INSTINCT Bloodlines

Alicia Brandt

Book Cover

GENRE

SUSPENSE/THRILLER FANTASY YOUNG ADULT DRAMA

    Core Theme

    GOOD VS EVIL

    TIME PERIOD

    2000s

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    FALLEN, THE DA VINCI CODE, HUSH, HUSH SAGA, TWILIGHT

    CHARACTER LIST

    SIENA: 18, ATHLETIC, COURAGEOUS, SMART

    MAYA, 18, FRIEND, FELLOW CHOSEN ONE, AND SIDEKICK.

    JOE, 18, ROMANTIC INTEREST AND BAD CONVERTED GOOD.

    ZACH, 19, EX-BOYFRIEND, AND AN OBSTACLE TO SIENA'S RELATIONSHIP WITH JOE.

    TAYLOR, 18, EX-BEST FRIEND, GOOD CONVERTED BAD, AND ANTAGONIST.

    SHILOH, 19, DOUBLE AGENT (ANGELS AND FALLEN) AND SIENA'S ENEMY.

    Logline

    Two of the three chosen embark on a journey in search of the third chosen and the artefact after their mentor is taken by the fallen. They must find the them before it is too late.

    Genre

    Suspense/Thriller,Fantasy,Young Adult,Drama

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34,13-17

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    Italy/ Banff Canada/ Ireland

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Starting Description

    Siena leaves Banff Canada to go to Baldwin university where events unfold and she finds the second chosen

    Ending Description

    The first two chosen are sent to Ireland in search of the third and the missing artefact

    Group Specific

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    Pitch Adaptation

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    WGA Number

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    Mature Audience Themes

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    Plot - Other Elements

    Coming of Age,Twist,Meaningful Message

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain

    Main Character Details

    Name: Siena Rossi

    Age: 18

    Gender: Female

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Confident,Educated,Romantic,Selfless,Sexy

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Zach Barlow/ Guardian angel

    Age: 19

    Gender: Male

    Role: Mentor

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Sexy,Selfless,Seductive,Heartthrob,Charming

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Taylor Lindum/ Siena's best friend taken and indoctrinated by the fallen

    Age: 18

    Gender: Female

    Role: sidekick

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Complex,Badass,Insecure,Sarcastic,Outspoken,Blunt

    Additional Character Details

    The author has not yet written this

    Genre

    SUSPENSE, ROMANCE, FANTASY, ACTION, DRAMA

    Brief

    One of the Chosen to destroy the fallen, Siena goes off to college, where she meets Maya, also a Chosen One. Siena and Maya join forces to find the missing artifacts and the third Chosen One to perform the ritual to destroy the evil fallen, but when the recently converted Taylor kills their mentor, the two ladies are forced to halt their plan and escape.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: GOOD

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: GOOD

    Franchise Potential: GOOD

    Pace: GOOD

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    - Improve the logline: Two of the three chosen people to destroy the evil Fallen embark on a journey in search of the third chosen and the missing artifacts. But when a new powerful member of the Fallen rises, they need to act fast before it's too late to save humanity. - Improve the short summary; - Fix Settings: Banff, Canada/ Baldwin, USA/ Italy/Ireland - Add to the list of characters: Maya, female, 18 Role: Sidekick Key Traits: Courageous, Educated, trustworthy Joe, male, 18 Role: Romantic interest Key traits: loyal, strong, handsome, romantic - Edit characters: Zach Barlow/ Guardian angel/19/Male Role: sidekick Key Traits: Masculine, Sexy, Seductive, Additional Character Details Taylor Lindum/ Siena's best friend taken and indoctrinated by the fallen, 18, female Role: antagonist Key Traits: Strong, Vengeful, Cruel, Dangerous - Add information about the author

    Draw of Story

    A young woman who has lost everything will have to find strength in herself to pursue her goals, both in her personal life and also against her enemy, the fallen.

    Possible Drawbacks

    Felt zero empathy for Zach's character, especially when he dances with Shiloh, making it frustrating when Siena suffers because of him. Make Zach nicer.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The potential love triangle between Siena, Joe, and Zach; the world of good and bad angels; strong female leads.

    Fanbase Potential

    Yes, because the story has many tropes proven to be successful among fans of the YA fantastic adventure genre: love triangle, strong female lead, romantic relationship between Angels and Humans, ancient prophecies.

    Awards Potential

    No, as in movies this kind of genre rarely gets awards.

    Envisioned Budget

    LARGE BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    FALLEN, TWILIGHT, DA VINCI CODE

    What’s New About the Story

    Having Turkey as a setting is very unique, especially in this type of narrative, I believe the story would strongly benefit from exploring this location more.

    Lead Characters

    She's very alone in the world, her parents seem to have more important things to do, and she has lost the people close to her. If better explored, this could give Siena more depth.

    Uniqueness of Story

    No, because it falls into a well-explored category of fantasy YA. It could improve by exploring different paths from most YAs.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, Film - Indie

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    The story has a lot of plot holes that need to be fixed (Siena's power, Seth's character, why everyone ends up in the same college, etc), the supporting characters (Maya, Joe, Zach etc) need to be better developed, interesting plot points can be better explored (such as Joe's fear of dying when they destroy the fallen), readers should be more aware of where Taylor stands mentally in regards to her transformation, and - because she is the true antagonist of the full story arc, readers need to be clear on where she stands with her former best friend, the protagonist, Siena.

    Tips for Improvement

    Develop the storyline from Siena discovering a power at the beginning of the book. Further develop Siena and Maya's friendship. Reduce the number of random people attacked by the fallen. We get the gesture from just one. Show more where Taylor's at mentally before she is converted to the fallen, so we can buy her transition to a ruthless vengeful power force. Show how Joe feels when Zach returns to try to get Siena back. Come up with new and unique additions like maybe a same-sex romantic relationship for Maya, more time spent in Turkey, better-developed friendship between Maya and Siena.

