NOCTURNAL

Mark Allen

Book Cover

GENRE

HORROR ACTION ADVENTURE CRIME DETECTIVE DRAMA FANTASY MYSTERY SUSPENSE/THRILLER FAMILY

    Core Theme

    VENGEANCE

    TIME PERIOD

    Contemporary,Earlier 20th Century

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    ANGEL, TORCHWOOD

    CHARACTER LIST

    THE VAMPIRE: 40S. LEAD. AUSTERE AND ELEGANT.

    REGGIE DOWNING: 30S. UNDERCOVER COP INVESTIGATING DRUG CARTELS.

    RICK OAKLEY: 40S. COWBOY WORKING FOR THE CARTEL.

    CAPTAIN HORN: 60S. POLICE CAPTAIN IN CHARGE OF THE CARTEL INVESTIGATIONS.

    SERGEANT CASTLE: 40S. DETECTIVE ON THE CARTEL INVESTIGATION. SPECIAL

    AGENT COULTER: 50S. THE FBI AGENT IN CHARGE OF THE CARTEL CASE.

    Logline

    A vampire saves an undercover cop from assassination by a murderous drug cartel. Together they dismantle the cartel one gruesome piece at a time, ferret out a dirty cop on the Force, and unearth a 100 year-old secret that binds their fates together for all time.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    San Diego, CA

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Amazon

    Year Published: 2017

    Starting Description

    An arms deal by a drug cartel is actually a set up to murder an undercover cop that has infiltrated their organization. Then the Vampire steps in with different plans.

    Ending Description

    Reggie the cop and the Vampire, with backup from two other honest men, kill the last of the cartel members. Reggie and the Vampire, understanding the special relationship they share, will forever be bound to time.

    Group Specific

    San Diego, CA

    Hard Copy Available

    No

    ISBN

    978-0-692-99977-6

    Mature Audience Themes

    Extreme Violence, Language/Profanity,Nudity

    Plot - Other Elements

    Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions

    Plot - Premise

    Other

    Main Character Details

    Name: The Vampire

    Age: 130

    Gender: Male

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Complex,Decisive,Engaging,Faithful,Heroic,Secretive,Honorable,Unapologetic

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Reginald "Reggie" Downing

    Age: 30's

    Gender: Male

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Badass,Aggressive,Confident,Decisive,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Strong Moral Code

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Rick Oakley

    Age: 40's - 50's

    Gender: Male

    Role: antagonist

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Villainous,Aggressive,Confident,Criminal,Blunt,Power Hungry,Unapologetic

    Additional Character Details

    The author has not yet written this

    Development Pitch

    In the midst of a savage drug war raging on both sides of the border, a vampire saves a cop, Reggie Downing, from a murderous drug cartel. Together they dismantle the cartel one bloody piece at a time, ferret out the traitor cop that sold Reggie out, and uncover a 100 year-old secret that binds their fates together forever. NOCTURNAL is a story of honor and betrayal, crime and punishment, sin and redemption, self-loathing and seething hatred, and an unshakeable love that spans across the centuries and transcends the boundaries of Life and Death.

    Genre

    ACTION, SUSPENSE, THRILLER, DRAMA, FANTASY

    Brief

    The vampire is out for a feeding when he comes across the drug cartel and their dealings. He saves a cop, Reggie, from being killed by them and together they set out to find the mole. The Vampire explains his life ,death and rebirth to Reggie as well as the fact that he is is great grandfather. Reggie and the Vampire work together to find out who is behind it all and bring them to justice.

    Overall Rating

    GOOD

    Point of View

    SECOND PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: EXCELLENT

    Characterization: GOOD

    Commerciality: GOOD

    Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT

    Pace: GOOD

    Premise: GOOD

    Structure: GOOD

    Theme: GOOD

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    Yes, the book profile does accurately reflect the book.

    Draw of Story

    The story draws the audience in with the darkness and shadows. It takes place among the dark underworld of illegal dealings. It begins with the drug cartel and The Vampire attacking them to feed. The seediness of the opening chapter includes danger, excitement and action. Vampires are still an interesting subject and the mythology can vary around them which can be exciting.

    Possible Drawbacks

    The book goes into unnecessary detail when describing certain actions. There are some lengthy shower descriptions that seem unnecessary and can definitely be condensed without taking away from the story. There also seemed to be importance placed on characters that didn't amount to much in the end.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The hook is that a hundred year old Vampire has decided to save the life of a mortal. They band together to find out who has tried to kill him. I would watch this movie for the unique story between Reggie and The Vampire. Reggie is a descendant of The Vampire, but the story he tells is very human. It is interesting to see the different ideologies on vampires, how they operate and have come to be. The Vampire has a few "TMI" moments when it comes to the practical life of vampires. This gives a unique spin on vampires.

