THE GRIZZLY

JOHN KRAMER kman3dmodels@yahoo.com 1220081221691

ACTION ADVENTURE DRAMA FAMILY

1960s & '70s

JOHN SIDNEY KRAMER

Logline

In Grizzly country, an 11-year-old boy reunited on a weekend fishing trip with a father he fears, scarcely knows, and not seen for years. Their emotions and experiences collide as they work together to overcome their conflict and survive the Grizzly bears of Trapper’s Creek.

Genre

Action,Adventure,Drama,Family

Short Summary

When the father David scarcely knows, arrives to take him on a weekend fishing trip, the eleven-year-old David is unprepared. His parents had separated, and David fears that his, outdoorsman father will put him through test he cannot meet. But it's the wilderness that will be testing them both.


The weekend proves to be a turning point for both father and son. The intrusion of a giant mother grizzly, which chases David up into a tree, turns on Mark and injures him, eats their provisions, and finally puts their pickup truck out of commission. This forces David to take charge, and grow up.

Setting

Lakewood, Colorado and into the back country wilderness of Colorado.

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Other,Internal Journey/Rebirth

Plot - Other Elements

Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: David

Age: 11

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Complex,Insecure,Underdog

Additional Character Details

Name: Mark

Age: 30

Gender: Male

Role: Mentor

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Charming,Complex,Heroic,Honorable,Masculine,Skillful,Lone Wolf,Heartthrob,Romantic

Additional Character Details

Name: Jeanne

Age: 28

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Complex,Empathetic,Faithful,Gracious,Modest,Selfless,Romantic,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

Name: Jeanne

Age: 28

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Empathetic,Faithful,Gracious,Honorable,Modest,Selfless,Romantic

Development Pitch

The Grizzly is the coming of age story for a boy who's mother and father have separated for the last six years. When Mark, the father David scarcely knows takes him on a weekend fishing trip, the eleven-year-old David is forced to come to grip with memories from the past. His limited experience with fishing and the wilderness puts him in unexpected dangers. The weekend proves to be a turning point for both father and son. The intrusion of a giant mother grizzly, which chases David up into a tree, turns on Mark and injures him, eats their provisions, and finally puts their pickup truck out of commission. This forces David to take charge. But can he get himself and his injured father out of the forest in time? For this film, the cast is small, and use four locations saving in these areas of production. The cast includes the wife, husband, and son, with three to five supporting characters. Plus female grizzly and her two cubs and an old male grizzly, all will come alive through CG work. The Locations include the country home, a high mountain wilderness valley with a fishable stream running through it. Plus a roadside gas station and city hospital. Some natural bear habitat and fishable stream for second unit work will be necessary. A clean “G” rated production for all ages.

About The Author

This is an adapted screenplay of The Grizzly. The rights to this novel has been passed to me. The Grizzly written by my Great Aunt, Anabel Johnson in 1964.

Target Audiences

Age: 13-17,18-34,35-54,55+,7-12

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Hard Copy Available

No

WGA Number

2062330

Genre

DRAMA

Brief

David is a young boy whose father, Mark, has left him at a young age to pursue a job. Mark eventually reunites with David years later and takes him on a weekend fishing trip to rekindle the relationship with his son. During the trip there is a struggle to make up for lost time due to the son and father's contrasting personalities. The two find common ground through a dangerous encounter with a Grizzly Bear which makes David mature into a young man Mark would be proud of, and Mark realizing the importance of having a good relationship with his son.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

SCRIPT

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: EXCELLENT

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The script profile accurately reflects the book.

Draw of Story

The story is paced well to the point where the protagonist and his father are ready to embark on a fishing trip that will test their relationship in emotional ways and through physical and mental peril.

Possible Drawbacks

The story runs quite long at 137 pages, there is overuse of the flashback device and extensive voice-over of the protagonist that is off-putting.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

A son and his estranged father attempt to rekindle their relationship through a fishing trip that goes dangerously wrong. The premise has an interesting character dynamic that allows for tension to be built internally and externally in the story.

