Carnage Book One: The Story Of Us

Lesley Jones

Book Cover

GENRE

YOUNG ADULT ROMANCE FUNNY DRAMA EPIC FAMILY

    Core Theme

    JEALOUSY, LOVE, LUST

    TIME PERIOD

    1980s & '90s,20th Century (multiple decades),Contemporary

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    365, ROCKSTAR

    CHARACTER LIST

    GEORGIA LAYTON (F/11-30S) - LEAD. JEALOUS, DEPENDENT, SEXUALLY-UNINHIBITED, OUTGOING.

    SEAN MCCARTHY (M/TEENS - 30S) - LARGE SUPPORTING. MUSICALLY-GIFTED, MAGNETIC, HUMBLE. GEORGIA'S CHILDHOOD SWEETHEART TURNED SOULMATE.

    CAM KING (M/30S-40S) - LARGE SUPPORTING. TALL, DARK, MYSTERIOUS, VIOLENT, INTENSE. GEORGIA'S LOVER.

    JIMMIE (F/11-30S) - SMALL SUPPORTING. GEORGIA'S CHILDHOOD BEST FRIEND.

    MARLEY LAYTON (M/TEENS-30S) - SMALL SUPPORTING. GEORGIA'S BROTHER AND SEAN'S BANDMATE.

    Logline

    A boy who dreamed about rock and roll. A girl who dreamed about a boy. A story that spans over forty years. From childhood sweethearts, and back yard band practice, to sell out arenas, the sex, drugs & media intrusion which accompany fame & fortune, to obsessive love, betrayal, loss and learning.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

    Target Gender: Female Leaning

    Setting

    London/Europe/USA

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Amazon: EBook/Paperback Cherry Hill Publishing: Audio Book

    Year Published: 2013

    Starting Description

    Georgia Layton is just eleven years old when she first lays eyes on Sean McCarthy, her brother's new bandmate. Without a shadow of a doubt, she is absolutely positive he's the only one for her. But as the pair grow up, and the band makes it big, will that childhood connection be enough?

    Ending Description

    After four years apart, Sean & Georgia finally reunite, but nothing comes easy for these two. An ectopic pregnancy causes more pain for the newly married couple, but they battle their way through & with Georgia finally pregnant again & due to give birth any day, they finally appear to have made it.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    Yes

    ISBN

    B00IERA5RY

    Mature Audience Themes

    Nudity, Language/Profanity,Substance Abuse

    Plot - Other Elements

    Coming of Age,Twist

    Plot - Premise

    Tragedy,Rags to Riches,Internal Journey/Rebirth

    Main Character Details

    Name: Georgia Rae Layton

    Age: 11-50

    Gender: Female

    Role: Emotional

    Key Traits: Badass,Complex,Confident,Crazy,Engaging,Insecure,Naive,Sexy,Blunt,Funny,Romantic,Unapologetic

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Sean McCarthy

    Age: 13-33

    Gender: Male

    Role: Emotional

    Key Traits: Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Heartthrob,Masculine,Sexy,Romantic

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Cameron King

    Age: 32-62

    Gender: Male

    Role: tempter

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Masculine,Sexy,Criminal,Heartthrob,Leader,Romantic,Funny,Blunt,Unapologetic

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Marley Layton (Georgia's Brother. Book 3 Is From His POV)

    Age: 13-60

    Gender: Male

    Role: sidekick

    Key Traits: Aspiring,Adventurous,Charming,Complex,Confident,Crazy,Engaging,Faithful,Heartthrob,Insecure,Sexy,Blunt,Funny,Romantic,Sarcastic,Seductive

    Development Pitch

    The Carnage Series is not a romance collection, nor is it a love story. There is love, and there is romance, but there is so much more. This is an epic story, covering the realities and often confronting issues of growing up around London in the '80s, to adulting and living life under the scrutiny of the press and social media in the present day. Carnage is a story about close family ties, fame, fortune, betrayal, lies and tragedy. There is heartbreak mixed with humour. Despite Carnage being a world-famous band, the theme running continuously through the plot lines is that no matter the fame and fortune, family is everything. There are rock stars, alpha males & East End London gangsters. Essex Girls, night club owners, and devious villains, who just won't go away. With so many interesting & well-developed side characters, this series of books would make a thrilling, angsty, emotional, gritty & often hilarious, rollercoaster ride of a series, or series of movies. With characters of all ages & social backgrounds, it's audience appeal is broad.

