Mine, Body and Soul: Trilogy

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ROMANCE

Contemporary

JP Sayle

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Logline

Two men, with past's that make them both vulnerable. A Dom, the other not part of the lifestyle, try to figure out how to navigate their feelings and the impact this has when one man is scared through life-changing events and the other who has damage through carelessness, that requires surgery.

Genre

Romance

Short Summary

Nathan meets Lenny at his best friend and business partners restaurant. The attraction is instant but Nathan is conflicted by Lenny not being apart of his lifestyle and naive. Lenny's life is complicated by a stoma he has. Never having had a boyfriend he confused by his own submissive behaviour.


After navigating surgery, a kidnapping, and the introduction into BDSM, Lenny finds the true meaning of being Mine, Body and Soul for Nathan, as does he as he claims back what he lost in a dank cave in Iraq.

Setting

London

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Other

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Nudity,Extreme Violence

Main Character Details

Name: Nathan

Age: 42

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Masculine,Badass,Charming,Sexy,Selfless,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Adventurous,Skillful,Seductive,Strong Moral Code,Leader,Honorable,Heroic,Gracious

Additional Character Details

Name: Lenny

Age: 25

Gender: Male

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Modest,Obedient,Clumsy,Complex,Selfless,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Funny,Romantic,Naive

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Development Pitch

This is a gritty story that follows two men along their journey of self-discovery and understanding that sharing past hurts doesn't make you weak. Where trust, must come from both people in a relationship to make it work, to survive. Nathan was a war veteran who is scarred, physically and emotionally. Lenny was neglected as a child and found wandering the streets after he leaves his dead mother in the squat they lived in. Life isn’t all sweetness and light. No, it’s anything but and this story takes you on an emotional roller coaster of highs and lows that will have you hanging on to the edge of your seat and screaming please fix it as the story evolves and Lenny suffers at the hands of others. The story offers insight into how a person deals with genuine health issues. The characters are believable and most of all make you want to be a part of their life as you watch them struggle to find the right balance in a world where being different is not a bad thing, but something to be embraced. The developing sexual relationship between the main characters is built slowly as they come to grips with what it means to be together in the truest sense, emotionally as well as physically. The side characters add depth and build a world that is intriguing enough that you'll want all the answers to the questions. This trilogy is one story split into three parts to show how someone can become more as they accept themselves.

About The Author

Let me introduce myself, my name is Jayne, I’m a lady of a certain age (over 50, bites fingernails). I am an identical twin, the younger one of course by 7 minutes. I am married to a wonderfully complicated man, or as he puts it, off his rocker Rob. We have celebrated our 25th wedding anniversary. I have one daughter and two grandbabies one boy and one girl. I was born in the Isle of Man; this makes me Manx (not British or English). I moved to the UK for several years, and as a child, I lived in Italy for a while. But, the island calls to me so I returned home in 1998. I love the sea and now it’s only a stone’s throw from my home. I have worked in the caring profession for 34 years and have been a hospital nurse manager, out of hours, until very recently, now I write full time pursuing my lifelong dream of becoming a full-time writer. I have always believed that I could and would write a book, but life just seemed to get in the way. Until someone asked me the question, “What do I want?” The answer was easy, the hard part was making it happen. Well, it did and it has and it was life-changing for me. Follow your dreams, because you never know where they will take you next.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: LGBT Leaning,Universal

Group Specific

LGBT

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Self

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

9798625014984

Genre

ROMANCE, MATURE AUDIENCE, LGBT

Brief

Nathan and Lenny meet and have an instant attraction. Nathan is a dominant and wants to teach Lenny how to be a submissive. They both have traumatic events that need to work on to be together. Lenny learns about the world of BDSM while his and Nathan's relationship blossoms.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: GOOD

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes the book profile accurately reflects the story.

Draw of Story

Nathan and Lenny have a very strong attraction as soon as they see each other. There is also an interesting look into the world of BDSM.

Possible Drawbacks

The book relies heavily on the sex to drive the plot. If there was more focus on the world of BDSM and not seeing it through the constructs of Lenny and Nathan's relationship, it could be more interesting.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that this is Fifty Shades of Grey with a same sex couple. I would watch this movie but it needs more substance.

Fanbase Potential

This will not have a large fanbase even though it is very similar to Fifty Shades of Grey. I do not think that main audiences are open to an explicit sex film with a gay couple yet. Fifty Shades of Grey had lots of backlash and that displayed an all American couple.

Awards Potential

This story, as is, does not have awards potential. It is centered around BDSM and not in an artistic way. It could have awards potential if it showed insight into the BDSM world and focused on the LGBTQIA community within.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

FIFTY SHADES OF GREY, SECRETARY, CALL ME BY NAME

What’s New About the Story

The story is original because it shows the relationship between a gay couple in the BDSM world. The format it follows, however, is not original as it is about intense attraction and sexual desire only. There are many stories like this in which the sex scenes are the most important part.

Lead Characters

The lead characters are somewhat polarizing. Nathan is an alpha male who is a dominant, and aggressive. Lenny was very meek and anxious which sometimes made the relationship seem abusive. The relationship was always consensual.

Uniqueness of Story

This is an average story about sex and lust with a little bit of love and romance thrown in. It can be improved by either focusing on the BDSM community or deepening the emotional connection between Lenny and Nathan.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

To make this a consider, there would need to be more of an emotional storyline. Much of the story is about the next sexual trial Nathan can put Lenny through. They do get engaged at the end, but it wasn't a satisfying end considering the journey the characters take.