Redbone

Jimmie N. Barnes

Book Cover

GENRE

ACTION HORROR ADVENTURE APOCALYPTIC FOLKTALE GOTHIC DRAMA EPIC MYSTERY SUSPENSE/THRILLER

    Core Theme

    MAN VS. EVIL. ACCEPTING ONE'S INHERITED RESPONSIBILITIES.

    TIME PERIOD

    Earlier 20th Century,20th Century (multiple decades)

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    THE HOWLING, WOLF, AN AMERICAN WEREWOLF IN LONDON

    CHARACTER LIST

    TIM: 20S. CURIOUS, ADVENTUROUS, BRAVE, DETERMINED.

    SALLY. 20S. TIM'S LOVE INTEREST AND PARTNER IN HIS QUEST.

    JAMES. 94. TIM'S GRANDAD'S BEST FRIEND WHO GUIDES HIM IN THE JOB HE IS DESTINED TO PERFORM.

    JOSHUA. 30S. TIM'S GRANDAD WHO IS KILLED BY THE WEREWOLF.

    MARIA. 50S-70S. JAMES' HOUSEKEEPER.

    CHUCARO. UNKNOWN. THE WEREWOLF DEMON WHO IS OUT TO KILL TIM.

    Logline

    The world has been free from the dark sides demons for eighty two years, thanks to the battle won by James Mathew Trinton between good and evil. Tim Jones has no idea what life is about to put on his plate, but he alone can fight the horror that is about to confront the world. The test Begins.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 7-12,13-17,18-34,35-54,55+

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    Pheonix Arizona and the south Arizona border

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Christian Faith Publishing

    Year Published: 2017

    Starting Description

    !904 the Arizona territory is introduced to the demon Redbone and his craving to kill the upstanding Lawmen of the day. Then time advances to 1984 and Tim Jones arriving in Phoenix to find an old friend of his recently deceased Grandfather and a legend to write about!

    Ending Description

    As Tim and his new bride engage in the battle to save life from the evils of Satin they find they have both won and lost! The worst that could happen has fallen on the couple and the battle continues.

    Group Specific

    Pheonix Arizona and The Arizona desert. Strange life of a normal family

    Hard Copy Available

    No

    ISBN

    Information not completed

    Mature Audience Themes

    Information not completed

    Plot - Other Elements

    Coming of Age,Twist,Other

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain,Quest,Rebellion Against 'The One',Tragedy

    Main Character Details

    Name: Tim Jones

    Age: Early 20's

    Gender: Male

    Role: Logical

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Masculine,Modest,Charming,Confident,Religious,Selfless,Engaging,Faithful,Romantic,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Strong Moral Code,Leader,Unapologetic,Lone Wolf

    Additional Character Details

    Name: James Mathew Trinton

    Age: 94

    Gender: Male

    Role: Mentor

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Modest,Aspiring,Complex,Uneducated,Confident,Patriotic,Blunt,Desperate,Selfless,Outspoken,Engaging,Heroic,Secretive,Honorable,Strong Moral Code,Leader,Unapologetic,Lone Wolf

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Sally Wallace

    Age: Early 20's

    Gender: Female

    Role: sidekick

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Modest,Charming,Confident,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Heartthrob,Honorable,Sexy,Funny,Romantic,Seductive

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Chucaro

    Age: Undead

    Gender: Male

    Role: antagonist

    Key Traits: Masculine,Villainous,Narcisstic,Badass,Aggressive,Complex,Confident,Criminal,Blunt,Decisive,Power Hungry,Greedy,Sarcastic,Secretive,Manipulative,Unapologetic,Lone Wolf

    Development Pitch

    The world has been free from the dark sides demons for eighty two years, thanks to the battle won by James Mathew Trinton between good and evil. But that time of peace and safety is coming to an end, and there will be a reckoning should the coming c confrontation not be met with the same determination as it was in the past! Tim Jones has no idea what life is about to put on his plate, but he alone can fight the horror that is about to confront the world. Can he save normalcy for all including his newfound love? The test of a lifetime is waged between life and death. A sinister wind blows and the desert is with an air of evil!

    Genre

    THRILLER, ROMANCE, RELIGION, DRAMA, ACTION

    Brief

    A werewolf type demon is killing lawmen in the old west. 82 years later the curse is still alive and the grandson of one of the lawmen is tasked with killing the beast.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: GOOD

    Characterization: GOOD

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: GOOD

    Pace: GOOD

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: GOOD

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    Yes, the profile does depict the book properly.

