PITTMAN

Jared R. Teer

Book Cover

GENRE

CRIME HORROR FANTASY ACTION

    Core Theme

    REVENGE

    TIME PERIOD

    Contemporary

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    LOVE AND MONSTERS, TEEN WOLF

    CHARACTER LIST

    REMY PITTMAN (20S) LEAD, STRONG AND LOYAL

    CELESTE JAQUET (40S) DETECTIVE

    COACH (65) MENTOR & WISE

    ANTOINE (20S) ANTAGONIST - RIVAL & STRONG

    ADRIAN (30S) ANTAGONIST - CRIMINAL & POWERFUL

    VERONIQUE (30S) ANTAGONIST - VOODOO QUEEN

    Logline

    Remy Pittman was a young, undefeated, middleweight boxer who was one win away from a world-title shot. Local mobsters had other plans: Remy would lose the fight . . . or die. When confronted by such monsters, Remy discovers that to fight back, he must become a monster himself.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 13-17,18-34,35-54

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    New Orleans

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Strategic Book Publishing

    Year Published: 2021

    Starting Description

    Remy Pittman was a young, black, undefeated middleweight boxer, who was murdered along with his blue pit bull and buried in a shallow grave by local mobsters after refusing to throw a fight for them. Remy crawls from the grave and transforms into a werepitbull and seeks revenge.

    Ending Description

    The mob boss learns that Remy has become a supernatural beast, and evokes voodoo to create a werealligator to fight the Pit. After many mobsters are dispatched violently, the Pit and the Gator have a showdown and the Pit prevails.

    Group Specific

    Pittman is black superhero related to the voodoo subculture of New Orleans.

    Hard Copy Available

    Yes

    ISBN

    978-1-68235-329-5

    Mature Audience Themes

    Extreme Violence

    Plot - Other Elements

    Meaningful Message

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain

    Main Character Details

    Name: Remy Pittman

    Age: 21

    Gender: Male

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Gracious,Heroic,Honorable,Masculine,Modest,Skillful,Selfless,Lone Wolf,Funny

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Coach

    Age: 65

    Gender: Male

    Role: Mentor

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Aggressive,Charming,Badass,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Modest,Patriotic,Religious,Blunt,Selfless,Outspoken,Skillful,Visionary,Sarcastic,Secretive

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Antoine “The Alligator” Armand

    Age: 21

    Gender: Male

    Role: antagonist

    Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Crazy,Honorable,Insecure,Masculine,Villainous,Power Hungry,Skillful,Unapologetic

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Celeste "CJ" Jacquet

    Age: 26

    Gender: Female

    Role: skeptic

    Key Traits: Badass,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Modest,Selfless,Skillful,Sarcastic,Blunt

    Development Pitch

    I’ve created the coolest black superhero since the Black Panther. I defer to the Black Panther because he was the first black superhero and has a pretty awesome storyline. That being said, the reinvigorated calls for racial equity and representation demand NEW black characters. As a black writer, I find it patronizing that established characters are being changed to black ones, a black Spiderman and a black Nick Fury. What’s next, a black Hulk with cornrows? Let us come up with new black characters. I’ve created a new black superhero that is truly unique and cool! My character is a young black man who transforms into a blue nose werepitbull, who uses his powers to fight against crime and supernatural villains such as werewolves, vampires, etc. The story takes place in New Orleans, with the character’s origin story steeped in the voodoo lore of the region. The Pittman short story establishes the character, and I will continue to write and publish more stories, but I know the character is better suited for visual mediums. The character is a freaking WEREPITBULL! That hasn’t been done. Picture a tall, muscular, bluish gray, humanoid pit bull on two legs! Not only does the werepitbull character play as the traditional crime fighting superhero, but it also lends itself to more horror themed stories, with the werepitbull hunting down bad guys akin to a werewolf story. I’m hoping to partner with someone who sees the potential in this truly unique character.

    Genre

    ACTION, FANTASY, SUSPENSE

    Brief

    Remy Pittman is a boxer with great potential until he is killed by Adrian Armand, a powerful criminal and older brother to Remy's biggest rival. But when Remy wakes up from the dead as a shapeshifter, he goes after the Armands for revenge.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: GOOD

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    The only thing I'd change is the development pitch. Although the author's enthusiasm with his book is a good selling strategy, it sounds a bit exaggerated, which gives the impression of an oversell.

    Draw of Story

    The mystery of what happened at Armand's plantation.

    Possible Drawbacks

    The lack of character and scene description. The author left too many blanks for the reader to fill out, which pulls the reader out of the story. This is too short even for a short story and could benefit from further development so plot points can happen more organically.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The theme of revenge.

    Fanbase Potential

    If it's better developed, it can become a story that appeals to a specific audience, one who likes superheroes and fantastic beasts.

    Awards Potential

    Not this type of story.

    Envisioned Budget

    LARGE BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    LOVE AND MONSTERS (2020)

    What’s New About the Story

    A boxer who becomes a werepitbull. It doesn't need to be more unique, it's already very specific.