    Genre

    ROMANCE, MATURE AUDIENCE, DRAMA

    Brief

    Georgia and Sean are childhood sweathearts whose innocent crushes for one another blossom into an intense romance. As Sean's career as a rockstar takes off, he is falsely accused of rape, and it results in a 4 year long rift between him and Georgia. In this time, Georgia starts falling for a local gangster named Cam, but she is swept off of her feet by Sean once again before long. Georgia, then, must navigate fame, temptation, and tabloid attention in her adult relationship with rock icon Sean.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    FIRST PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    Yes, it seems like a perfectly fair and accurate reflection. It is sure of itself and thorough, but without spoiling too much. It still leaves a bit of welcome mystery.

    Draw of Story

    What drew me into the story immediately was Georgia's juvenile point of view. Everything in her world is elevated-- The sights she sees, the sounds she hears, the feelings she feels-- They are all turned up to 11. Hers is quite a warped and intense reality.

    Possible Drawbacks

    What made me want to put the book down was how distinctly unsympathetic Georgia is. It's easy to access her world and point of view at first, but it becomes tired and unfulfilling to live in it in large part due to her problematic personality. In essence, it feels like Georgia is entirely dominated by either lust or envy with little other emotion or character to color her in outside of the two. What is particularly off-putting is how Georgia constantly puts down other women. For example, when a woman accuses Sean of rape, although we later find out it was false, Georgia besmirches the alleged victim, slut-shaming her. On numerous occasions, Georgia spats with women who lust after Sean, and she even mercilessly beats a woman late in the text, even going so far as to say she would murder her and only feel remorse if she got caught. None of this is to consider the fact that Georgia sort of cheats on Cam and later definitely cheats on Sean, even implying that the child she is carrying is his when in all likelihood it is not. It exceedingly deprives the audience of any inkling to root for Georgia, which makes much of its drama, stakes, and suspense intentions fall completely flat. All in all, if someone is reading this work for its carnal value, so be it, but the profound lack of dignity, complexity, or sympathy for its lead character very well may prove to be a fatal flaw.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The hook is that this story is jam-packed with eroticism to where it not just borders on--but effectively is--pornography. There may be limited value to be had for those seeking character or narrative or theme, but those seeking an erotic romp will get just what they are looking for.

    Fanbase Potential

    No, this could not have a large fan base. It seems to cater toward a niche portion of a single quadrant, and it also seems to lack the complexity and dramatic heft of erotic movies past.

    Awards Potential

    No, candidly this is far from an awards contender. It is far too melodramatic, lacking substantive thematic value, and is geared much more toward erotic fiction than to more traditional dramatic and narrative storytelling.

    Envisioned Budget

    LOW BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    365, ROCKSTAR

    What’s New About the Story

    What is original about this story, for better or worse, it is main character in Georgia. Her emotions are extreme to the point of overwhelming, and her world feels hyperbolic in every sense. It makes the experience through her eyes feel particularly colorful and potent, which is a sure-handed execution and even achievement, to be sure. However, the experience is significantly marred by her profoundly unsympathetic qualities, which jar with the intentions to earn the audience's investment into her plights and desires.

    Lead Characters

    As noted, Georgia stands out for her uniquely intense point of view. She lives in rather black and white, all or nothing kind of world. Her emotions intoxicate her and, by proxy, the audience. It is quite a distinct experience to be in her shoes and to bear witness to her quick judgments and to her lightning strike emotions. It sure keeps the story moving.

