the single character arcs of the story or by picking one conflict and saving the other conflicts for separate stories there will either be more space for the characters to develop or more room for the conflict to have a greater impact. When too much traumatic events happen back to back they can loose their emotional impact. The characters of Willow and Sady also start out strong and have no moments of weakness so it is hard to see how strong they are without witnessing them struggle (aside from physical wounds) and put themselves back together again. Their character arcs of what their goal is throughout the story is unclear. Dewey's is clear and he grows as a character but Willow and Sady almost seem too strong and therefore can't grow.