ZEBRA9

Joseph Armillas josepharmillas@hotmail.com 4586829676698

ACTION MYSTERY POLITICAL SCI-FI

Contemporary,1960s & '70s

Joseph M. Armillas

Logline

An ageless female super soldier suffering from a decades long case of retrograde amnesia, recovers her memory during a hypnotherapy session. In an instant, she is a time traveler suddenly thrust into a future that doesn’t make sense. Chased by hired assassins, the Russian Secret Service and the CIA,

Genre

Action,Mystery,Political,Sci-fi

Short Summary

SYNOPSIS: In current day Paris, Marianne Bonnet's life turns into a nightmare when during a hypnotherapy session meant to cure her amnesia, she remembers that she’s a KGB spy endowed with superhuman strength and abilities.


Chased by Russian assassins, the CIA and Interpol, Galina must find answers to the unsolved mysteries in her life and make those who betrayed her pay for their sins. Her quest brings her to America where she finds answers to her questions but must also battle with an old nemesis.

Setting

Paris France, Prague Czech Republic, Siberia, Russia, Washington DC, VermontUnited States

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain

Plot - Other Elements

Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Extreme Violence

Main Character Details

Name: Galina Karpikov

Age: 25

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Badass,Complex,Confident,Heroic,Sexy,Skillful

Additional Character Details

Name: General Constantine Dago

Age: 60+

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Criminal,Villainous,Narcisstic,Power Hungry,Manipulative

Additional Character Details

Name: CIA Agent Cole Henderson

Age: 25+

Gender: Male

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Heroic

Additional Character Details

Name: Mikhail Chernikien

Age: 80+

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Empathetic,Faithful,Educated,Modest,Selfless

Development Pitch

"BEWARE OF YOUR PAST. REMEMBERING WHO YOUARE CAN KILL YOU" An ageless female super soldier suffering from a decades long case of retrograde amnesia, recovers her memory during a hypnotherapy session. In an instant, she is a time traveler suddenly thrust into a future that doesn’t make sense. Chased by hired assassins, the Russian Secret Service and the CIA, Galina Karpikov realizes that the recovery of her identity makes her the most wanted woman in the world. A victim of betrayal by those that gave her super strength and abilities, Galina must solve the mystery of her missing years and make the KGB officer who killed her loved ones pay for the murder of her family.

About The Author

Born in South America and raised in the USA, Joseph Armillas has lived a very interesting life. His parents who were both show business performers traveled extensively throughout the world. His early memories are of constantly boarding planes, trains and automobiles and meeting a fascinating variety of characters while he traveled along with his parents who were constantly touring. An actor, writer and a musician, Joseph began showing his multitalented personality early on. He formed his first band while in High school and signed his first record deal when he was fifteen years old. After a three year stint with the US Army, Joseph returned to New York City where he began his professional acting and musical career. He’s performed on and Off Broadway and ran and operated a recording studio in lower Manhattan, N.Y. for sixteen years. In 1991 Joseph moved to Los Angeles California where he still resides to this day. A science fiction fan since early childhood, Joseph began writing short science fiction stories while in grammar school. The genesis of the Plantanimus Trilogy came from a recurring dream that he experienced over three consecutive nights during the summer of 2000. Though some of the complex aspects of the story changed over the eleven years that it took him to write the three books, the basic plot has remained close to the original “dream”. Joseph has trained himself to “lucid dream“ and says that this ability to experience dreams in a semi-awake state, gives him many ideas for his writing.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal,Female Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Hard Copy Available

No

WGA Number

Information not completed

Genre

ACTION, SUSPENSE, POLITICS

Brief

After a deadly attack, two survivors of the Zebra 9 project escape. One of the survivors, Galina, loses her memory and lives for years a life without obstacles. Until one day, in a hypnosis session, she recovers her memory, finds out about her origins, and sets out to seek revenge. She finds whoever sent her to kill, finds the other survivor, and together they manage to destroy the enemies and move on.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

SCRIPT

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The logline looks incomplete. The author could include a complete sentence there to give us a better sense of the story.

Draw of Story

The fact that the protagonist had her childhood "stolen" by an evil scientific experiment engages us right away.

Possible Drawbacks

There are many antagonistic forces: General Dago and his comrades, and Director Kane, who, despite being less villainous, also has obscure goals. Despite raising the risks for the protagonist, a significant number of antagonists can bother the public by the excess of obstacles.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook would be this discovery of a bloody past, which takes the protagonist off the track and throws her on a journey in search of revenge for the death of so many innocents.

Fanbase Potential

Stories of people genetically transformed by a mean interest are a type of sci-fi that stands out for mixing essential elements of the genre with a significant dramatic load. In Zebra 9, all these elements are there, making it possible to reach a sci-fi audience.

Awards Potential

If the tragedy of these children, violated by an ambitious goal, were elevated narratively, the story would have the potential for awards. If the story follows a path more focused on the action and the hunt, perhaps the feature will have more potential for technical categories.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

STRANGER THINGS: THE LITTLE ELEVEN RUNS AWAY FROM THE LABORATORY WHERE SHE WAS RAISED AND TRIES TO SEEK FREEDOM FAR FROM SCIENTIFIC EXPERIMENTS. RED SPARROW: A WOMAN IS TRAINED TO BECOME AN UNBEATABLE RUSSIAN SPY.

What’s New About the Story

The script doesn't have many original twists. But the fact that the protagonist remembers who she is through hypnosis sounds slightly unusual. The script doesn't have many original twists. But the fact that the protagonist remembers who she is through hypnosis sounds slightly unusual. The author could make more use of this tool, so we all, and the protagonist, could discover her identity little by little.