    Fanbase Potential

    This story could have a large fanbase because vampires are still interesting to audiences with the right spin. Underworld is a popular franchise with 5 films. Interview with a Vampire is has a cult following and Twilight was a massive hit. Each has a unique twist on the classic that goes past the Dracula motif. This story has the same format.

    Awards Potential

    This does not have awards potential. While it is unique in some ways, it is not groundbreaking. The characters could be developed more. The plot is average.

    Envisioned Budget

    MEDIUM BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    UNDERWORLD, INTERVIEW WITH A VAMPIRE, A DISCOVERY OF WITCHES

    What’s New About the Story

    The story is original in that The Vampire has a personal stake in the characters well being. He has saved Reggie because he is his great grandfather. He loved a woman ,as a mortal man, fiercely and became a vampire in the hopes that he might see her again. He learns that is not possible for him as vampire but decides to step in 100 years later to save Reggie.

    Lead Characters

    The lead character is cloaked with mystery but is open with his life as a vampire. He is referred to as The Vampire throughout the book. He tells Reggie his life story and he reveals his human name. The Vampire operates similarly to many vampires or immortal beings seen in other stories which is not original. Reggie does not stand out as a lead character.

    Uniqueness of Story

    This is an above average story that would be agreeable to all audiences. It is a fresher take on the vampire dealing with humans troupe but not enough that the story is not familiar to audiences.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    CONSIDER

    Justification

    This is a consider because the story is interesting enough to holds the attention of the audience but does not stray from the vampire/immortal creature theme. If there were more depth into the history of The Vampire and the world of vampires in this story, it would enrich the story and set it apart from others.

    Brief

    A vampire saves an undercover cop from assassination by a murderous drug cartel. Together they dismantle the cartel one gruesome piece at a time, ferret out a dirty cop on the Force, and unearth a 100 year-old secret that binds their fates together for all time.

    What We Liked

    In a different take on the typical vampiric fare, this novel focuses more on the living and how this vampire interacts with them--this vampire is a monster who still has human values.

    Film: As a film, this would focus on the mystery of who the vampire is and the main case of Reggie taking down the cartel.

    TV: As a television show, this would be a darker procedural about the vampire assisting Reggie in solving crimes and stopping drug cartels.

    Key points: Dark; Modern; Plot twists; Complex villains; Great action scenes

    Synopsis

    Rudy Valdez, an ex-Marine working on a deal for a large drug cartel in San Diego, worries that one of his co-conspirators, T-Ball, will mess up their current drug deal--T-Ball is currently back on meth, and his antics are likely to alert the Coast Guard or even rival drug gangs. However, he keeps his concerns to himself as he patrols the area in preparation for the meeting, and is only a little concerned when T-Ball stops responding on the radio. Little does he know, they are not alone on the pier, and T-Ball has just been taken out by a Vampire, angry at the miscreants and their evil ways. Meanwhile, Jorge is supervising the drug deal, when it turns out that it's not a drug deal at all--instead, his boss is trading now in high-stakes weaponry, and worst of all, knows that Jorge is really Reggie Downing, an undercover cop. The dealers reveal that they have a source inside the police force who exposed Reggie's true identity and will now execute the police officer. Reggie is scared and thinks that this is the end, but before he can run or react in any way, something comes out of the darkness and slaughters everyone except for him. The Vampire decides to spare Rudy and give him a chance at life afterwards, and talks to Reggie, saying he knows who he is, and he will protect him. Captain Horn and Sergeant Castle are confused when they investigate the crime scene the next day--how did one person take out an entire drug cartel, many of whom were trained in the Marines, without any guns or other weapons? And why did this person spare Reggie? Special Agent Coulter, the agent who assigned Reggie to investigate the cartel, protects Reggie from the would-be interrogations of his Captain and tells him he has to stay low for a little while. Reggie agrees, as he is now a target for the cartels, and goes into hiding. While in hiding, the Vampire approaches Reggie and reveals that he is Reggie's great-great-great grandfather. Reggie is confused, because the Vampire is white and Reggie is Black, but the Vampire tells him his story: he was in love with a young Black woman, and they planned to run away to Paris together, but as a human, the Vampire was involved with gangs, and eventually died at the hands of another gang member. The Vampire was turned and tried to reveal himself to his lover, but she then saw him as a monster and refused to be with him, even though she was pregnant with their child. Their child was Reggie's great-great grandfather, and the Vampire has kept an eye on Reggie's family tree ever since. Together, the Vampire and Reggie figure out that Agent Coulter was the one who had betrayed his identity to the cartel, and they prepare for the upcoming attack on Reggie. Together, the Vampire and Reggie are easily able to subdue the cartel, reveal Coulter's betrayal, and save the day.

    About The Author

    Mark Allen is a published author and produced screenwriter. He is a retired Navy Hospital Corpsman and Fleet Marine Force Warfare Specialist. He lives quietly with his wife in a small town in the Pacific Northwest on the Puget Sound.