    Uniqueness of Story

    This is not a rare gem for a couple of reasons. For one, as has been duly explored, Georgia fails to earn sufficient audience sympathy. Yes, it can be a shallow, obvious note that a character is not "likable" enough, and that it not necessarily the problem in itself. The problem, rather, is that because of Georgia's routinely and obviously low character, it risks disincentivizing the audience from rooting for her, while the central cruxes of drama are entirely dependent on that. The eroticism is definitely a priority in this text. However, it should also be noted that much of it comes across as repetitive and unrewarding. It feels like every sex scene is written from the same or similar template. There is nary a narrative escalation or catharsis within each. More could be done to imbue each scene with more character-driven, dramatic, and thematic payoff.

    Possible Formats

    Film: Indie

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    This is a work in progress in that more could be done to flesh out and earn sympathy for the main character in Georgia, who, in the text's current form, is largely a passenger in her own story and who exhibits many personal qualities that make it difficult to identify with or root for her. Also, it seems that many of the sex scenes exceedingly rhyme with or borrow from one another, letting several--especially in the second half of this text--feel quite stale and unrewarding. More can be done to imbue each scene with consequence and payoff aside from from the obvious erotic intentions.

    Tips for Improvement

    Mainly, the author would need to do another pass to hopefully flesh out and better ground Georgia. There could--and probably should--be much more incentive to root for Georgia to be happy to be rewarded with her desires in life. It's a challenge in that she seems to often work against her own interests at times, as has been thoroughly touched upon prior.

    Brief

    The story follows the spicy and often tumultuous relationship between Georgia and Sean, childhood sweethearts whose lives become complicated and fraught with scandal and temptation when Sean's band skyrockets to worldwide success.

    What We Liked

    Suffice to say, this work goes all in on the eroticism. There is a sense that the author goes further than others might, with not just the amount of sex, but also with the level of vivid detail. The Fifty Shades of Grey films might feel vanilla in comparison. All of it stems from the point of view of the main character in Georgia, someone who seems to see and experience the world with heightened emotion, sensitivity, and intrigue. This makes living in her shoes a rather potent and explosive experience.

    Film: This could perhaps make for a solid adaptation to film in that there is no question to be had about this work's verve, spice, and impact. Jam packed with sex, drugs, and rock and roll, this work could very well constitute a vicarious experience of being in the orbit of a rockstar. The melodrama it generates it intriguing and high-stakes, too. All in all, there are more than enough popcorn moments to fill a 90-minute to 2-hour block of time. Seekers of the unbridled erotic, at least, will get exactly what they are looking for.

    TV: This work could perhaps lend itself well to a TV adaptation in that it traverses several decades to time. It would be an interesting conceit to have an episode tackle Sean and Georgia's early teen years, an episode cover their later teen years, and so on. The longer, more patient format afforded by the small screen could be just what is needed to tell this epic story and to more carefully and closely track the rise of Sean's band to superstardom. Moreover, the inclusion of the mob element in the middle third of this text could provide some welcome drama and complexity for a span of several episodes if fleshed out. All in all, there is more than enough here to sustain a season of television.

    Key points:
    1. The span of the story-- An epic scale lasting decades gives time for the emotional components to mature.
    2. The eroticism-- This work knows exactly what it is doing and what its priority is.
    3. The mob angle-- The inclusion of mob-violence and intrigue is a kind of wild card element in this work and creates opportunity for expansion.
    4. The point of view-- While erratic and challenging, Georgia sees the world in bright color and experiences it in the most heightened sensations. Therefore, the audience does, too.
    5. The ending-- A truly out-of-left-field tragic ending that no one will see coming and that everyone will be impacted by.

