Threatened Waters

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ACTION DRAMA POLITICAL SUSPENSE/THRILLER

Contemporary

Kevin L Patrick

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Logline

Water as a weapon of war threatens to return America to 18th century conditions - but those responsible are not who they seem, but a group so powerful that many of the events of the last century can be tied to them.

Genre

Action,Drama,Political,Suspense/Thriller

Short Summary

Cold hunched the man over before dawn in the frigid Anatolia Highlands of south-central Turkey. He strung the wires along massive gray concrete pipes while, above, guards were lit by the dam's lights. Tonight, he would learn a handful of men could darken a nation...a lesson he would take with him.


Despite the detonation, an exhausted CIA officer and her FBI companion knew it could have been far worse. The markets had plunged, just as the men sitting around a table had planned, while half-a-world away, two men took tea before prayers content that America would retaliate against their enemies.

Setting

Turkey, Mexico, Denver, New York, LA, and Page, AZ

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Other

Plot - Other Elements

Twist,Other

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Zach Greer

Age: 34

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Faithful,Honorable,Strong Moral Code,Masculine,Modest,Aspiring

Additional Character Details

Name: Elle Hardwick

Age: 33

Gender: Other

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Complex,Flexible,Educated,Unapologetic,Seductive,Skillful,Blunt,Sexy,Aggressive

Additional Character Details

Name: Akmed Hector

Age: 32

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Criminal,Leader,Unapologetic,Blunt,Uneducated,Masculine

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

Manipulation for altruistic gain masks greed. Terrorists have committed the unthinkable. Zach Greer’s career in the FBI is at a low and Elle Hardwick’s at the CIA is soaring. Two unlikely people working in concert a thousand miles apart with time running out before destruction is released against America’s vulnerable water and electrical that threaten to return the US to 18th-century conditions. The nation’s intelligence agencies are compromised, and time is running out. Will Greer and Hardwick understand in time that those responsible are not driven by ideology but are a group so powerful that many of the events of the last half-century may be tied to them?

About The Author

Kevin L Patrick is an accomplished water attorney representing some of the largest corporations and water providers in the US before state and federal appellate courts, including the US Supreme Court. He is the author of five novels including the three-novel Twelver Series, of which Threatened Waters is the first in the series.

Target Audiences

Age: 55+,35-54,18-34

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Amazon KDP

Year Published: 2014

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

9780578152998

Genre

DRAMA, WAR, POLITICS, ACTION

Brief

A terrorist organization is rising to attack the western world by using a water against them. Elle and Zach are working to stop a major attack but the organization is able to infiltrate the US and attack. They are finally stopped but the organization is not dead.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: EXCELLENT

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: GOOD

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.

Draw of Story

This is an international story taking place all over the world. It is on a global scale which makes the stakes higher.

Possible Drawbacks

This is very political minded which has a niche audience. There are many slow moments where information is being gathered and processed to understand the terrorist next steps. There are a lot of different characters to keep track of and many storylines coming together.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that a terrorist organization is rising to attack the West by affecting the water. I would watch the movie to see the use of water as a weapon.

Fanbase Potential

This wouldn't have a large fanbase. The story, overall, is not very unique. The antagonist are stereotypical Middle Eastern descent and the events of the story play out like many other films. It is steeped in politics and would narrow the audience appeal.

Awards Potential

This does not have awards potential. The story is entertaining but does not excel on any specific level. The story is predictable.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

ZERO DARK THIRTY, JACK RYAN

What’s New About the Story

Water being used as a weapon is the original element in the story. The rest runs much like political/terrorism movies. The terrorist could be from a different part of the world. American terrorism is a current topic and this could tackle that issue.

Lead Characters

The lead characters are a typical characters for a political drama. The importance is placed on the plot and less on character development.

Uniqueness of Story

This is an average story that has been written well. As a film, however, it follows the predictable pattern of other political dramas. There needs to be a unique element to this, a different perspective. The story needs more nuance and gray areas to add depth.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

This story could tackle a different, less known type of nefarious organization, in another part of the world. There could also be a case that this reinforces stereotypes and discrimination against certain groups. The non-terrorist characters could be diversified and more perspective given to the antagonists side so they are more complex.