Lead Characters

Although we know right away what happened to Galina, she doesn't have a robust development as the main character. Chernikien and Agent Henderson, as well as Agent Valenti are the characters with the greatest emotional appeal in the story.

Uniqueness of Story

It is not. We have seen many films with similar ideas. To make it more unique, the author could use hypnosis sessions as a gradual tool for self-discovery. In this way, we would be able to get to know the protagonist better and see her actually experiencing a strong internal conflict.

Possible Formats

FILM

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

The author has a lot of potential at hand: Interesting characters, an impactful story, good scenes, some great dialogue, an intense conflict, and clear objectives. However, we know too little of the protagonist to really root for her. There is also a lack of emotion, of dramatic weight in the actions. And Galina finds out very quickly that she is a genetically modified person with unusual powers. The way she reacts to this discovery could have been more emotional as well.

Tips for Improvement

The beginning of the script is quite interesting. The criminal scenes of a building full of innocents being imploded are very striking. However, that impact from the start is lost a little later. Galina has very little time on screen for presentation. She promptly - and frustratingly (for us) - discovers that she was modified in a laboratory and has extraordinary strength. The revelation of this forgotten past should have a more significant emotional impact on the protagonist. After many years she remembers a great trauma, but she does not seem to suffer from any internal conflict after the discovery. She just seeks revenge. Anger is also a feeling, of course, but remembering all the cruelty someone caused to you should generate some kind of confusion and make you need to assimilate new memories. And she takes action very abruptly. As Galina is already in a wave of anger for revenge, we have few opportunities to know her as a person. We know that she likes Cole and appreciates Doctor Chernikien, but we see little of her personality. If she lived an internal conflict between this "new" life that unfolds in front of her eyes and the previous life that she had, we would have a better chance of knowing her better. The central conflict is well marked there, and the author is well aware of the tools at hand, but some actions still seem obvious. Alpha and Doctor Chernikien took the Z compound, so they are more resistant than other humans. Therefore, we already foresee that they will survive in the end. Alpha also sounds a little predictable. He shows enormous concern about the few Z compound supplements he receives at the beginning of the mission. When he approaches Doctor Chernikien, we can already perceive that the reasons are not so positive, so there's no much surprise. There are a lot of villains at the same time. Director Kane also becomes a kind of antagonist, intending to create a chain of super-powerful and millionaire drugs, which causes more tension, for sure, but tires the audience as well. It is always good to increase risk and tension, but when everyone is an enemy, the strength of the antagonism reduces. The story is good, and it just needs a few adjustments to make it more impactful, surprising, and touching.

Logline

An ageless female super soldier suffering from a decades long case of retrograde amnesia, recovers her memory during a hypnotherapy session. In an instant, she is a time traveler suddenly thrust into a future that doesn’t make sense. Chased by hired assassins, the Russian Secret Service and the CIA,

Short Summary

SYNOPSIS: In current day Paris, Marianne Bonnet's life turns into a nightmare when during a hypnotherapy session meant to cure her amnesia, she remembers that she’s a KGB spy endowed with superhuman strength and abilities.


Chased by Russian assassins, the CIA and Interpol, Galina must find answers to the unsolved mysteries in her life and make those who betrayed her pay for their sins. Her quest brings her to America where she finds answers to her questions but must also battle with an old nemesis.

FEEDBACK

"BEWARE OF YOUR PAST. REMEMBERING WHO YOUARE CAN KILL YOU" An ageless female super soldier suffering from a decades long case of retrograde amnesia, recovers her memory during a hypnotherapy session. In an instant, she is a time traveler suddenly thrust into a future that doesn’t make sense. Chased by hired assassins, the Russian Secret Service and the CIA, Galina Karpikov realizes that the recovery of her identity makes her the most wanted woman in the world. A victim of betrayal by those that gave her super strength and abilities, Galina must solve the mystery of her missing years and make the KGB officer who killed her loved ones pay for the murder of her family.

About The Author

Born in South America and raised in the USA, Joseph Armillas has lived a very interesting life. His parents who were both show business performers traveled extensively throughout the world. His early memories are of constantly boarding planes, trains and automobiles and meeting a fascinating variety of characters while he traveled along with his parents who were constantly touring. An actor, writer and a musician, Joseph began showing his multitalented personality early on. He formed his first band while in High school and signed his first record deal when he was fifteen years old. After a three year stint with the US Army, Joseph returned to New York City where he began his professional acting and musical career. He’s performed on and Off Broadway and ran and operated a recording studio in lower Manhattan, N.Y. for sixteen years. In 1991 Joseph moved to Los Angeles California where he still resides to this day. A science fiction fan since early childhood, Joseph began writing short science fiction stories while in grammar school. The genesis of the Plantanimus Trilogy came from a recurring dream that he experienced over three consecutive nights during the summer of 2000. Though some of the complex aspects of the story changed over the eleven years that it took him to write the three books, the basic plot has remained close to the original “dream”. Joseph has trained himself to “lucid dream“ and says that this ability to experience dreams in a semi-awake state, gives him many ideas for his writing.

Mature Audience Themes

Extreme Violence

Characters

Main Character

Name: Galina Karpikov

Age: 25

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Badass,Complex,Confident,Heroic,Sexy,Skillful

Character 1

Name: General Constantine Dago

Age: 60+

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Criminal,Villainous,Narcisstic,Power Hungry,Manipulative

Character 2

Name: CIA Agent Cole Henderson

Age: 25+

Gender: Male

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Heroic

Character 3

Name: Mikhail Chernikien

Age: 80+

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Empathetic,Faithful,Educated,Modest,Selfless