Two Many Wives

Jeffrey Jordan jjordan65@gmail.com 5354896097434

COMEDY FAMILY ROMANCE MELODRAMA LGBT

Contemporary

Jeffrey Jordan

Logline

A committed couple Nicole Durand and Leslie Sinclair decide the only way to have kids is to find a committed father. He must love them as much as they love each other.They will live together and build a family from this relationship,

Genre

Comedy,Family,Romance,Melodrama,LGBT

Short Summary

Leslie and Nicole discover one of their possible candidates for a shared husband and father is a cartoonist and author Jeremy Reid. After considering him and agreeing he's their guy, they propose to him and he accepts. From this point, the process is working out everyday issues and expectations.


This is a series. Think of this as "Three Is Company" with benefits. I would write it in thirty-minute episodes. I have two complete seasons (12 episodes). I wrote the pilot as an hour to flesh out the characters and set the plot.

Setting

Midwest Urban

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Language/Profanity

Main Character Details

Name: Jeremy Reid

Age: 32

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Charming,Clumsy,Complex,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Modest,Selfless,Skillful,Funny,Romantic

Additional Character Details

Name: Nicole Durand

Age: 28

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Funny,Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Heartthrob,Educated,Honorable,Sexy,Blunt,Outspoken,Romantic,Seductive

Additional Character Details

Name: Nicole Durand

Age: 28

Gender: Female

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Aggressive,Complex,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Unapologetic,Seductive,Romantic,Funny,Outspoken,Selfless,Sexy

Additional Character Details

Name: Leslie Sinclair

Age: 29

Gender: Female

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Aspiring,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Unapologetic,Sophisticated,Seductive,Romantic,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Sexy

Development Pitch

I see this story as a reflection of family life in modern society. The conflicts and solutions these three face are typical of any family. But what is a family when we bring friends into our family by making them honorary brothers and sisters? How do two people form a family? Why does communication between spouses fall apart? There are no nude scenes in my script. Characters will flirt, embrace and kiss each other, but actors will not be asked to simulate foreplay or intercourse. Instead, all the sex is implied. The reason is to allow the viewer to fill in that activity with their own imagination. The hard parts, the day-to-day living with each other, working out who does what and what is to be done, are the guts of the show.

About The Author

Writer Jeffrey Jordan moved from novel writing (26 Women) to scripts on the advice of his editor. I live alone in the City by the Inland Sea, Milwaukee. I enjoy keeping in touch with my nine children, fourteen grandchildren and watching my 5 great-grandchildren grow.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Hard Copy Available

No

WGA Number

Information not completed

Genre

ROMANCE, DRAMA, LGBT

Brief

Nicole, a museum curator, wants to start a family with her partner of 6 years, a doctor named Leslie. They search for a potential father for their children but seek more than just a sperm donor. Nicole finds promise in one of her museum's donors, the cartoonist, Jeremy Reid. The women take him into their fold and he gladly accepts, but Nicole's job becomes in jeopardy due to their situation.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

SCRIPT

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: EXCELLENT

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: FAIR

Premise: EXCELLENT

Structure: GOOD

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

The profile very accurately describes the story although there are two improvements that could be beneficial. Nicole is listed twice in the character details instead of Jeremy. And part of the short summary comparing the premise to the sitcom "Three's Company" with benefits would be better in the development pitch about why the story is marketable.

Draw of Story

Yes the hook is clear from the start that the couple is looking to add a third in a respectful and longterm manner.

Possible Drawbacks

There is the unsure nature of whether Jeremy will accept their offer, but once they are together, only Nicole seems to have stakes to loose. The other two characters don't have foreseeable conflicts to carryover throughout the season. By adding their own inner conflicts to the character or separate subplots, there will be more of an idea about what will carry in terms of conflict throughout multiple episodes.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that this is a relationship drama with polyamory and a throuple are the main characters.

Fanbase Potential

This could definitely have a large modern fanbase due to its unique family makeup, however certain conflicts and character development would need to be more pronounced.

Awards Potential

This may have awards potential depending on the issues discussed and emotional range of the relationship as the themes and characters are pretty composed and level in the first episode.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

THIS IS US, THREE'S COMPANY, HAPPY ENDINGS, 2 BROKE GIRLS, HOW I MET YOUR MOTHER, TWO AND A HALF MEN, MOMS

What’s New About the Story

The originality stems from the couple dynamic rather that their occupations, so focusing less on their work and more on their personalities and different interactions would strengthen their characters to produce more character driven proactive plots.

Lead Characters

Nicole is curious, responsible and loving. Jeremy is calm, patient and open-minded. Leslie is hard-working, direct and sensual.

Uniqueness of Story

This as a neat concept, but the characters themselves could use more development with inner conflicts. The main conflicts for the season's B story is also uncertain for future episodes.

Possible Formats

Television

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

The characters' focus a lot on their job and the working side of their relationship. There are no lasting conflicts nor is there a conflict in Jeremy joining the setup. The B story of the series is not apparent.

Tips for Improvement

Focusing more on the character's inner conflicts to set up series long conflicts and transformations outside of jobs would better display the relationship dynamics and potential relationship issues in the pilot. The dialogue contains a lot of exposition, but more nuanced and distinct speech patterns could also help diversify the character development outside of their profession.

Logline

A committed couple Nicole Durand and Leslie Sinclair decide the only way to have kids is to find a committed father. He must love them as much as they love each other.They will live together and build a family from this relationship,

Short Summary

Leslie and Nicole discover one of their possible candidates for a shared husband and father is a cartoonist and author Jeremy Reid. After considering him and agreeing he's their guy, they propose to him and he accepts. From this point, the process is working out everyday issues and expectations.


This is a series. Think of this as "Three Is Company" with benefits. I would write it in thirty-minute episodes. I have two complete seasons (12 episodes). I wrote the pilot as an hour to flesh out the characters and set the plot.

FEEDBACK

I see this story as a reflection of family life in modern society. The conflicts and solutions these three face are typical of any family. But what is a family when we bring friends into our family by making them honorary brothers and sisters? How do two people form a family? Why does communication between spouses fall apart? There are no nude scenes in my script. Characters will flirt, embrace and kiss each other, but actors will not be asked to simulate foreplay or intercourse. Instead, all the sex is implied. The reason is to allow the viewer to fill in that activity with their own imagination. The hard parts, the day-to-day living with each other, working out who does what and what is to be done, are the guts of the show.

About The Author

Writer Jeffrey Jordan moved from novel writing (26 Women) to scripts on the advice of his editor. I live alone in the City by the Inland Sea, Milwaukee. I enjoy keeping in touch with my nine children, fourteen grandchildren and watching my 5 great-grandchildren grow.

Mature Audience Themes

Language/Profanity

Characters

Main Character

Name: Jeremy Reid

Age: 32

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Charming,Clumsy,Complex,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Modest,Selfless,Skillful,Funny,Romantic

Character 1

Name: Nicole Durand

Age: 28

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Funny,Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Complex,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Heartthrob,Educated,Honorable,Sexy,Blunt,Outspoken,Romantic,Seductive

Character 2

Name: Nicole Durand

Age: 28

Gender: Female

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Aggressive,Complex,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Unapologetic,Seductive,Romantic,Funny,Outspoken,Selfless,Sexy

Character 3

Name: Leslie Sinclair

Age: 29

Gender: Female

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Aspiring,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Unapologetic,Sophisticated,Seductive,Romantic,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Sexy