Handmaidens of Rock

Linda Gould lindag971@aol.com 5036551536794

DRAMA HISTORICAL FICTION YOUNG ADULT COMEDY

1960s & '70s

Linda Gould

Logline

A rock band forms at a high school during the late 1960s, featuring lead guitarist Preston, keyboardist Neal, and drummer Brad. As the band moves beyond its roots, three ambitious "groupies” tag along, aspiring to bigger roles: Candy, a journalist; Hope, a wannabe model; and Theda, a thespian.

Genre

Drama,Historical Fiction,Young Adult,Comedy

Short Summary

In 1975, new author Candy Collins is being interviewed on a Los Angeles talk show about her book, entitled Homegrown. She says it’s about a rock and roll band, but also about the death of a dream, the death of a friend, and the death of innocence.


Candy is back in the television studio, having relived the band's story on the air. She sings one of the lyrics she helped to write, and denies that she misses the band, but she’s obviously lying.

Setting

Maryland (DC area); London; Scotland; southern California.

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Rags to Riches,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Tragedy

Plot - Other Elements

Coming of Age,Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Language/Profanity

Main Character Details

Name: Candy Collins

Age: Seventeen at beginning, twenty-three at end.

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Aspiring,Clumsy,Complex,Faithful,Naive,Romantic,Empathetic,Insecure,Modest,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

Name: Hope

Age: 17 to 23

Gender: Female

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Aspiring,Strong Moral Code,Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Confident,Decisive,Greedy,Seductive,Sarcastic,Outspoken,Sexy,Narcisstic,Heartthrob,Manipulative,Unapologetic

Additional Character Details

Name: Theda

Age: 17 to 23

Gender: Female

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Aspiring,Adventurous,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Heartthrob,Educated,Narcisstic,Blunt,Power Hungry,Outspoken,Seductive,Manipulative,Leader,Unapologetic,Sophisticated

Additional Character Details

Name: Preston Andrews

Age: 17 to 23

Gender: Male

Role: tempter

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Greedy,Heartthrob,Leader,Masculine,Narcisstic,Sexy,Blunt,Power Hungry,Outspoken,Sarcastic,Secretive,Seductive,Manipulative,Unapologetic

Development Pitch

At a suburban Maryland high school during the late 1960s, a rock and roll band forms and begins to gain local attention. Founder and lead guitarist Preston, accompanied by keyboardist Neal and drummer Brad, cranks out original tunes as well as rock classics. After moving on to college and signing a management contract, the group makes the controversial decision to replace Brad with drama major Clive. As their freshman year ends, they decide to pursue a lead in England. Tagging along on this adventure are the three girls who love them: Candy, an aspiring journalist; Hope, a wannabe model and fashion designer; and Theda, a thespian who also fancies herself a musician equal to the guys. The group moves on to further adventures at a Scottish commune, and later UCLA in California. Along the way they encounter a peace-loving guru, a flaky band manager, and a radical engineering professor, as well as love rivals for the musicians’ attention. The girls, ambitious in their own right, are determined not to be mere “handmaidens of rock.” But it is not until a vengeful Brad catches up to the band at a festival, and violence ensues, that the three must prove their worth as grown women. Handmaidens of Rock captures the adventure and turbulence of the "sex and drugs and rock and roll" era as three girls forge their own identities apart from the men they idolize.

About The Author

I'm a career bureaucrat, now retired from the Department of Labor. I earned a bachelor's degree in English from Western Maryland College and a master's degree in political science from American University in Washington, DC. I am the author of several self-published novels, some of which have been converted to screenplays. I live in Silver Spring, Maryland.

Target Audiences

Age: 35-54,18-34,55+

Target Gender: Female Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Hard Copy Available

No

WGA Number

D5669C75

Genre

DRAMA, ROMANCE, COMEDY

Brief

Candy is a girl who falls in love with a member of a high school rock band and begins to live adventures with the band. In the end, she realizes that she only left her life on hold to live the life of this man, and decides to change and follow her dreams.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

SCRIPT

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

It does.

