Disappearance

Julien Ayotte jpahome@cox.net 881167695931

CRIME

2000s

Julien Ayotte

Logline

The Witness Security Program (WITSEC), run by the U.S. Marshals Service, must come to grips with a sudden leak in the protection system and the recent assassination of two of its witnesses.

Genre

Crime

Short Summary

An assassin watches a house in Cottonwood, Arizona where a former hood, now in witness protection, now lives. He waits until dark, then enters his back yard and kills the man using his silencer. He photographs the body and texts it to the man who hired him. Return text tells him where to get paid.


The reformed assassin has eluded the police and the U.S. Marshals and attempts to begin a normal life with his ever faithful wife. A daring escape for him and his wife keeps viewers on their toes throughout, but specifically at the end of the story where they end up getting away...or do they?

Setting

Cottonwood, Arizona, Worley, Idaho, Rock Springs, Wyoming, Roatan Island, Honduras

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Rebellion Against 'The One'

Plot - Other Elements

Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Oscar Pell

Age: 36

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Villainous,Charming,Faithful,Aggressive,Secretive,Lone Wolf

Additional Character Details

Name: Paul O'Malley

Age: 60

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Clumsy,Empathetic,Insecure,Naive

Additional Character Details

Name: Harry Esten

Age: 62

Gender: Male

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Modest,Aggressive,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Skillful,Leader

Additional Character Details

Name: Regina Roberts

Age: 40

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Underdog,Charming,Complex,Desperate,Faithful,Gracious,Secretive

Development Pitch

WITSEC, the witness protection program run by the U.S. Marshals Service, has been in existence for forty-six years. In all that time, WITSEC has never lost a witness who remained in the program, a total of 8500 witnesses in that time. What if, suddenly, two witnesses were murdered, execution-style, and an attempt was made to assassinate a third witness but barely failed…all in a span of two weeks? There is a leak in the U.S. Marshals witness protection unit, or a massive breach in their computer system. Paul O’Malley, the director of WITSEC, must stop the killings before many witnesses lose faith in the program, and seek new sanctuaries on their own. O’Malley, with the keen help of a long-time ally and friend, retired FBI agent Harry Esten, team up to identify the leak and stop further killings. Esten’s years of investigations significantly contribute to unfolding the assassin (Oscar Pell) and the former marshal (Cliff Mead) who is providing him with the names of victims who have continued to commit crimes while in WITSEC. The trail of both villains becomes clearer to the bumbling O’Malley, while Esten’s thorough research gets O’Malley back in the chase more often than not. There is non-stop action throughout, leading to a climactic confrontation between the two villains, and an ending that will surprise everyone.

