The De-Coding of Jo: Hall of Ignorance
YOUNG ADULT FANTASY SCI-FI LGBT
Lali A. Love
This book is a meld of fantasy, paranormal and science fiction, with a strong appeal to young adult readers (14 years+). It is the first book of the AAA series, incorporating plot driven and coming of age stories of diverse, gender inclusive teenagers struggling with self-identity and belonging.
When a mysterious portal is discovered in the basement of the school's library, a demonic parasite turns her classmates into an army of sleepwalkers. 16-y/o Jo must confront the truth of her reality, her celestial identity, and reveal the mystery of existence within the false matrix.
With the help of her best friends and a Galactic Compass, Jo unleashes the cosmic powers of creation to prevent the Lord of Darkness from enslaving all of humanity into obscurity. Will she be able to decode the artificial system in time to save her friends and the sacred Light?
Toronto, ON, Canada
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth
Plot - Other Elements
Coming of Age,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions
Mature Audience Themes
Main Character Details
Name: Josephine (Jo) Mackenzie
Age: 16 years old
Key Traits: Aspiring,Modest,Complex,Empathetic,Engaging,Outspoken,Faithful,Skillful,Visionary,Heroic,Sophisticated,Strong Moral Code,Leader,Underdog
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Badass,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Skillful,Sarcastic,Secretive,Sophisticated,Unapologetic,Insecure
Additional Character Details
Name: Reyes (Rey)
Key Traits: Underdog,Adventurous,Aggressive,Clumsy,Complex,Desperate,Skillful,Funny,Secretive,Insecure,Naive
Additional Character Details
Name: Zaxden (Zax)
Key Traits: Masculine,Aggressive,Obedient,Complex,Sexy,Patriotic,Religious,Empathetic,Skillful,Faithful,Heartthrob,Secretive,Honorable,Insecure
What would you do if you accidentally discovered a holographic portal into the cosmos, in the basement of your high school’s library? Would you take the leap of faith? The De-Coding of Jo is a meld of fantasy, paranormal and science fiction, with a strong appeal to young adult and new adult readers (14 years+). It is a thought-provoking, compelling, and relatable coming of age story of friendship, self-identity, and perceptions of reality. It is best compared to Euphoria meets A Wrinkle in Time, will elements of The Matrix. With unique and evocative imagery, the well-plotted narration takes the reader on the main character’s (Jo) journey of self-realization and self-actualization. The message is powerful, resonant, with impressive inclusive LGBTQ+ cast. Jo’s best friends are musically talented creatives in the school band, who are all struggling to belong and conform to society (grade 10) and their family's pressures. The characters are rich, vivid souls clawing their way out of the dark. The story aims to inspire readers to appreciate their self-worth and uniqueness, to light the world, to erase conditioned systematic shadows with their inner truth. This would make for an incredible TV series, raising awareness on social issues while empowering the audience to look within for healing and salvation. Incorporating this unique paranormal fantasy with new age modalities & concepts of humanity’s perceived reality would provide a relevant & timely adaption for today’s youth.
ACTION, LGBT, RELIGION, FANTASY
After her classmates are taken by an evil, demonic force, young Jo has to find the power within herself to free them and use love to win the fight against hate.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, it does, but the logline isn't really a logline.
Draw of Story
The set of teenagers struggling to find themselves.
The language used in the fantastical part of the story is hard to follow, turning the reading a bit difficult.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
A fantastical plot happening among common teenagers.
Not really, because, even though the story is about teenagers, most of the elements probably wouldn't connect to them.
Not really. The writing and the fantasy world created here are too confusing.
Similar Films/TV Series
INVASION OF THE BODY SNATCHERS - IN THE FILM, PEOPLE ARE REPLACED BY INVADING ALIENS. FALLEN - A YOUNG GIRL FALLS IN LOVE WITH A BOY, UNAWARE THAT HE IS ACTUALLY AN ANGEL.
What’s New About the Story
It is original to set an invasion of demons inside a high school. However, the two ideas could have a better connection.
They are unhappy about an aspect of their lives, addicted to one drug or another and mostly repressed, but also really good people.
Uniqueness of Story
Not really. The fantastical aspects of the plot should be better developed.
Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Cable
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The main change should be to add some further explanation about the mystical and fantastical aspects of the narrative. As they are now, it remains very difficult to follow and fully understand them, which is a really bad thing for the story. Another problem is the fact that the teenage drama present in the story doesn't seem to connect very well with the whole supernatural part. When hell breaks loose, it all feels a little awkward. In an adaptation, it might be good to try and intertwine both things in a more natural way. Some of the progressive aspects of the narrative are also somewhat weird and forced. It feels exaggerated, like an adult's view about how teenagers behave and interact with each other. Maybe consulting younger advisors would do the narrative some good and give a more spontaneous feel to it.