Draw of Story

Candy's teenage life, with dreams, adventure, and frustration, could be that of any of us, making the story more appealing to the audience. The story going on in the 60s is also a plus to make the narrative look more interesting.

Possible Drawbacks

The switching between the different viewpoints is confusing in its necessity. The characters somewhat interact and discover new things regarding Albricht, but sometimes the pacing of their own subplots can be confusing with the large gaps in between the different characters. Focusing more on one character's journey with other side characters or having the shifts be more interconnected might help make the subplots feel more cohesive. The mechanism of making the protagonist be telling her story on a TV show. The climax of the story loses its impact due to the use of this tool.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The universe of these young people who, in the 60s, live sexual freedom and the longing to live their dreams. The subtle comedy tone that permeates the script also adds an even more entertaining touch to this story.

Fanbase Potential

If the characters are better developed, the conflicts better established, and there is a heavier dramatic charge in the narrative- showing the difficult side of adolescence, in understanding their own identity, their wishes, who they are- the story could attract a larger fanbase that would feel represented by these characters.

Awards Potential

I don't think so because this story goes to the side of subtle comedy with some teen points of conflict. For potential awards, the teen drama could be more evident, more deeply explored, more pungent. The conflicts here seem superficial to reach the potential for awards.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

ON THE ROAD: A TRIO OF YOUNG PEOPLE TAKE THE ROAD SEARCHING FOR A LIFE OF FREEDOM AND EXCITEMENT. GIRL (1998): ANDREA MARR BREAKS THROUGH HER PROTECTED EXISTENCE AND LEARNS TO NAVIGATE HIGH SCHOOL, RELATIONSHIPS, AND ENDS UP FALLING FOR THE FRONTMAN OF A BAND.

What’s New About the Story

The story is not very original. The mix of rock band with groupies going on a tour and experiencing good and bad moments is not unique. Perhaps the fact that the protagonist wrote a book on the subject and is telling her story on a TV show, but even so, this detail is not relevant to the story. The writing of this book could be of greater importance for the protagonist. The book could become more present throughout history.

Lead Characters

They are ordinary characters, young people trying to live experiences and free love. These ordinary conflicts give an "indie" look to the story. However, as we see countless characters, I believe they could be a little better defined. It seems that everyone sounds similar. Perhaps the protagonist has received special attention, but the secondary characters could be improved.

Uniqueness of Story

No, it's not a rare gem as it is. The author has a good hand at inserting funny moments into a drama. However, the script would need further development to reach a uniqueness level.

Possible Formats

Film

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

The characters have an appeal because they represent a significant time in our lives: youth. However, the plot seems to get a little lost. There are so many characters and subplots that sometimes we forget about the central conflict. And this conflict does not seem strong enough to hold back the action. Not that Candy's relationship is not relevant. It is indeed a conflictive love story and quite enthusiastic, but the characters seem to react little and in a way that is not very dramatic and interesting to these conflicts. Some actions seem unreliable too, like when Brad returns and kills himself on stage. It would be necessary to increase his behavior to not catch us by a surprise that does not seem important or relevant. The use of Candy's book resource to tell the story sounds too disconnected from the whole narrative. She's a journalist, but writing a memoir and talking about it on a TV talk show seems pointless.

