Beanie's Dogs (AFLOAT Pilot)

Jeffrey Byrem jeffleeb999@gmail.com 1427016024123

SUSPENSE/THRILLER HISTORICAL FICTION FAMILY CRIME

20th Century (multiple decades)

Jeff Lee Byrem

Logline

"Afloat," the series, is about Karl Myers, a WW II vet and hard-edged cop and his son and how in the 50s they navigate a world still reeling from the fallout of World War II. The pilot, "Beanie's Dogs," begins the saga with the brutal murder of a young boy.

Genre

Suspense/Thriller,Historical Fiction,Family,Crime

Short Summary

Ex Marine gives his 12-yr-old son his first rifle; the father's brutal treatment of his son and wife are confirmed; Karl Myers is a lonely police chief, new to a town where families are still dealing with fallout from WW II in a town yet to resolve the end of the Civil War.


The end of the pilot sets up Episode 2, "The Wicked Web:" Myers discovers the murdered boy, who has just been mauled by Beanie's dogs, and the final shot is of the victim's catatonic 9-year-old sister sitting on a scarp, peering at the scene of the murder that she has witnessed.

Setting

Coastal Fishing Town (Lewes, Delaware)

Based on a True Story

Yes

Plot - Premise

Tragedy

Plot - Other Elements

Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Extreme Violence, Language/Profanity

Main Character Details

Name: Karl Myers

Age: 42

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Complex,Decisive,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Modest,Romantic,Lone Wolf,Empathetic,Secretive,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

Name: Greg Peterman

Age: 12

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Desperate,Insecure,Villainous,Narcisstic,Secretive,Manipulative,Unapologetic

Additional Character Details

Name: Vivian Peterman

Age: 33

Gender: Female

Role: tempter

Key Traits: Desperate,Engaging,Insecure,Sexy,Selfless,Romantic,Seductive,Manipulative,Secretive

Additional Character Details

Name: Jerry Peterman

Age: 33

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Insecure,Masculine,Narcisstic,Outspoken,Secretive,Manipulative,Unapologetic,Decisive,Villainous

Development Pitch

The series, "Afloat," explores dark sides of “The Greatest Generation” in a world still reeling from the fallout of World War II. Set in two, small coastal towns--Lewes, DE and Port Townsend, WA--anchored by an epic coming of age adventure in the South Pacific, "Afloat" deals with the claustrophobic lives led by the wives of WW II vets, Jim Crow racism of the post-war South, and the attempts of Karl Myers (a vet in his forties), his wife Laura Benton, and their son Bill Benton to find their rightful place in 1950's America. In Series 1 (comprised of 8, scripted, 1-hour episodes), a failed affair, a town that has yet to reconcile the fallout from the Civil War, and a botched police investigation send Myers 3000 miles west to find Laura (who left him in 1939), and on that journey, he encounters a prison break, unresolved murders, his wife’s bigamy, a son he never knew, and the place his heart is destined to call home. Season 1 of "Afloat" is adapted from two novels of the Myers/Benton Chronicles: www.jeffleenovels.com.

About The Author

Jeff Lee Byrem has written 8 self-published novels and a book of short stories under the pseudonym, Jeff Lee, and several screenplays awaiting discovery. A life-long educator, Jeff served as a teacher, high school principal, and state bureaucrat before turning his energies toward his life's first interest: writing.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Publishing Details

Hard Copy Available

No

WGA Number

Information not completed

Genre

SUSPENSE, DRAMA

Brief

Karl Myers is a police officer in a small town, serving the community in the 1950's. Barry and Greg are young friends who go out into the field to play with a rifle and Grey shoots and kills Barry. Greg's father is an abusive man who threatens his family. Barry's mother is anxious, looking for both her kids when Greg confesses that him and Barry were attacked.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

SCRIPT

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: GOOD

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

The script profile does accurately reflect the script.

Draw of Story

The story begins with Greg and his father, Jerry, in the mountains. Greg is gifted a rifle and his father threatens him if he ever uses it without him around. It sets it up for an accidental death at Greg's hand which is predictable but there's room for many scenarios. The scene also alludes to Greg's father being abusive.

Possible Drawbacks

Karl is supposed to be the lead character but his scenes are the least interesting. There are multiple layers to the Greg's story: his abusive father, his gentle mother, her connection with other abused women, murdering his friend and covering it up. The audiences also gets to see the dynamic of Barry and Patsy's parents as they continue to go missing. Even Jerry, Greg's father, gets some exploration with his abusive behavior and cheating ways. Karl should have more character development in the pilot. That should change now that he is not involved in the plot and should take more of the main focus of the story.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that a small town cop now has a gruesome murder on his hands. I would watch the story to see is the truth comes out about Barry's death and how its turns the community upside down.