Fanbase Potential

If produced I can see this film garnering a niche to moderate fanbase. This is not a high-concept script, however, it has an interesting character dynamic that could help draw audiences into the story.

Awards Potential

If changes are made to the pacing, dialogue, and characterization of the two leads, I think this story has awards potential because it examines themes of fatherhood, courage, and masculinity in a way that fosters conversation about these subjects.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

FILMS SUCH AS "AFTER EARTH", "THE SHINING", AND "BIG FISH" ARE SIMILAR TO THIS STORY DUE TO THE THEMES ADDRESSED AND THE FATHER/SON DYNAMIC WITH THE LEAD CHARACTERS.

What’s New About the Story

Putting the lead characters in a primarily single location in the wilderness to hash out their issues is rather unique.

Lead Characters

Mark stands out in a bad way for being unnecessarily unlikable. I think Mark's personality can be toned down some and still achieve the same effect the author was striving for.

Uniqueness of Story

This is not quite a rare gem yet. Attention to the length/pacing, use of flashback/voice-over, and dialogue would go a long way in helping this story which already has a interesting premise stand out more.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Indie, Film - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

CONSIDER

Justification

If the author cuts a lot of unnecessary material and focuses on the core themes of the story, this can be a great story to adapt. It should be noted that the flaws in this story are very close to outweighing the pros and that special attention would be needed to help it reach its full potential.

Logline

In Grizzly country, an 11-year-old boy reunited on a weekend fishing trip with a father he fears, scarcely knows, and not seen for years. Their emotions and experiences collide as they work together to overcome their conflict and survive the Grizzly bears of Trapper’s Creek.

Short Summary

When the father David scarcely knows, arrives to take him on a weekend fishing trip, the eleven-year-old David is unprepared. His parents had separated, and David fears that his, outdoorsman father will put him through test he cannot meet. But it's the wilderness that will be testing them both.


The weekend proves to be a turning point for both father and son. The intrusion of a giant mother grizzly, which chases David up into a tree, turns on Mark and injures him, eats their provisions, and finally puts their pickup truck out of commission. This forces David to take charge, and grow up.

FEEDBACK

The Grizzly is the coming of age story for a boy who's mother and father have separated for the last six years. When Mark, the father David scarcely knows takes him on a weekend fishing trip, the eleven-year-old David is forced to come to grip with memories from the past. His limited experience with fishing and the wilderness puts him in unexpected dangers. The weekend proves to be a turning point for both father and son. The intrusion of a giant mother grizzly, which chases David up into a tree, turns on Mark and injures him, eats their provisions, and finally puts their pickup truck out of commission. This forces David to take charge. But can he get himself and his injured father out of the forest in time? For this film, the cast is small, and use four locations saving in these areas of production. The cast includes the wife, husband, and son, with three to five supporting characters. Plus female grizzly and her two cubs and an old male grizzly, all will come alive through CG work. The Locations include the country home, a high mountain wilderness valley with a fishable stream running through it. Plus a roadside gas station and city hospital. Some natural bear habitat and fishable stream for second unit work will be necessary. A clean “G” rated production for all ages.

About The Author

This is an adapted screenplay of The Grizzly. The rights to this novel has been passed to me. The Grizzly written by my Great Aunt, Anabel Johnson in 1964.

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Characters

Main Character

Name: David

Age: 11

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Complex,Insecure,Underdog

Character 1

Name: Mark

Age: 30

Gender: Male

Role: Mentor

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Charming,Complex,Heroic,Honorable,Masculine,Skillful,Lone Wolf,Heartthrob,Romantic

Character 2

Name: Jeanne

Age: 28

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Complex,Empathetic,Faithful,Gracious,Modest,Selfless,Romantic,Strong Moral Code

Character 3

Name: Jeanne

Age: 28

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Empathetic,Faithful,Gracious,Honorable,Modest,Selfless,Romantic