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John M Holewinski theholly@aol.com 1318561939515

DRAMA FAMILY ROMANCE YOUNG ADULT MEMOIR

20th Century (multiple decades)

John M Holewinski

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Logline

Story of a man and a woman who's lives touched, only briefly but lasted forever...

Genre

Drama,Family,Romance,Young Adult,Memoir

Short Summary

Have you ever asked yourself, what if I went to college and completed my doctorate or what if I never was drafted into the service or any ‘what ifs’? Life is always an unveiling of the unasked ‘what ifs’ that were never thought of, the relentlessness of nature taking its true course.


A wanted, semi-happy ending

Setting

Michigan, Ohio, Indiana

Based on a True Story

Yes

Plot - Premise

Quest,Other

Plot - Other Elements

Philosophical Questions

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Sarah

Age: Child to mid-life

Gender: Female

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Confident,Skillful,Romantic

Additional Character Details

Name: Mike

Age: 35ish

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Clumsy,Masculine,Confident,Skillful,Faithful,Honorable

Additional Character Details

Name: Mike

Age: 35

Gender: Male

Role: logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Clumsy,Faithful,Skillful

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

Have you ever asked yourself, what if I went to college and completed my doctorate or what if I never was drafted into the service or any ‘what ifs’? Life is always an unveiling of the unasked ‘what ifs’ that were never thought of, the relentlessness of nature taking its true course. So, did this really happen? Maybe, but judge for yourself, this may even be about you...

About The Author

John M Holewinski, day dreamer, story teller.

Target Audiences

Age: 35-54

Target Gender: Female Leaning,Universal

Group Specific

Love and golf

Publishing Details

Status: No

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

ROMANCE, DRAMA

Brief

Trying to find Sarah many years later, Mike meets Penny and finds out his old flame had died, but he is actually Penny's father.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

Book profile doesn't comprise a description of the narrative.

Draw of Story

The story is straight to the point and the tragicness that disrupts the quiet life of a perfect family is interesting.

Possible Drawbacks

Nothing made me want to put the book down especially because the narrative unfolds itself fast.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

It is a simple story about life choices and the opportunities we have to make decisions that might change our entire future.

Fanbase Potential

It could have a large fanbase if protagonists are better developed, as well as narrative and side characters.

Awards Potential

If could have Awards potential if story is worked on in order to provide further development for characters, making room for better acting and directing.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

PS I LOVE YOU, MODERN LOVE

What’s New About the Story

The story needs to be developed in order to become original, adding up layers to the main and supporting characters; as well as providing substance to the involvement between Mike and Sarah, which is key to the narrative.

Lead Characters

Lead characters need to be worked on in order to stand out; Sarah's character arc is not developed in order to create a strong, vulnerable and relatable protagonist.

Uniqueness of Story

The plot is interesting, however story needs to be improved in order to become a real narrative, with well-developed character arcs, including real motivations, vulnerabilities and credible personalities.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming TV Series: Network, Cable, Limited Run / Mini-Series, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Even though good movie characters may appear on screen without much verbal explanation, their personalities, motivations and weaknesses are very well thought-of, and sharp character arcs are essential to get the audience's attention.