Fanbase Potential

This could have a decent sized fanbase. Crime shows are very popular and this is a period drama which can add suspense without the modern technology to aid in the story. There is room to explore a lot of different issues with the tie to WWII vets and the ideology of the time.

Awards Potential

This could have awards potential as it deals with very hard hitting topics and can be a great vehicle for character development. There is a murder cover-up, a mauled body, an abused family, a young girl who possibly witnessed the truth and a small town cop trying to piece it all together. There are a lot of opportunities for great acting.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

MARE OF EASTTOWN, THE LITTLE THINGS

What’s New About the Story

The story is not very original at the moment. The story is being told through multiple perspectives and many of the situations are typical for a drama. As a pilot, it has the potential to garner some unique elements in its storytelling. Barry's death by Greg looks like it will go unnoticed as a crime because his body was found half eaten by dogs. It was an unexpected twist and it will be interesting to see the drama unfold. It can go in many different ways but in the end, it is a "who done it" storyline which isn't new.

Lead Characters

The lead character doesn't stand out at the moment. The support characters are more prevalent and memorable. Greg and his mom are subject to the abusive Jerry. There is more time spent on the relationship between the family and Greg's friends. When he accidentally shots Barry and leaves his body in the field, there is time spent on this storyline. It appears that they pilot episode was setting the plot up which didn't include Karl Myers but now he is involved.

Uniqueness of Story

This is a solid start to a promising drama. It doesn't feel wholly unique at the moment but does pique interest in the story. It set up many different perspectives and storylines as well as possible resolutions.

Possible Formats

Television

Analyst Recommendation

CONSIDER

Justification

This is a consider because it is a well written pilot that creates interest in the audience. It created the world of the story, explores the plot and introduces many characters. It is a period crime drama when there are not many of those on television. It is set during a very harsh time in American history and the proper care should be taken to represent it correctly.

Logline

"Afloat," the series, is about Karl Myers, a WW II vet and hard-edged cop and his son and how in the 50s they navigate a world still reeling from the fallout of World War II. The pilot, "Beanie's Dogs," begins the saga with the brutal murder of a young boy.

Short Summary

Ex Marine gives his 12-yr-old son his first rifle; the father's brutal treatment of his son and wife are confirmed; Karl Myers is a lonely police chief, new to a town where families are still dealing with fallout from WW II in a town yet to resolve the end of the Civil War.


The end of the pilot sets up Episode 2, "The Wicked Web:" Myers discovers the murdered boy, who has just been mauled by Beanie's dogs, and the final shot is of the victim's catatonic 9-year-old sister sitting on a scarp, peering at the scene of the murder that she has witnessed.

FEEDBACK

The series, "Afloat," explores dark sides of “The Greatest Generation” in a world still reeling from the fallout of World War II. Set in two, small coastal towns--Lewes, DE and Port Townsend, WA--anchored by an epic coming of age adventure in the South Pacific, "Afloat" deals with the claustrophobic lives led by the wives of WW II vets, Jim Crow racism of the post-war South, and the attempts of Karl Myers (a vet in his forties), his wife Laura Benton, and their son Bill Benton to find their rightful place in 1950's America. In Series 1 (comprised of 8, scripted, 1-hour episodes), a failed affair, a town that has yet to reconcile the fallout from the Civil War, and a botched police investigation send Myers 3000 miles west to find Laura (who left him in 1939), and on that journey, he encounters a prison break, unresolved murders, his wife’s bigamy, a son he never knew, and the place his heart is destined to call home. Season 1 of "Afloat" is adapted from two novels of the Myers/Benton Chronicles: www.jeffleenovels.com.

About The Author

Jeff Lee Byrem has written 8 self-published novels and a book of short stories under the pseudonym, Jeff Lee, and several screenplays awaiting discovery. A life-long educator, Jeff served as a teacher, high school principal, and state bureaucrat before turning his energies toward his life's first interest: writing.

Mature Audience Themes

Extreme Violence, Language/Profanity

Characters

Main Character

Name: Karl Myers

Age: 42

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Complex,Decisive,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Modest,Romantic,Lone Wolf,Empathetic,Secretive,Strong Moral Code

Character 1

Name: Greg Peterman

Age: 12

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Desperate,Insecure,Villainous,Narcisstic,Secretive,Manipulative,Unapologetic

Character 2

Name: Vivian Peterman

Age: 33

Gender: Female

Role: tempter

Key Traits: Desperate,Engaging,Insecure,Sexy,Selfless,Romantic,Seductive,Manipulative,Secretive

Character 3

Name: Jerry Peterman

Age: 33

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Insecure,Masculine,Narcisstic,Outspoken,Secretive,Manipulative,Unapologetic,Decisive,Villainous