Red March
ROMANCE SUSPENSE/THRILLER ADVENTURE DRAMA EPIC EROTICA FAMILY RELIGIOUS SATIRE WAR
Contemporary
Karmin Walker
Logline
A single mom, widow, combat veteran moves across the county to follow her dreams, when she falls in love with a powerful, married man. Their relationship is very sweet, and beautiful until his dark side begins to come out. She dreams of what could have been, but quickly faces the reality of it all.
Genre
Romance,Suspense/Thriller,Adventure,Drama,Epic,Erotica,Family,Religious,Satire,War
Short Summary
The main character is transitioning out of the Army after 6 years, now as a widow and with a 1 year old child, as her husband died in combat. She lives in her hometown for a couple years, before deciding to move across the country to follow her dreams of being a writer.
There is a dream that is shown, and you believe that is the end of the story... but quickly you realize that is not where the story ends. The main character is smarter than that, stronger than that. The marriage and honeymoon quickly come to a close, and the main characters growth is revealed.
Setting
Kennebunkport, Maine
Based on a True Story
Yes
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Tragedy
Plot - Other Elements
Meaningful Message,Twist
Mature Audience Themes
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Main Character Details
Name: Kamala
Age: 26
Gender: Other
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Confident,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Naive,Strong Moral Code,Sophisticated,Seductive,Secretive,Sarcastic,Romantic,Visionary,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Religious,Patriotic,Sexy,Obedient,Modest
Additional Character Details
Name: Rian
Age: 42
Gender: Male
Role: Antagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Crazy,Engaging,Greedy,Heartthrob,Leader,Unapologetic,Manipulative,Seductive,Secretive,Romantic,Funny,Visionary,Skillful,Outspoken,Power Hungry,Religious,Patriotic,Sexy,Narcisstic,Villainous,Masculine
Additional Character Details
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Development Pitch
Red March creates a moral dilemma in the minds of anyone reading or watching it. As a book I have attached several reviews gathered on the entirety of it, and am in the process of gathering more. Each review has stated that while it is a beautiful love story, it is a story that shows enormous growth for the main characters spirit. Kamala is a 25/26 year old who served 6 years in the Army as a combat medic, losing her husband to war and now faces raising their daughter on her own. She moves back home, but quickly bores of a normal life. She wants to find her passion again, so she moves across the country to a small town in Maine to work on her writing. That's when she meets, and falls in love with a power-hungry, charming man - who is married to a sick spouse. He "love bombs" her, and then throws her to the wolves, and watches as she tries to keep her head afloat in the water. When she finally finds her ground again, and he comes back around she dreams of the happy ending - she watches as the wedding and the honeymoon play out... but she quickly turns to face the reality of the situation. She is a powerful character for women everywhere, and is inspirational to women and men around the world. Love is a powerful and confusing force, and this story causes you to analyze a twisted romance... it causes you to think outside of the box, and it has elicited a lot of emotion out of everyone that has read the book so far. Youtube: https://youtu.be/9xJan5Poocw
Genre
DRAMA, ROMANCE, MATURE AUDIENCE
Brief
Kamala is a military veteran and widow who wishes to pursue a career in writing. She meets a fellow writer, Rian, at the company she works at to make ends meet. They start a friendly correspondence that quickly turns into a romance. Kamala comes to find that Rian is still married and engages in other unsavory acts that makes her cut off their relationship despite her longing to make it work out.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: GOOD
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
The book profile accurately reflects the book.
Draw of Story
The author's writing style made the story seem personal, almost autobiographical. This makes the reader ponder the story in the context of how it relates to the author and their personal background.
Possible Drawbacks
The story seems a bit stretched out and the reader does not get to the conflict until around the halfway point of the story.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
A recently widowed veteran starts an affair with a work colleague but discovers he harbors some dark secrets.
Fanbase Potential
I don't see this story attracting a large fanbase due to the familiar premise of the story. The concept of a "forbidden relationship" has been done countless times and this story does not have an element that makes it stand out amongst those kinds of narrative.
Awards Potential
This could have awards potential if given more gravitas.
Envisioned Budget
LOW BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
FILMS SUCH AS "EYES WIDE SHUT", "BROTHERS", AND "A GOOD MARRIAGE", THESE FILMS ALL DEAL WITH SECRECY AND INFIDELITY IN RELATIONSHIPS.
What’s New About the Story
There is nothing really unique about the story. Perhaps, adding a twist to the premise or changing the dynamic of the relationship between Kamala and Rian could make the story more unique.
Lead Characters
As it is right now, nothing about the lead characters stand out.
Uniqueness of Story
As currently written this is not a rare gem, finding a way to put a unique twist on the premise of the story or the lead characters involved can help it stand out more.
Possible Formats
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
A change in pacing and perhaps a tweak in the premise will benefit the story in possible future drafts or means of adaptation.