    Lead Characters

    His loyalty towards his deceased parents.

    Uniqueness of Story

    No, because it's underdeveloped. If the backstories were lived, instead of briefly mentioned by the characters, the reader could create a stronger bond with the piece, and more elements could turn the characters and the story more universal.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Indie, Film - Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    It needs to be further developed.

    Tips for Improvement

    The addition of more character and scene descriptions, more plot points, more conflict, higher stakes, more mystery.

    Brief

    When Remy Pittman, a promising boxer, is shot by his biggest rival's mobster family, he is transformed into a werepitbull. Now, this powerful creature with boxing skills is out for revenge.

    What We Liked

    "Pittman" is an original story of resilience, mentorship, and revenge featuring a strong black protagonist in a location where we don't see this type of story. It's a great origin story for a to-be superhero, dark and heavy enough to create a flawed and interesting lead character.

    Film: "Pittman" would be the first movie of a new superhero franchise. It tells the origin story of Remy, the werepitbull, and it sets the tone for the dark history behind the good-hearted strong creature that protects New Orleans from crime and supernatural threats. This movie is a cherry for the audience looking for action, fantasy, gore, and suspense with heavy special effects.

    TV: "Pittman" is the dark and heavy origin story of a potential superhero that can fight crime in New Orleans. Mixing crime, boxing, and dark magic, it's the perfect setup for new characters and endless plots involving Remy and his mentor, Coach. Each episode could have a new antagonist for Remy to fight, but the overall season arc could revolve around Detective Jaquet's investigations of the case and a more serious threat against Remy or New Orleans.

    Key points: Mentorship relationship between Remy and Coach; Special effects; Black protagonist; Location: New Orleans; Graphic battle scenes.

    Synopsis

    Detective Celeste Jaquet goes back to her hometown of New Orleans to talk to her former boxing coach, Coach. The reason is a strange death spree that took place at the Armand plantation, the headquarters of the Armand family. Although the men were heavily armed, they were all executed and mutilated by an unknown creature. The weirdest part is the fact that they were the suspects in the disappearance and presumed murder of boxing sensation, Remy Pittman, Coach’s adopted son. Remy had beat Antoine Armand in the ring, which couldn’t be allowed to happen again, giving the family a motive to kill Remy. Although no body was retrieved, Remy was believed to be dead. But Coach tells Celeste that he was shot by the Armand family, but instead of dying, he was turned into a creature, half-man, half-pitbull.

    At Armand’s plantation, Antoine trains watched by the boss, his big brother Adrian, and his wife, Veronique, known as the voodoo queen for her talents practicing the black arts. Antoine complains about Adrian killing Remy, but Adrian states it’s for the family’s own good, as they can never lose. Adrian gets a call from an informant at the NOPD that tells him Remy’s body was never found. Pissed, he orders his brother to kill the men who killed Remy for failing at their mission. Remy wakes up back in his old form but is super strong. Coach offers to help him train, and they can’t figure out what causes the transformation. Remy is too strong to train in Coach’s gym, so they cease activities for the day. At night, professional killers sent by Adrian attempt to hurt Coach, but Remy – again transformed into a werepitbull - kills them all but one. Coach tells Remy the reason he came back from the dead as this creature was to punish bad people for doing bad things. Remy realizes his mission is to kill the Armands. The killer who escaped tells Adrian about Remy, and Veronique realizes he has become a “rougarou”, a shapeshifter. It happened because he was killed at the holy soil where his parents were buried, and he would only cease to exist once he fulfilled his vengeance against Adrian. Or, if another rougarou killed it. Antoine offers to become a rougarou to kill Remy and protect his older brother.

    Remy and Coach train endlessly; Coach reinforces the importance of keeping control of his strength and power. At the Armand plantation, Adrian and Veronique perform the ritual to turn Antoine into a rougarou; it works and he becomes a weregator. Transformed into a creature, Antoine goes crazy and kills Veronique, all the men, and Adrian. Remy says his goodbye to Coach and heads to the plantation; but when he gets there, he smells blood and knows something is wrong.

    Remy is confronted by Antoine and the two rougarous box and fight for their lives. The Gator fights dirtier and gets the upper hand, but Remy remembers Coach’s lessons and is able to win in the end, eliminating Antoine. Coach finishes his story and Celeste doesn’t believe it. She informs him that the Feds have taken over the case, and leaves. Remy, who has hiding, says he could have shown himself to Celeste, now that he has full control over his transformation, but Coach thinks it’s best to keep himself hidden. Now, the Feds are involved and it might be dangerous.

    At the plantation, the Feds talk to their superiors. They know something supernatural took place.

    About The Author

    Jared R. Teer grew up in Texas and was stationed in Washington State after joining the Army in 2001. He served one tour in Iraq and then decided to stay in Olympia, Washington, after leaving the Army in 2006. He is a substitute teacher and a professional kickboxer. He says, “Professional kickboxing is safer than substitute teaching by far!” In his debut novel, "Pittman," Jared put together his passion for boxing and superheroes to create a new powerful black superhero.