    Draw of Story

    A supernatural creature is a very strong draw.

    Possible Drawbacks

    The characters were a bit one dimensional. They could be written with more facets to their personalities, i.e., more fear, hesitation, trepidation and feelings of gravitas about the whole endeavor.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    An unstoppable supernatural creature.

    Fanbase Potential

    Small to medium. There aren't any twists and turns and the action is over quickly. The romance doesn't ring true and things all go too smoothly.

    Awards Potential

    No. The characters aren't well-drawn out, the story isn't that original and it isn't rich in detail. There are no character arcs and the story arc doesn't have enough punch. The dialogue is borderline hokey at times.

    Envisioned Budget

    MEDIUM BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    WOLF, THE HOWLING, AN AMERICAN WEREWOLF IN LONDON

    What’s New About the Story

    It's original in that the werewolf is portrayed as an intelligent demon instead of just a bloodthirsty monster. The monster could be more clever and harder to kill. It needs to give them more of a run for their money.

    Lead Characters

    They're pious, and it doesn't take much to make them believe in the evil that is stalking them. When they understand what they're up against, they go all-in.

    Uniqueness of Story

    As it is, not a rare gem. A tad derivative.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, Film - Studio

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    The story isn't complex enough and neither are the characters. The monster isn't very scary. It could be just a man stalking them.

    Tips for Improvement

    A more complex and interesting antagonist who is harder to defeat and heroes who have faults and gravitas.

    Brief

    Tim is a writer looking for a story, but is shocked to find out that through his lineage he is part of a big one. His grandfather was a lawman who was killed, among others, by a werewolf demon from hell who comes back every 82 years. Tim is now his target, and with the guidance of an old man he must figure out how to kill the creature.

    What We Liked

    Werewolves have been a part of cinema since the early days, and the curse is one that resonates with audiences. Man vs. beast is more interesting when they are the same being, although this one is different. It's literally a demon from hell that is sentient and bent on death and destruction. Seemingly impossible to defeat, it is fun to watch as it will take everything our heros can muster to break the curse. The desert landscape and old-timey Western towns are very cinematic, as are unstoppable monsters. This has both, and the quest to kill a monster is a great story arc for a film. Throw in a romance, and it's on its way to becoming a classic film. There is plenty of build-up and suspense as it makes it way to its climax, and you root for the characters along the way. The monster is worth all the trouble, being a ruthless blood-thirsty wolf from hell whose only mission is to kill the innocent - but will killing him really stop the curse?

    Key points: Monsters; The Old West; New love; Legends and lore; A surprise ending

    Synopsis

    A marshall rides his horse into the settlement called Canyon Rim in Arizona. It’s the early 1900s. A man-creature in black on a black horse appears and says some cryptic words about his master, Satan, as the marshall shoots him in the chest. It does no good, but the creature returns fire, hitting the marshall in the chest with a pentagram shaped hail of bullets. The hairy creature in black yells that he is “Redbone” and he has claimed the marshall for hell. In 1985, Tim drives his Nova through the Arizona heat and stops for a soda and a phone book to find the man in his nineties whom he’s searching for, James Trinton. Tim finds a cheap comfortable hotel and recalls his fondness for his grandfather and Tim’s own desire to be a writer. When his grandfather died, he left Tim some money, the deed to his farm and his truck so Tim could have a head start on being a writer. He instructs Tim to find his old friend James Trinton who will have stories for him to write. Tim has a nightmare in his room and notices the moon, which always makes him uneasy. He’s scared, but of what, he doesn’t know. He dreams of his grandfather telling him to beware. At Denny’s, he meets a pretty waitress named Sally who offers to help him find James. They spend an evening together watching the sunset and drinking beers and spend the next several nights together. At her suggestion, he puts an ad in the paper for James, and James finally calls.