About The Author

Dr. Julien Ayotte, author, fiction and historical fiction Novels Flower of Heaven Dangerous Bloodlines (Sequel to Flower of Heaven) A Life Before Disappearance Code Name Lily Diamond and Pearls The Treasure One could certainly assume, at the end of a very successful career in both the corporate and legal worlds, that retirement would be a welcome transition from the daily workforce routine. This was not the case for Dr. Julien Ayotte. In 2002, at the age of 60, after over a forty year career in business, he began a new venture in fiction writing. Having found a dozen chapters of an old manuscript he had started to write in 1987, his children encouraged him to finish the debut book, Flower of Heaven. Although leaning more toward playing golf and tennis during retirement, he took their encouragement to heart and began a ten year journey to get it done. What started off as total satisfaction once the novel was completed and published has now turned into a passion for writing. Dr. Ayotte has published seven novels in eight years, and all of them are award-winners and best-sellers. Over that time, Ayotte’s novels have amassed twelve national awards. These include: Flower of Heaven Indie Book of the Day, March 2013 2013 New York Book Festival, Honorable Mention 2014 New England Book Festival, Honorable Mention 2014 Eric Hoffer Book Award, Finalist Dangerous Bloodlines 2014 New England Book Festival, Finalist 2015 Next Generation Indie Book Award, Finalist Indie Book of the Day, March 2015 A Life Before 2016 Book Life Prize, Publishers Weekly Disappearance 2018 Dorry Award, Best Fiction Book of the Year 2019 American Fiction Award, Finalist Code Name Lily 2019 Next Generation Indie Book Award, Finalist Diamond and Pearls 2020 Top Shelf Book Award, Finalist Jon Land, a USA Today best-selling fiction author of over forty books, calls Julien Ayotte’s writing comparable to Harlan Coben and David Baldacci on the thriller scale. And Paul Caranci, best-selling author of Wired and Scoundrel, says “Without doubt, Julien Ayotte is the best writer of mystery thriller novels in Rhode Island. A signed Ayotte novel will make a great gift for your favorite reader.” Stephen Watson, CEO, The National World War II Museum, New Orleans, had this to say about Ayotte’s Code Name Lily: “Works of historical fiction like yours are a great way to introduce and encourage readers to learn more about real-life events the novels have inspired. The Comet Line’s and Micheline’s work helping hundreds of Allied servicemen escape is a truly spectacular WWII account. Countless more people will learn of her bravery through your character, Lily.” Dr. Ayotte will be the featured speaker on July 20, 2021 at the Wright Museum of WWII in Wolfeboro, NH. He previously was the keynote speaker at the forty-fifth reunion of the Air Force Escape and Evasion Society in 2019 in Niagara Falls. Julien Ayotte, age 79, was born in 1941 in Woonsocket, Rhode Island. He graduated from Mount St. Charles Academy in 1959. In 1963, he received a B.S. degree from the University of Rhode Island, followed by an M.B.A. in 1969, a Harvard Business School Management Development Program in 1978, and a PhD from Columbia Pacific University in 1992. In his forty year career, Julien served as the Assistant Corporate Treasurer and Assistant Corporate Controller at Textron Inc. for eleven years, following nine years as a high school teacher in Bellingham, Massachusetts. He then served as a financial and investment consultant until becoming the executive director for a prominent Providence law firm, Partridge, Snow & Hahn in 1988-1989, followed by twelve years in a similar position for a much larger prestigious Worcester law firm, Mirick O’Connell, where he ended his career in 2002. During this fourteen year period, Ayotte also was an adjunct professor of finance and investments in the MBA programs at five universities in the Rhode Island and Massachusetts area. In 2001, Julien co-authored a financial planning book with Dr. Gerhard Harms entitled Wealth Building for Professionals. Flower of Heaven was published in 2012, followed by the sequel, Dangerous Bloodlines, in 2014, A Life Before in 2016, Disappearance in 2017, Code Name Lily in 2018, and Diamond and Pearls in early 2020. His seventh novel in eight years, The Treasure, was released in late 2020. Julien is an avid golfer and tennis player, and a 2016 inductee into the Mt. St. Charles Academy Athletic Hall of Fame. He also serves as a Trustee, Extra Ordinary Minister, Chair of the Parish Finance Council, and an altar server at St. Joseph’s Church in Woonsocket, Rhode Island. He continues to speak before various book clubs, WWII museums, and libraries, and is still on track to write ten novels in ten years. He resides with his wife of fifty-seven years, Pauline, in Cumberland, Rhode Island, and they are the parents of three grown children. In summary, Dr. Julien Ayotte has written seven very successful novels. Literary talent comes at different ages for different people. For Julien, he displays the belief that it is never too late to find what has laid dormant for many years, like waking up a sleeping tiger. Readers can learn a great deal more about Julien Ayotte and his works from his website, www.julienayotte.com. Sincerely, Julien Ayotte, PhD 72 Bourque Road Cumberland, RI 02864

Target Audiences

Age: 35-54

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Hard Copy Available

No

WGA Number

Information not completed

Genre

ACTION, DRAMA

Brief

The US Marshall service must chase an assassin after their witnesses in the witness protection programs. The assassin and his wife have to go into hiding themselves in order to evade the authorities. It is a cat and mouse chase until the very end as both sides pose great danger to one another's way of life.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

SCRIPT

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the script profile does accurately reflect the narrative including the breakup of the main characters in the character details. The short summary does tend to focus on the assassin's storyline when the investigation people at WISTEC are the protagonists in chasing the assassin. By summarizing both sides' storylines in the short summary, the profile with be consistent with the ensemble nature of the narrative.

Draw of Story

The hook is somewhat clear from the start in that witness protection witnesses start dying which suggest a leak and a problem with a system that is supposed to be fool-proof. The logical step is then taken of finding the leak so yes, the hook is apparent from the beginning.

Possible Drawbacks

The investigation feels drawn out at times when they are introducing themselves and talking about what has been done or what they will do. This is telling instead of showing the action which switching the balance would create faster pacing.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that WISTEC are master's at hiding people and the assassin is a master at finding people, but their worlds become reversed. The Marshall's must find the assassin in hiding.