Tips for Improvement

A greater focus on the central narrative would be necessary. The subplots give the story an agitation, but they seem just addition that does not change things much. Perhaps if it worked as a series, the story would have more appeal in this way, but being a film, the subplots should be cohesive, less numerous, and relevant to the central theme. Despite being ordinary young people and the greatness being just that, the characters could be a little more distinct. They all sound very similar. Giving a more pronounced voice to each one and perhaps reducing the number of these characters a little, the narrative could sound less tiring and more enjoyable. If the Morning Show's interview is essential for the author, it should permeate the script more. It appears on the first pages, and when it returns at the end of the script, we don't even remember it anymore. The weight of the end of the story also falls a little with the use of this resource. The story ends, and we still go back to the studio to see what the host thinks of what he just heard. It doesn't seem necessary, and it would need to gain more presence and reason to exist to sound less random. Conflicts are juvenile, so they sound simpler, but they need a little more strength even though they are usual conflicts. The guy who seems to be in love and suddenly doesn't care about Candy is credible, but the way it is narrated, the way it unfolds, sounds artificial. He begs Candy to stay by his side, go with him on tours, live with him, and suddenly he tells her that their marriage was fake and that she should know that. It doesn't seem to make sense. Thinking about how to make these conflicts stronger is fundamental. The author knows how to mix conflicts with a hint of humor, and the story is entertaining, but it should be improved to stand out.

Logline

A rock band forms at a high school during the late 1960s, featuring lead guitarist Preston, keyboardist Neal, and drummer Brad. As the band moves beyond its roots, three ambitious "groupies” tag along, aspiring to bigger roles: Candy, a journalist; Hope, a wannabe model; and Theda, a thespian.

Short Summary

In 1975, new author Candy Collins is being interviewed on a Los Angeles talk show about her book, entitled Homegrown. She says it’s about a rock and roll band, but also about the death of a dream, the death of a friend, and the death of innocence.


Candy is back in the television studio, having relived the band's story on the air. She sings one of the lyrics she helped to write, and denies that she misses the band, but she’s obviously lying.

FEEDBACK

At a suburban Maryland high school during the late 1960s, a rock and roll band forms and begins to gain local attention. Founder and lead guitarist Preston, accompanied by keyboardist Neal and drummer Brad, cranks out original tunes as well as rock classics. After moving on to college and signing a management contract, the group makes the controversial decision to replace Brad with drama major Clive. As their freshman year ends, they decide to pursue a lead in England. Tagging along on this adventure are the three girls who love them: Candy, an aspiring journalist; Hope, a wannabe model and fashion designer; and Theda, a thespian who also fancies herself a musician equal to the guys. The group moves on to further adventures at a Scottish commune, and later UCLA in California. Along the way they encounter a peace-loving guru, a flaky band manager, and a radical engineering professor, as well as love rivals for the musicians’ attention. The girls, ambitious in their own right, are determined not to be mere “handmaidens of rock.” But it is not until a vengeful Brad catches up to the band at a festival, and violence ensues, that the three must prove their worth as grown women. Handmaidens of Rock captures the adventure and turbulence of the "sex and drugs and rock and roll" era as three girls forge their own identities apart from the men they idolize.

About The Author

I'm a career bureaucrat, now retired from the Department of Labor. I earned a bachelor's degree in English from Western Maryland College and a master's degree in political science from American University in Washington, DC. I am the author of several self-published novels, some of which have been converted to screenplays. I live in Silver Spring, Maryland.

Mature Audience Themes

Language/Profanity

Characters

Main Character

Name: Candy Collins

Age: Seventeen at beginning, twenty-three at end.

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Aspiring,Clumsy,Complex,Faithful,Naive,Romantic,Empathetic,Insecure,Modest,Strong Moral Code

Character 1

Name: Hope

Age: 17 to 23

Gender: Female

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Aspiring,Strong Moral Code,Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Confident,Decisive,Greedy,Seductive,Sarcastic,Outspoken,Sexy,Narcisstic,Heartthrob,Manipulative,Unapologetic

Character 2

Name: Theda

Age: 17 to 23

Gender: Female

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Aspiring,Adventurous,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Heartthrob,Educated,Narcisstic,Blunt,Power Hungry,Outspoken,Seductive,Manipulative,Leader,Unapologetic,Sophisticated

Character 3

Name: Preston Andrews

Age: 17 to 23

Gender: Male

Role: tempter

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Greedy,Heartthrob,Leader,Masculine,Narcisstic,Sexy,Blunt,Power Hungry,Outspoken,Sarcastic,Secretive,Seductive,Manipulative,Unapologetic