FANTASY

Katlyn is a young girl in the normal world, but turns out to be a powerful princess in a magical realm. She, two other princesses, and their creature friends have to defeat the Dark Lord. Katlyn is successful and able to save her mother from the Dark Lord.

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Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Yes, the book profile accurately describes the main conflict within the story and the hero's journey of three princesses trying to save a kingdom from a Dark Lord with magic.

The fairy tale has a modern spin in that it involves environmental protection and the talking animals add nostalgia for fans of Disney-style fairy tales.

Sometimes the characters are too self-aware for a children's story. There are certain subjects such as slavery that perhaps are too dark for the earlier age range projected in the profile. By making the dialogue and subjects more attune to child development at that stage, the story will be more fairy tale-like and fitting tone-wise.

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that a normal girl is thrust into a world with talking animals and has to use her newfound magical powers as a princess within the kingdom to save the environment from a Dark Lord.

This could have a large fanbase of young girls and their parents as many young girls enjoy magic and princesses growing up and their parents will support the strong female role models aspect.

This is unlikely to have awards potential as it is a children's story. Children's media is usually relegated to Children's award shows such as Nickelodeon Kid's Choice, so if it did get nominated it would be only within the realm of that unless this was turned into an animated feature or show. If this were an animated medium that focused more heavily on the nobility of saving the environment spin over the good vs. evil magic conflict, it could compete in the animation categories for normal awards circuits.

LARGE BUDGET

THE LORAX, THE BRIDGE TO TERABITHIA, DESCENDANTS, MAGIC SILVER, FERN GULLY: THE LAST RAINFOREST, THE LITTLE MERMAID, POCAHONTAS, THE DARK CRYSTAL

The story is original in that the main character has to adapt to having magical powers and saving a kingdom with sidekicks who are animals. She does not have a lot of her adventures with the sister princesses. To make it more original, more emphasis on why the environment is important to save rather than just saving it because the Dark Lord is evil would send a more unique message about conservation as a theme within a children's story.

What makes Katlyn stand out is her fearlessness and self-confidence as a ten year old girl who suddenly finds herself in a magical realm full of responsibilities. She never lets fear get in her way and is very laid back on things like chipmunk poop on her face.

There are many side character animals which are creative, but making them have clear purposes for so many to exist could help the characters feel more grounded and traceable. The idea of young girls fighting for the environment is unique so focusing more on that rather than the idea of spells and magic to defeat the Dark Lord because he is evil would make the story have a more diverse theme.

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, Film - Studio

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

The tone could be adjusted to be slightly more kid friendly. As the audience is suggested to be as young as seven, making sure that the good characters emulate good behavior will help the tone be more appropriate. For example, when one of the non-evil characters talks under their breath and said "Is he dumb?" that is not something that an audience would like their child to mimic or quote from the story. Moments like these can come off as tonally jarring. By modeling a more child appropriate tone, the fairy tale will be more accessible to a larger age group that is more likely interested in ten year old princesses than teenagers would be.