I kiss your wounds
Logline
This the second book In the trilogy about women in the Camorra Mafia. The fight for Vengance and justice waged by three women.
Genre
Action,Crime,Detective,Suspense/Thriller,Mystery
Short Summary
Rosetta Baldacci a powerfull Camorra boss finds herself in thr cross fire between two other powerfull women wanting revenge. Lady Catherina wants kill Rosetta for killing the men in her clan and to rebuild. Assistant magistrate Teresa wants destroy the Camorra .
One women jubilant, one dead one still to succed.
Setting
Naples
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain
Plot - Other Elements
Twist
Mature Audience Themes
Extreme Violence
Main Character Details
Name: Rosetta Baldacci
Age: 30s
Gender: Female
Role: Antagonist
Key Traits: Badass,Villainous,Sexy,Power Hungry,Secretive,Sophisticated,Leader
Additional Character Details
Name: Lady Catherina
Age: 60s
Gender: Female
Role: Emotional
Key Traits: Villainous,Power Hungry,Selfless,Skillful,Desperate,Criminal,Confident,Secretive,Manipulative,Leader,Religious,Badass
Additional Character Details
Name: Teresa Caporaso.
Age: 30s
Gender: Female
Role: protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Sexy,Complex,Patriotic,Blunt,Decisive,Outspoken,Skillful,Sarcastic,Leader,Educated
Additional Character Details
The author has not yet written this
Development Pitch
The three book trilogy is suiable for a TV series because it deals with the vows two fourteen year old girls make to get revenge for the deaths of their fathers. Their rise to powerful position in there chosen fields inorder to fulill their ambitions. The toll it takes on their lovelife and friendships.
Genre
ACTION, DRAMA, SUSPENSE
Brief
Three women reach a high position in a business dominated by men. They come from different families and have distinct goals, but they have something in common: they seek revenge and fight for justice.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Pace: GOOD
Premise: GOOD
Structure: FAIR
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
It is accurate.
Draw of Story
It's about women as leaders of powerful families. The mafia universe is usually dominated by men in films and series, so it's a good surprise to see three women as the leads of the story.
Possible Drawbacks
It sounds very repetitive. The characters only talk about money and power and the other clans. It could diversify a little the subject.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
Three women seeking revenge in the middle of this masculine universe.
Fanbase Potential
The book is part of a trilogy, and it could find its niche and fanbase, but I believe it needs further development to do so.
Awards Potential
It could have some potential if it focuses on the internal conflicts of these three women who had their families destroyed by this violent and competitive universe. Other than that, it's just a story full of violence and action.
Envisioned Budget
MEDIUM BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
THE KITCHEN - THREE THIEVES' WIVES DECIDE TO TAKE OVER THEIR HUSBAND'S BUSINESS. WIDOWS - THREE WIDOWS TAKE OVER THEIR HUSBAND'S BUSINESS TO EXECUTE A PLAN THE HUSBANDS DIDN'T HAVE THE CHANCE TO COMPLETE.
What’s New About the Story
The original part is that these women are not wives of someone who died. They are powerful themselves.
Lead Characters
Three different women seeking revenge for their families. They are very different, but they have a similar past and present, a similar goal: to get revenge and justice.
Uniqueness of Story
Not a rare gem. It needs further development in many different areas to achieve excellence.
Possible Formats
Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The author needs to improve the writing style. It's too on the nose, too descriptive and explanatory. The dialogue is very flat, insipid, and it doesn't sound very natural. The whole thing sounds repetitive. The dialogue and actions are all based on the same plot, and we spend 200 pages reading about mafia, money, violence, the destroyed family, and nothing else. Aside from their high positions, they are human beings, and I feel these women could show more of their internal conflicts, their fears, their weaknesses. They would look far more interesting this way. The pace and structure are Ok, but it could maintain the tension and suspense far better. It's all so repetitive that, after some pages, we don't feel this excitement anymore. I'd like to know more about the characters to root for them, but they are all very flat. I believe this story has the potential for an interesting series/film, but the author needs to deeply explore the plot's possibilities to find a better way of telling this story.