    Synopsis

    The youngest of three siblings, Georgia has a rather ordinary upbringing alongside her best friend Jimmie. At 11 years old, Georgia becomes smitten by her teen brother Marley's bandmate, Sean McCarthy. Over the next few years, an obvious and innocent mutual attraction evolves into young love. As Sean spends more time developing his musicianship with the band, so does his relationship with Georgia flourish. Soon, they have an intense sexual chemistry, too, and Sean proposes to Georgia at just 16 years old. The band gains more and more traction, which sees that Sean travels and performs a lot, often being swarmed by lusty female fans. This jars Georgia significantly, causing her to lash out with insults and even violence at the women. Georgia also feuds with the sleazy lead singer of the band that Sean's band opens for. Not long after the engagement, a heinous rape allegation is leveraged at Sean and the band. This spurs a profound downward spiral on Georgia's account. She shuts Sean out entirely and begins a years-long stretch of heartbreak and solitude in her hometown.

    Over the years, Georgia continues her studies and even opens a business. However, her social life is completely and totally dead. Slowly, Georgia opens up again, going out with her friends. She begins hooking up with men randomly and dumping them once they profess their romantic feelings for her. At a club one night, she meets the well-built, dark, and handsome Cam King. A courtship begins, but Georgia plays it cool, still hung up on Sean, who is now an international superstar. She is also wary of Cam being 30, a whole decade older. Soon, Georgia gives in and starts dating and hooking up with Cam, and naturally, an intense sexual relationship unfolds. Come to find out, Cam is a notorious gangster with an uneasy relationship with Georgia's family and father, who is also a gangster, we find out. Georgia learns that Sean is still entirely heartbroken about her, despite his fame and success, and she later witnesses Cam murder a rival, shooting him dead. She slowly starts to fall for Cam and to get over Sean. However, none other than Sean makes a reappearance in her life-- committed to winning her back after so many years. Come to find out, the rape allegation was false, and Georgia's mother had been withholding his countless letters and attempts to contact Georgia. Sean sweeps her off her feet, and they have a romantic weekend, while Georgia makes plans to end things with Cam. At a party, Cam returns to town early, and Georgia has the difficult conversation with him before running off with Sean. Georgia tries to keep up with Sean's high rolling lifestyle, and she becomes increasingly rageful over his many suitors. It leads her to even rip one woman's hair out at a club. Meanwhile, Cam's life has deflated entirely, heartbroken over Georgia. She has endless and passionate sex with Sean.

    Years pass as Sean and the band's success takes off even more. Georgia is happy and content with Sean and her life, but she is nagged by the guilt and lingering feelings for Cam. One night, while Sean is away on tour, Georgia has a chance encounter with Cam at a club that he happens to own. After attacking and beating the woman who falsely accused Sean, Georgia and Cam have "hard, nasty, dirty" sex in his office. Not long after, Georgia finds out she is pregnant, most likely with Cam's baby. She tells Sean it's his, though, and he is elated, but she loses the baby not long after that. Later, Georgia advocates that they buy Cam's old house, but Sean is enraged when he finds out, chiding Georgia for her deceit and selfishness. Soon, she finds out that tabloids have caught wind of her assault and affair from the club, and the whole band's team prepares for the blowback. After appeasing the press with a photo shoot, Georgia and Sean get pregnant and prepare for the incoming child. It looks like they are going to get through the scandal just fine, but a freak car accident kills Sean and the baby Georgia is carrying. Georgia wakes in a haze and tries to kill herself several times. She is nearly successful once, but Sean appears to her and encourages her to keep living. Months pass of complete depression, but Georgia gradually takes steps to persevere...

    About The Author

    Lesley Jones was born and raised in Essex, England, but moved to Melbourne, Australia with her husband and three sons in 2006. She now lives on the beautiful Mornington Peninsula with her family and two dogs. Jones' writing career began in 2013 with the publication of her first book, Saviour. She quickly gained a reputation for writing angsty and emotional plot lines, often tackling difficult subjects, led by well developed and often flawed characters. Her third and fourth books, the first two in the Carnage Series, were international bestsellers. When not writing, Jones is an avid reader, admits to being a huge fan of trashy, reality T.V. Often stating the best part of her job is meeting her readers, Jones has been lucky enough to travel from her home in Australia, to attend book signings around the world.