    Brief

    Two of the three chosen people to end the evil Fallen embark on a journey in search of the third chosen and the missing artifact, but when a new power force rises from the Fallen, they must act fast to save humanity.

    What We Liked

    Fantastic, adventurous YAs are always a potential success, due to the genre's large and enthusiastic fanbase. "Bloodlines" brings a heroine who's suffered many losses, yet is strong enough to keep on fighting for the good side. Siena is resourceful, and when she teams up with strong, independent Maya, they can't be stopped. Her mission is intriguing: finding the missing artifact and the third chosen one to finally destroy the evil Fallen, bad angels who feed on human suffering.

    Film: "Bloodlines" has a rich thrilling narrative, and if adapted into a movie would keep the audience at the edge of their seats from beginning to end. The adventurous journey that takes place in Canada, US, Turkey, and Ireland can bring to the younger audience a great summer escape, if released theatrically or in streaming platforms. The story has incredible visuals that would appeal to viewers, like Zach and Siena's flight over the Baldwin cliff or the underworld cave of the Fallen's lair.

    TV: "Bloodlines" would work great as a TV series, as Siena and Maya's journey is long and in a serialized narrative, each episode could dive deep into the details of the world and the characters who inhabit it. Both Siena and Maya have complicated pasts to be unraveled, the story has an antagonist who is under construction, Joe and Zach each hide their own skeletons, and time and space to develop the story can only play in favor of creating a strong TV show targeted to young adult audiences.

    Key points: Love triangle; Angels and Demons; Ancient artifacts and prophecies; Set in multiple countries; Diverse characters

    Synopsis

    Siena is happy to leave behind the town of Banff, as well as her tragic and complicated past, to go to Baldwin, where she'll start college. She's still haunted by flashback nightmares about Taylor, her best friend who disappeared, Seth, her friend who tried to murder her, and Zach, her ex-boyfriend and guardian angel who went out on a mission. In Turkey, Maya loses her only living relative, her aunt, and goes alone to start college in Baldwin, where she meets her roommate Siena. Siena is ready to start a new life - she befriends Maya, and Eddi, their neighbor. She doesn't tell anyone she's one of the three chosen people to defeat the fallen. When Zach surprisingly returns from his mission, Siena happily believes they will be together again, but Zach informs her they must end their romance, as ordered by Zach's superior, the Holy One.

    Siena tries to move on with the help of her new friends, but has a hard time. Until, one day, she meets Joe, an intelligent and handsome college student with whom she begins a relationship. Meanwhile, Maya needs to travel back to Turkey to deal with paperwork regarding her aunt's will, and Eddi relies on Siena to overcome her loneliness, and hide her drinking problem.

    But when Eddi mysteriously dies, Siena realizes the fallen is involved. Maya returns to Baldwin, and Siena notices on her things a proof that Maya is also a chosen one. Siena tells Maya everything about the fallen, the prophecy, and the missing artifact, she encourages Maya to find it.

    Maya, Siena, and Joe embark on a trip to Turkey to try to find the missing artifact. Maya realizes it must be in the museum her aunt took her to visit every day, and she goes to look for it, but find it gone. When she returns home, she is attacked and kidnapped. When Siena and Joe find out Maya was kidnapped, they go after her, only to find out that Shiloh, an angel who was previously interested in Zach and was Eddi's roommate, was behind it all. Shiloh reveals to have switched to the Fallen's side, that Joe is also one of the fallen, and that she was responsible for Eddi's death. Infuriated, Siena tries to fight her, but loses; regretful, Joe confesses he was forced to become a fallen, but his loyalty and love lays with Siena, and to prove it he kills Shiloh, saving Siena and Maya.

    Meanwhile, in the Fallen's lair, Taylor - Siena's best friend who was kidnapped - is converted by the fallen; she becomes a power force and seeks revenge against everyone on her previous life.

    The trio returns home to Baldwin, and before they can figure out their next step, the police informs Siena that her brother was attacked and is in a coma. Siena and Maya travel to Banff, to take care of Siena's brother. Joe joins them, as a surprise, but Siena feels too overwhelmed by him and asks him to leave. However, before he does, Siena's brother wakes up and she finds out her mentor, Alo, is missing. As per Alo's instructions, Siena knows she and Maya are in danger, so she retrieves her artifact and Alo's instructions on where to hide. Meanwhile, Taylor - now strong and mean - murders her mother and sister who never treated her well.

    Siena, Maya, and Joe head to an address in Ireland, where they'll find help. But instead, find a place in ruins. Malachi, an old wise man, find them and take them to his house, where he teaches them about the ritual they'll need to perform once they find the third chosen, now in the fallen's custody. Zach asks Siena to her forgiveness, and joins their mission.

    With Malachi's help, they are able to find the fallen's lair. Joe, Siena, and Zach enter the cave to look for the third chosen; they find him, and Joe pretends to be one of the fallen to let the chosen go and murder their leader. On their escape, Siena tries to find Alo, but he's too hurt to survive. On their way out, a snake bits Siena, who gets severely sick.

    Zach takes care of Siena, at Malachi's house, until she's better again to fight. Malachi tells them they need to perform the ritual, even though they are missing the third artifact, because the fallen are getting too powerful to be stopped. When Siena, Maya, Joe, Zach, and the third chosen leave Malachi's house to buy supplies, Taylor arrives looking for the chosen ones. Malachi doesn't tell her anything, but she murders him nonetheless.

    When Siena and her friends return, they find Malachi dead and rush to escape the place before whatever killed him kills them too.

    About The Author

    Well travelled nurse/writer.