Fanbase Potential

This could potentially have a decent fanbase as an action film with a adjusted pacing and more distinct inner conflicts for stronger emotional investment in the characters.

Awards Potential

As an action and crime drama without addressing larger social issues the story is unlikely to be nominated in the prestige awards circle because of genre. But the film could be popular and win popular awards depending of the pacing and characterization being condensed to a shorter film length.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

BARRY, CON AIR, PRISON BREAK, CHARLIE'S ANGEL, LAW AND ORDER: ORGANIZED CRIME, KILLSHOT

What’s New About the Story

The use of witness protection is an unusual angle and focusing more on the system leak or coming to the conclusion faster to focus on the chase of the villains would create faster pacing and a simpler objective.

Lead Characters

Regina is controlled, calculating and adaptable. O' Malley is wise but hesitant. Esten is surefire and thorough.

Uniqueness of Story

There are rare aspects to the details of the concept such as the witness protection program, but the premise evolves in to a more common action fare involving a cat and mouse chase.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

Sometimes the pacing is weighed down by dialogue that acts as exposition in place of action within the investigation. The external conflict is more developed than the inner conflicts of the main characters.

Tips for Improvement

Showing the action instead of telling the action ins dialogue would quicken the pacing two fold in that it would avoid repeated information and create rising tension from the sequence unlike a conversation after the fact or before the action. The emotional investment in the investigation would be maximized in creating dynamic characters with more apparent transformations.

Logline

The Witness Security Program (WITSEC), run by the U.S. Marshals Service, must come to grips with a sudden leak in the protection system and the recent assassination of two of its witnesses.

Short Summary

An assassin watches a house in Cottonwood, Arizona where a former hood, now in witness protection, now lives. He waits until dark, then enters his back yard and kills the man using his silencer. He photographs the body and texts it to the man who hired him. Return text tells him where to get paid.


The reformed assassin has eluded the police and the U.S. Marshals and attempts to begin a normal life with his ever faithful wife. A daring escape for him and his wife keeps viewers on their toes throughout, but specifically at the end of the story where they end up getting away...or do they?

FEEDBACK

WITSEC, the witness protection program run by the U.S. Marshals Service, has been in existence for forty-six years. In all that time, WITSEC has never lost a witness who remained in the program, a total of 8500 witnesses in that time. What if, suddenly, two witnesses were murdered, execution-style, and an attempt was made to assassinate a third witness but barely failed…all in a span of two weeks? There is a leak in the U.S. Marshals witness protection unit, or a massive breach in their computer system. Paul O’Malley, the director of WITSEC, must stop the killings before many witnesses lose faith in the program, and seek new sanctuaries on their own. O’Malley, with the keen help of a long-time ally and friend, retired FBI agent Harry Esten, team up to identify the leak and stop further killings. Esten’s years of investigations significantly contribute to unfolding the assassin (Oscar Pell) and the former marshal (Cliff Mead) who is providing him with the names of victims who have continued to commit crimes while in WITSEC. The trail of both villains becomes clearer to the bumbling O’Malley, while Esten’s thorough research gets O’Malley back in the chase more often than not. There is non-stop action throughout, leading to a climactic confrontation between the two villains, and an ending that will surprise everyone.

