The Lost Crown

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ADVENTURE ROMANCE ACTION FANTASY MYSTERY SUSPENSE/THRILLER

Contemporary

La Kayshal

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Logline

A symbol of wealth, power and prosperity the Lost Crown was never meant to be found, yet Ryan Johnson defies all myths and sets out on a quest to discover a thousand year old antique.

Genre

Adventure,Romance,Action,Fantasy,Mystery,Suspense/Thriller

Short Summary

Ryan, a lecturer in Archaeology, goes from London to Rajasthan, India in search of a lost crown. On the first day, Ryan's wallet is stolen by a boy, while chasing the thief he gets into a fight, accidentally messes up a beautiful painter's work, mysteriously the boy just disappears in the shrines.


After searching for clues Ryan, Deiva and Christian discover three sapphire stones, each of which has a master of its own. Ryan realises that the stones are keys to an underground chamber which possibly has the lost crown hidden somewhere. But there's a secret enemy lurking in the shadows...

Setting

London University, India (deserts of Rajasthan, Castles in Jaisalmer), Mainly has a fantasy set up of traps.

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Quest

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Nudity

Main Character Details

Name: Ryan Johnson

Age: late 20s

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Charming,Masculine,Confident,Decisive,Heartthrob,Heroic,Educated,Leader,Romantic,Skillful

Additional Character Details

Name: Deiva Chauhan

Age: early 20s

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Confident,Desperate,Naive,Seductive,Romantic,Skillful,Obedient

Additional Character Details

Name: Christian Willis

Age: late 20s

Gender: Male

Role: sidekick

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Masculine,Charming,Engaging,Funny,Skillful,Sexy

Additional Character Details

Name: Rathore

Age: 30s

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Desperate,Greedy,Leader,Villainous

Development Pitch

Imagine the hero chasing a thief in the crowded streets of Jaisalmer, India. He is surrounded by goons in a foreign land, he fights his way out of it, only to discover that the thief vanished in the shrines. He's determined to find the long lost crown of King Jaisimha, all he has to do is search the Rajamahal Palace. To gain access to the Palace, he agrees to a marriage of convenience and starts his quest with his bickering wife and friend. Easy it seems but its not. The first clue is the Queen's necklace which he only gets it through a planned robbery. The pendent gives the first clue, which leads him to an underground hidden mansion, he's attacked by magical vines, serpent and the secret guardians of the crown. He fights the goons and guardians, escapes the traps, solves numerous clues and comes face to face to the creator of the entire 'crown hunt game' ... the sorcerer. My book is an adventure thriller that will hook the Hollywood audience and appeal to the billion plus Bollywood fans too.

About The Author

La Kayshal is an outback dweller of Queensland, Australia. She is a typical female who likes to snuggle in her bed with a novel because she thinks it is the best place in the world to drift into one’s own world of imagination. She is an avid reader of classic love-hate romance books, which is a rare treat in books of today. Unable to get what she was looking for, she set off on a journey of her own with an ideology of adventure intertwined with romance with a sprinkle of suspense which culminated in The Lost Crown.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Amazon

Year Published: 2014

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

ROMANCE, ACTION

Brief

Ryan, an Archeologist, decides to go to India to find a lost crown. There, he meets a beautiful lady who catches his attention and ends up helping him in the search for this ancient treasure.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: FAIR

Structure: GOOD

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

It is accurate.

Draw of Story

The pace on the first pages is nice. Everything happens very quickly, so we don't need to wait too long for the action.

Possible Drawbacks

It's a little bit based on stereotypes. A beautiful Indian woman, a handsome archeologist, a lost treasure. I believe the author could avoid some of these clichés.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook, in my opinion, is the love story. An Indian woman and a British man falling in love.

Fanbase Potential

I don't believe it would attract a large fanbase because there are many stories like this one, but it has the potential to attract people who love to see romances full of sexuality on screen.

Awards Potential

I don't think so. It's a story that was certainly made for entertainment. It would have to be highly improved in terms of narrative to have Awards potential.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARK - AN ARCHAEOLOGIST LOOKS FOR AN OLD ARTIFACT. NATIONAL TREASURE - NICOLAS CAGE IS A TREASURE HUNTER WHO LOOKS FOR AN IMPORTANT DOCUMENT.

What’s New About the Story

There's nothing original about this story. It could be less stereotypical to sound more unique.

Lead Characters

I would like to see the female protagonist as a stronger woman. She is sexy and badass, but she could be more complex and interesting.

Uniqueness of Story

Not a rare gem. Being less based on clichés would be a good start to improve the story.

Possible Formats

Film - Streaming, Film - Indie

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The story of the sexy Asian girl who meets the handsome European archaeologist is very cliché. I believe these stories based on sexy relationships between two people from different origins have a public, but it could be improved to become more powerful. The protagonists are too flat, stereotypical in a way that their relationship becomes predictable. We know from the very first scene that they will stay together. Also, this treasure hunt is so usual in this kind of story that we lose part of our interest from the very beginning. I do believe adventure movies are enjoyable, fun to watch, but I also believe this market is already saturated. There are tons of movies like this one. The characters could be more original, more complex, more credible. The plot could also be more original, feel more realistic. The pace is not bad, the structure is OK, I believe it has the commercial potential a movie needs, but I believe it needs to become a little bit more original in order to stand out in the middle of so many other films like this one.