TRAVERSE
DRAMA FAMILY ROMANCE YOUNG ADULT MEMOIR
20th Century (multiple decades)
John M Holewinski
Submision Type
book
Logline
Story of a man and a woman who's lives touched, only briefly but lasted forever...
Genre
Drama,Family,Romance,Young Adult,Memoir
Short Summary
Have you ever asked yourself, what if I went to college and completed my doctorate or what if I never was drafted into the service or any ‘what ifs’? Life is always an unveiling of the unasked ‘what ifs’ that were never thought of, the relentlessness of nature taking its true course.
Setting
Michigan, Ohio, Indiana
Based on a True Story
Yes
Plot - Premise
Quest,Other
Plot - Other Elements
Philosophical Questions
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Sarah
Age: Child to mid-life
Gender: Female
Role: Logical
Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Confident,Skillful,Romantic
Additional Character Details
Name: Mike
Age: 35ish
Gender: Male
Role: Logical
Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Clumsy,Masculine,Confident,Skillful,Faithful,Honorable
Additional Character Details
Name: Mike
Age: 35
Gender: Male
Role: logical
Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Clumsy,Faithful,Skillful
Additional Character Details
The author has not yet written this
Genre
ROMANCE, DRAMA
Brief
Trying to find Sarah many years later, Mike meets Penny and finds out his old flame had died, but he is actually Penny's father.
Overall Rating
GOOD
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: GOOD
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Pace: FAIR
Premise: GOOD
Structure: FAIR
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
Book profile doesn't comprise a description of the narrative.
Draw of Story
The story is straight to the point and the tragicness that disrupts the quiet life of a perfect family is interesting.
Possible Drawbacks
Nothing made me want to put the book down especially because the narrative unfolds itself fast.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
It is a simple story about life choices and the opportunities we have to make decisions that might change our entire future.
Fanbase Potential
It could have a large fanbase if protagonists are better developed, as well as narrative and side characters.
Awards Potential
If could have Awards potential if story is worked on in order to provide further development for characters, making room for better acting and directing.
Envisioned Budget
MEDIUM BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
PS I LOVE YOU, MODERN LOVE
What’s New About the Story
The story needs to be developed in order to become original, adding up layers to the main and supporting characters; as well as providing substance to the involvement between Mike and Sarah, which is key to the narrative.
Lead Characters
Lead characters need to be worked on in order to stand out; Sarah's character arc is not developed in order to create a strong, vulnerable and relatable protagonist.
Uniqueness of Story
The plot is interesting, however story needs to be improved in order to become a real narrative, with well-developed character arcs, including real motivations, vulnerabilities and credible personalities.
Possible Formats
Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming TV Series: Network, Cable, Limited Run / Mini-Series, Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
Even though good movie characters may appear on screen without much verbal explanation, their personalities, motivations and weaknesses are very well thought-of, and sharp character arcs are essential to get the audience's attention.