About The Author

Dr. Julien Ayotte, author, fiction and historical fiction Novels Flower of Heaven Dangerous Bloodlines (Sequel to Flower of Heaven) A Life Before Disappearance Code Name Lily Diamond and Pearls The Treasure One could certainly assume, at the end of a very successful career in both the corporate and legal worlds, that retirement would be a welcome transition from the daily workforce routine. This was not the case for Dr. Julien Ayotte. In 2002, at the age of 60, after over a forty year career in business, he began a new venture in fiction writing. Having found a dozen chapters of an old manuscript he had started to write in 1987, his children encouraged him to finish the debut book, Flower of Heaven. Although leaning more toward playing golf and tennis during retirement, he took their encouragement to heart and began a ten year journey to get it done. What started off as total satisfaction once the novel was completed and published has now turned into a passion for writing. Dr. Ayotte has published seven novels in eight years, and all of them are award-winners and best-sellers. Over that time, Ayotte’s novels have amassed twelve national awards. These include: Flower of Heaven Indie Book of the Day, March 2013 2013 New York Book Festival, Honorable Mention 2014 New England Book Festival, Honorable Mention 2014 Eric Hoffer Book Award, Finalist Dangerous Bloodlines 2014 New England Book Festival, Finalist 2015 Next Generation Indie Book Award, Finalist Indie Book of the Day, March 2015 A Life Before 2016 Book Life Prize, Publishers Weekly Disappearance 2018 Dorry Award, Best Fiction Book of the Year 2019 American Fiction Award, Finalist Code Name Lily 2019 Next Generation Indie Book Award, Finalist Diamond and Pearls 2020 Top Shelf Book Award, Finalist Jon Land, a USA Today best-selling fiction author of over forty books, calls Julien Ayotte’s writing comparable to Harlan Coben and David Baldacci on the thriller scale. And Paul Caranci, best-selling author of Wired and Scoundrel, says “Without doubt, Julien Ayotte is the best writer of mystery thriller novels in Rhode Island. A signed Ayotte novel will make a great gift for your favorite reader.” Stephen Watson, CEO, The National World War II Museum, New Orleans, had this to say about Ayotte’s Code Name Lily: “Works of historical fiction like yours are a great way to introduce and encourage readers to learn more about real-life events the novels have inspired. The Comet Line’s and Micheline’s work helping hundreds of Allied servicemen escape is a truly spectacular WWII account. Countless more people will learn of her bravery through your character, Lily.” Dr. Ayotte will be the featured speaker on July 20, 2021 at the Wright Museum of WWII in Wolfeboro, NH. He previously was the keynote speaker at the forty-fifth reunion of the Air Force Escape and Evasion Society in 2019 in Niagara Falls. Julien Ayotte, age 79, was born in 1941 in Woonsocket, Rhode Island. He graduated from Mount St. Charles Academy in 1959. In 1963, he received a B.S. degree from the University of Rhode Island, followed by an M.B.A. in 1969, a Harvard Business School Management Development Program in 1978, and a PhD from Columbia Pacific University in 1992. In his forty year career, Julien served as the Assistant Corporate Treasurer and Assistant Corporate Controller at Textron Inc. for eleven years, following nine years as a high school teacher in Bellingham, Massachusetts. He then served as a financial and investment consultant until becoming the executive director for a prominent Providence law firm, Partridge, Snow & Hahn in 1988-1989, followed by twelve years in a similar position for a much larger prestigious Worcester law firm, Mirick O’Connell, where he ended his career in 2002. During this fourteen year period, Ayotte also was an adjunct professor of finance and investments in the MBA programs at five universities in the Rhode Island and Massachusetts area. In 2001, Julien co-authored a financial planning book with Dr. Gerhard Harms entitled Wealth Building for Professionals. Flower of Heaven was published in 2012, followed by the sequel, Dangerous Bloodlines, in 2014, A Life Before in 2016, Disappearance in 2017, Code Name Lily in 2018, and Diamond and Pearls in early 2020. His seventh novel in eight years, The Treasure, was released in late 2020. Julien is an avid golfer and tennis player, and a 2016 inductee into the Mt. St. Charles Academy Athletic Hall of Fame. He also serves as a Trustee, Extra Ordinary Minister, Chair of the Parish Finance Council, and an altar server at St. Joseph’s Church in Woonsocket, Rhode Island. He continues to speak before various book clubs, WWII museums, and libraries, and is still on track to write ten novels in ten years. He resides with his wife of fifty-seven years, Pauline, in Cumberland, Rhode Island, and they are the parents of three grown children. In summary, Dr. Julien Ayotte has written seven very successful novels. Literary talent comes at different ages for different people. For Julien, he displays the belief that it is never too late to find what has laid dormant for many years, like waking up a sleeping tiger. Readers can learn a great deal more about Julien Ayotte and his works from his website, www.julienayotte.com. Sincerely, Julien Ayotte, PhD 72 Bourque Road Cumberland, RI 02864

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Characters

Main Character

Name: Oscar Pell

Age: 36

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Villainous,Charming,Faithful,Aggressive,Secretive,Lone Wolf

Character 1

Name: Paul O'Malley

Age: 60

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Clumsy,Empathetic,Insecure,Naive

Character 2

Name: Harry Esten

Age: 62

Gender: Male

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Modest,Aggressive,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Skillful,Leader

Character 3

Name: Regina Roberts

Age: 40

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Underdog,Charming,Complex,Desperate,Faithful,Gracious,Secretive