Journey To Mackinac Island

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DETECTIVE MYSTERY ROMANCE

Contemporary

Kileen Prather

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Logline

The Grand Hotel of Mackinac Island becomes the backdrop for this novel of intrigue, romance, and murder. Five women, former college employees, reunite at the Grand after 35 years. Their plan to reconnect and relive their youthful memories goes wrong as the planned vacation becomes anything but.

Genre

Detective,Mystery,Romance

Short Summary

At the hotel, one of the women becomes ill and dies.They begin to wonder if this is an unfortunate tragedy or something more sinister. Is this death connected to their long lost missing friend who disappeared when they were working there? Two of the women reconnect with the men they previously dated


After several deaths who the killer is--or killers are--is the product of amateur sleuthing and police work. The finale provides a resolution of the murders and the promise of romantic interludes to come.

Setting

Mackinac Island, MI

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Ginger

Age: early 50s

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Decisive,Romantic,Educated

Additional Character Details

Name: Flynn

Age: early 50s

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Masculine,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Faithful,Romantic

Additional Character Details

Name: Olivia

Age: early 50s

Gender: Female

Role: sidekick

Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Confident,Engaging,Faithful

Additional Character Details

Name: Dylan

Age: early 50s

Gender: Male

Role: sidekick

Key Traits: Masculine,Charming,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Educated,Honorable

Development Pitch

The Grand Hotel of Mackinac Island becomes the backdrop for this novel of intrigue, romance and murder. Island scenery reveals itself as an additional “character.” Glimpses of its beauty intersperse plot twists such as the discovery of several murdered victims. Who the killer is the product of amateur sleuthing and police work. The finale provides resolution of the murders and the promise of romantic interludes to come. Although the characters are a little older than usual, older people want to see shows with characters their ages and this type of story sells. "Murder She Wrote," "Diagnosis Murder," & "Matlock" are examples of shows on TV long after they ended.

About The Author

I write what I call Travel/Romance Novels for Boomers. My favorite channel on TV is Hallmark Movies and Mysteries and my latest book is written like one of their Signature Mysteries. My name is Kileen Prather and I have a BS degree in History and a Masters in Library Science. I have been a Tour Manager for over twenty years, and up until this year, I usually travel in 35 to 40 states a year. This helps me with my settings which take place all over the country as well as Canada and the Caribbean. Even if traveling is not affordable to some, people still like to read about and/or dream of visiting different locales. And from what I have been told there is a whole generation of women who like to read, watch television, or movies with characters of their ages and issues. The subplot of the different traveling locales makes my novels unique. I am on Facebook and the link is: https://www.facebook.com/kileen.prather. I also write a travel blog on Word Press with over 40 articles. A link to the Word Press articles is: https://kileenprather.wordpress.com/wp-admin/edit.php

Target Audiences

Age: 55+,35-54

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

45-50+ age group

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: KDP Amazon

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

ISBN-13 : 978-0980216738

Genre

THRILLER, DRAMA

Brief

Five old friends reunite on the Mackinac Island where they met working the summers at the area's premiere resort hotel. Old flings are rekindled and the friends enjoy catching up until one of them dies. More bodies start piling up and the crew must help the police solve the case to save one another.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: EXCELLENT

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: EXCELLENT

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

The development pitch repeats the logline which could be improved with adding new information instead. The logline and short summary function well for their respective sections.

Draw of Story

The vacation goes on for a while without an inkling of what is in store. The slow pacing that quickly unravels from common food poisoning to murder is when the narrative really picks up interest.

Possible Drawbacks

There are many scenes that revolve around eating. Much of the characters' days and conversations and when they exit or enter a scene are centered around food. By giving the characters other activities to congregate with and motivations to leave a conversation with, this repetition could be lessened.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that this seems to be a elderly reunion story set up for a rom-com style pacing when the murder of Harper, one of the people in a new relationship pops up and slowly turns into an unknown serial killer being on the loose.

Fanbase Potential

This could potentially have a huge fanbase for the elderly vacation reunion murder concept. As was mentioned there is a large market of elderly viewers and this similar cast creates representation and therefore more business.

Awards Potential

Depending on how the characters are portrayed and if they are given internal conflicts, this could have awards potential as most actors that are still in show business and elderly are usually still in the industry because they are acclaimed. Because elderly actors would need to portray the elderly people, these esteemed people would likely gain more recognition for their role because they are esteemed already.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

THE BEST EXOTIC MARIGOLD HOTEL, KNIVES OUT, A WALK IN THE WOODS, AND THEN THERE WERE NONE, THE GRAND BUDAPEST HOTEL

What’s New About the Story

The originality stems from the surprise murder and then murder spree and hidden missing persons dark past of the reunion. By focusing less of the vacation and more on the investigation while still making use of the location, the switch in tone will feel more authentic and quicken the pace.

Lead Characters

Ginger is tough, forward thinking and has gumption. Riley was vindictive, but also clever and finds redemption in her recovery.

Uniqueness of Story

The concept is great, the main characters are somewhat static. The pacing is a bit drawn out in the investigation as there is little tension within the group with someone as a suspect.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, Film - Indie

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

By giving each of the characters unique voices, the characters could be more dynamic. At the present they are distinguished by their job and relationship status, but their actual dialogue is very similar. Having unique voices tied to unique internal conflicts will help create emotional investment in the characters surviving and solving the murders.