The Milk Moon Assassin
ACTION ADVENTURE DRAMA EPIC MYSTERY POLITICAL WAR HISTORICAL FICTION SUSPENSE/THRILLER ROMANCE
20th Century (multiple decades),2000s
L. A. Couriel
A Mossad assassin devoted to a private, unauthorized, search of a MIA soldier, nearly 40 years after the massacre of his entire platoon. Having ruined every relationship in his life, he resides in his isolated homestead to encounter his main suspect, while psychologically scrutinizing dark memories.
From the veranda of his homestead Moshe Roth a legendary Mossad Assassin, is executing his unauthorized rescue & revenge plan. Having tragically ruined every relationship in his life, he is trying to recollect the fragments and settle a bloody account killing his best friend, the suspected captor.
With an abundance of twists and turns in the last chapters, unexpectedly, the true end happens only in the epilogue... where Moshe reunites in a Vermont forest with his true love, the S.A.D former agent .
Oberammergau, Judean Hills Israel, Paris, South wales, London, Beirut, Tel Aviv
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest,Tragedy,Other,Overcoming Monster/Villain
Plot - Other Elements
Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions,Twist
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Moshe Roth Vardi
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aggressive,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Desperate,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Sexy,Patriotic,Skillful,Romantic,Secretive,Seductive,Sophisticated,Unapologetic,Lone Wolf,Visionary
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Adventurous,Confident,Complex,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Insecure,Sexy,Romantic,Sarcastic,Seductive,Unapologetic,Blunt,Patriotic,Secretive
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Badass,Masculine,Aggressive,Villainous,Narcisstic,Complex,Uneducated,Confident,Criminal,Blunt,Decisive,Desperate,Power Hungry,Skillful,Greedy,Secretive,Sophisticated,Unapologetic,Lone Wolf
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Masculine,Badass,Aggressive,Villainous,Narcisstic,Charming,Complex,Sexy,Confident,Crazy,Patriotic,Decisive,Power Hungry,Outspoken,Faithful,Skillful,Romantic,Secretive,Heroic,Seductive,Sophisticated,Leader
The Milk Moon Assassin's pages represent a preferred choice for a TV series of 16-32 chapters . Simply put - it has so much to it! Containing an aboundent of thrilling issues ranging from desperate love, betrayal, blood-freezing vengeance, sophisticated espionage, bloody war, romance, brotherhood and rivalry, Mossad assassinations, heartbreaking menage-a-trois scenes to in depth psychological scrutiny. It has a sophisticated yet well streaming structure. A critic described it as follows: "This is not your classic zip bang kill. It is a novel deeply rooted in the Middle East, and the complexities of cultures, people, history, religion that intersect in that region...The characters are lively, complex, and well developed... There are frequent flashbacks filling in the history and illuminating the characters and their relationships - and the ending, which ties things together is one of the most brilliant and satisfying I have encountered in a long time." Remember, your movie or TV series will glue the audience to stay with it "like a good archaeological excavation - the whole structure is only discovered bit by bit, in layers - but when the whole excavation is revealed, there is a sense of completion and satisfaction and even wonder." Imagine all this blended into locations in Germany, England, Paris and Israel's desert and ancient cities! A memorable suggested soundtrack, and crystalized smart dialogues will keep your viewers at the edge of their seats.
ACTION, WAR, SUSPENSE
A complexed Mossad assassin seeks revenge against a former friend and saving a comrade from the past. However, the truth seems to be much more complicated than he imagined.
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, it does, with the exception that it isn't actually based on a true story.
Draw of Story
The premise, that seems exciting and interesting to read.
Things take too much time to happen and the narrative is exaggeratedly descriptive. Sometimes, it could be less contemplative and more straight-to-the-point in order to hold the reader's interest.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
A revenge story full of revelations and reversing of expectations.
Not exactly a large fanbase, but it could be successful with a less complicated and unecessarily long narrative.
It could because of the main theme, but there would have to be changes and major revisions in order for it to work as an adaptatiom.
Similar Films/TV Series
MUNICH - THE ISRAELI GOVERNMENT SENDS A SECRET MISSION TO AVENGE THE ASSASSINATION OF 11 OF THE COUNTRY'S ATHLETES DURING THE OLYMPIC GAMES. FIRST BLOOD - AFTER BEING IMPRISONED AND TORTURED BY THE POLICE, A TRAUMATIZED VIETNAM VETERAN USES HIS BATTLE SKILLS TO FIGHT AGAINST MALICIOUS LAW REPRESENTATIVES.
What’s New About the Story
It is a different assessment for a revenge story, especially considering it is located outside the American reality. However, it could be more direct in order to create suspense and lead the audience to care about its characters.
They are all dubious, aggressive, somewhat contemplative and phylosophic, and also psychologically complex.
Uniqueness of Story
Not really, the narrative should be more clear and direct in order for the story and a possible adaptation to work for the audience.
Film - Streaming, Film - Studio, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The main necessary change is that the narrative would have to be more direct, which doesn't mean leaving aside psychological complexity, poetic moments or contemplation scenes, but making clear that the story is constantly advancing. This is essential, because the book and a hypothetical adaptation both need to keep the audience's attention so that the revelations and surprises that the narrative holds along the way work and manage to cause an impact. Other than that, the book itself feels too long, and the excess of characters might confuse the readers. For a film adaptation, there would need to be some cuts to the general story. The way it is, it would be more appropriate for a miniseries adaptation, that would allow for further character development and considerably more screen time for the story to unravel. However, even in the case of a TV adaptation, wide revisions would be necessary, since the narrative feels somewhat bloated and exaggeratedly long for the story it has to tell. The fact that the author's writing style is good helps a lot, but a cleaner, more direct approach would have greater chances of succeeding and attracting larger audiences for this intriguing premise.