    He goes to James’ house and James tells him a story about growing up with Tim’s grandpa. James’ dad, Joshua, was sheriff, and they had a nasty encounter with Mexican bank robbers but Tim’s grandpa Patrick saved James and his mother when they were just boys. They then cut their hands and became blood brothers. Joshua rewards them with a horse each, guns, and a three week hunting trip. On their hunting trip, they get caught in a dust storm and have to deal with a rattlesnake under a blanket. Back in 1985, James asks Tim if anything strange has happened since he got into town and Tim tells him he feels like he’s being watched, especially when the moon is full. James seems to have known this already. James tells Tim to bring Sally with him the next day and they can stay in the guest room. Back in the old west, the rest of the hunting trip was beautiful and uneventful until James’ dad gets a bad feeling that something is happening back home so they rush back to find the Tucson sheriff, Bob, who has been killed. Joshua is told the story about how a man dressed in black on a black horse took a bullet to the heart from Bob but shot and killed him anyway then rode off. They followed his tracks but they disappeared. James falls asleep, and Sally and Tim both see an apparition in the dark. The next morning, James begins to speak to Tim telepathically. Tim is astonished. James speaks aloud again, telling Sally she has a part to play in this as well. Then he recounts how Joshua went out to face Redbone and was shot and killed like the rest - bullet holes in the shape of a pentagram. Young James and Pat are in shock, and James wires his mother with the bad news. James reads Tim and Sally from the old diary of a lawman who is afraid of what’s been happening in different places under full moons - an entity on a black horse killing lawmen. He vowed to find his grandmother’s book on all things demonic. The whole town turns out for Joshua’s funeral, and James sees a huge wolf in the door of the church but it disappears. James recounts the next time Redbone came into town to kill lawment. This time, James took his father’s gun and shot him - and Redbone was shocked as he fell off his horse, wounded. James shot him between the eyes. The black horse took off and disappeared.

    James dies in 1985. They begin going through James’ stuff and find his journals and notes. Tim reads James’ tome on vampires, werewolves and demons. Tim still feels James is a part of him. He and Sally go to a movie and Tim is confronted by a wolf, but it can’t hurt him since the moon isn't full. Still, it nearly makes him fall off a cliff. A priest helps bless the grave they dig for James out in his vast orange groves. Tim finds he can communicate with the beast and its name is Chucaro. Somehow it is weakened when it’s in James’ orange groves. Tim buries James himself and sees the ghost of his grandpa and James staring at him. Then he sees several copies of them amongst the groves. At night, Sally hallucinates that Redbone starting to have his way with her. She is terrified and when the apparition disappears she falls into a fitful sleep. She sees a glimpse of him the next day and faints. Tim, not sure what happened, tries to make her comfortable. He goes over all that he has learned and says he is scared of confronting Redbone until the word “magic” comes to him and he has an idea. He sends one of the servants into town and he comes back with boxes from a magic store and Radio Shack. Tim loads up on weapons, including his grandpa’s sword, which he sharpens. That night, he proposes to Sally and she accepts. They will marry the next day on the ranch. Tim and Sally marry in a simple ceremony, but over the consecrated ground near where they buried James. Tim plays the creature’s threat that he recorded for the priest, who vows to help them. Tim sets up speakers outside and melts silver into bullets. The beast appears at the window that night, telling Tim that he will be dead on the next night when the moon is full. Time shows him the bullets as the creature disappears. The next night, Chucaro shows up on his horse. Tim, dressed in his grandfather’s old cowboy outfit along with his pistol, hurls insults at the creature. Tim is able to evade the horse as it tries to run him down and lures him into the grove near James’ grave where mirrors are set up. There appear to be many Tims, and the creature is confused. Tim is able to shoot Chucaro through the head. Then, he takes the sword and decapitates it. He and Sally dig a shallow grave for the creature but it turns to dust. The next day, Tim is troubled by what the creature said - that he will see his face in his nightmares again. On the news, a policeman was ripped apart by a creature that same night. Tim realizes that Chucaro has a twin brother. Sally is in the bathroom throwing up violently. She finds a wound on her hand that won’t wash off, as if she has been marked by the curse.

    About The Author

    From growing up in a small town in East Texas, imagination became a key factor in daily life. Jimmie has created stories and characters all through his school years. He began playing music at an early age and has been a working musician for most of his life. Writing songs and performing has helped define that creative imagination. Whether it be learning new music, writing a new song, or working on his next story, Jimmie stays busy enjoying life. Taking a break from work to ride his Harley or just relaxing with friends, the wheels are always turning toward a new creation. He never knows what life experience may touch someone when when they read or hear it!