The Witness Security Program (WITSEC), run by the U.S. Marshals Service, must come to grips with a sudden leak in the protection system and the recent assassination of two of its witnesses.
An assassin watches a house in Cottonwood, Arizona where a former hood, now in witness protection, now lives. He waits until dark, then enters his back yard and kills the man using his silencer. He photographs the body and texts it to the man who hired him. Return text tells him where to get paid.
The reformed assassin has eluded the police and the U.S. Marshals and attempts to begin a normal life with his ever faithful wife. A daring escape for him and his wife keeps viewers on their toes throughout, but specifically at the end of the story where they end up getting away...or do they?
Cottonwood, Arizona, Worley, Idaho, Rock Springs, Wyoming, Roatan Island, Honduras
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Rebellion Against 'The One'
Plot - Other Elements
Mature Audience Themes
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Main Character Details
Name: Oscar Pell
Key Traits: Villainous,Charming,Faithful,Aggressive,Secretive,Lone Wolf
Additional Character Details
Name: Paul O'Malley
Key Traits: Clumsy,Empathetic,Insecure,Naive
Additional Character Details
Name: Harry Esten
Key Traits: Modest,Aggressive,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Skillful,Leader
Additional Character Details
Name: Regina Roberts
Key Traits: Underdog,Charming,Complex,Desperate,Faithful,Gracious,Secretive
WITSEC, the witness protection program run by the U.S. Marshals Service, has been in existence for forty-six years. In all that time, WITSEC has never lost a witness who remained in the program, a total of 8500 witnesses in that time. What if, suddenly, two witnesses were murdered, execution-style, and an attempt was made to assassinate a third witness but barely failed…all in a span of two weeks? There is a leak in the U.S. Marshals witness protection unit, or a massive breach in their computer system. Paul O’Malley, the director of WITSEC, must stop the killings before many witnesses lose faith in the program, and seek new sanctuaries on their own. O’Malley, with the keen help of a long-time ally and friend, retired FBI agent Harry Esten, team up to identify the leak and stop further killings. Esten’s years of investigations significantly contribute to unfolding the assassin (Oscar Pell) and the former marshal (Cliff Mead) who is providing him with the names of victims who have continued to commit crimes while in WITSEC. The trail of both villains becomes clearer to the bumbling O’Malley, while Esten’s thorough research gets O’Malley back in the chase more often than not. There is non-stop action throughout, leading to a climactic confrontation between the two villains, and an ending that will surprise everyone.
The US Marshall service must chase an assassin after their witnesses in the witness protection programs. The assassin and his wife have to go into hiding themselves in order to evade the authorities. It is a cat and mouse chase until the very end as both sides pose great danger to one another's way of life.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, the script profile does accurately reflect the narrative including the breakup of the main characters in the character details. The short summary does tend to focus on the assassin's storyline when the investigation people at WISTEC are the protagonists in chasing the assassin. By summarizing both sides' storylines in the short summary, the profile with be consistent with the ensemble nature of the narrative.
Draw of Story
The hook is somewhat clear from the start in that witness protection witnesses start dying which suggest a leak and a problem with a system that is supposed to be fool-proof. The logical step is then taken of finding the leak so yes, the hook is apparent from the beginning.
The investigation feels drawn out at times when they are introducing themselves and talking about what has been done or what they will do. This is telling instead of showing the action which switching the balance would create faster pacing.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that WISTEC are master's at hiding people and the assassin is a master at finding people, but their worlds become reversed. The Marshall's must find the assassin in hiding.
This could potentially have a decent fanbase as an action film with a adjusted pacing and more distinct inner conflicts for stronger emotional investment in the characters.
As an action and crime drama without addressing larger social issues the story is unlikely to be nominated in the prestige awards circle because of genre. But the film could be popular and win popular awards depending of the pacing and characterization being condensed to a shorter film length.
Similar Films/TV Series
BARRY, CON AIR, PRISON BREAK, CHARLIE'S ANGEL, LAW AND ORDER: ORGANIZED CRIME, KILLSHOT
What’s New About the Story
The use of witness protection is an unusual angle and focusing more on the system leak or coming to the conclusion faster to focus on the chase of the villains would create faster pacing and a simpler objective.
Regina is controlled, calculating and adaptable. O' Malley is wise but hesitant. Esten is surefire and thorough.
Uniqueness of Story
There are rare aspects to the details of the concept such as the witness protection program, but the premise evolves in to a more common action fare involving a cat and mouse chase.
Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming
WORK IN PROGRESS
Sometimes the pacing is weighed down by dialogue that acts as exposition in place of action within the investigation. The external conflict is more developed than the inner conflicts of the main characters.
Tips for Improvement
Showing the action instead of telling the action ins dialogue would quicken the pacing two fold in that it would avoid repeated information and create rising tension from the sequence unlike a conversation after the fact or before the action. The emotional investment in the investigation would be maximized in creating dynamic characters with more apparent transformations.