The Two Faces of Dre'
DRAMA EROTICA FANTASY MYSTERY LGBT ROMANCE
K. J. Knightly
My story is about three characters Danielle/Dre’, Janea/Angela and Jennifer. Janea and Jennifer were best friends. Danielle is the girl that no one liked or talked too because she was different. Janea decided to befriend Danielle she knowing how the other kids were mistreating her.
The story is set in California where Janea, Jennifer and Danielle all went to middle school. This all began when Danielle was getting bullied by other girls and treated badly because she was different form the other kids in school Her parents had money so she always dressed finer than the others.
The story ends with Angela being lured to a hotel thinking that Dre' wants to make things right with her so they can mend their relationship and start over. All the while Angela has a secret of her own, She is about to expose Dre' for the sneaky, conniving, arrogant, person that he really is.
San Diego, Maine
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Rebellion Against 'The One',Tragedy,Other
Plot - Other Elements
Mature Audience Themes
Main Character Details
Name: Danielle/Dre', Janea/Angela, Jennifer
Key Traits: Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Confident,Crazy,Decisive,Desperate,Naive,Villainous,Sexy,Power Hungry,Romantic,Sarcastic,Secretive,Seductive,Manipulative,Unapologetic
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Confident,Crazy,Empathetic,Masculine,Sexy,Visionary,Romantic,Secretive,Sophisticated
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Confident,Crazy,Heroic,Educated,Funny,Visionary,Outspoken,Sexy
Additional Character Details
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I love this book and I loved writing this book. It can be used as a learning tool on how not to treat people and play with their emotions. It teaches you that no matter how long it takes whatever you do to someone can and will come back unto you. There is love, lies, betrayal and romance. Dre' is that man that people will love to hate as well as a dream man to many. He can be sweet and romantic treat you like a king or a queen. He holds a mystery within himself as he is filled with emotional hurt, anger, and rage. Angela is sweet a hard working woman with a secret of her own. When the two find each other no one would ever imagine how things would end. I know everyone that reads this book or watch it on their screens would love it just as much if not more than I do and have.
THRILLER, ROMANCE, DRAMA
Angela is a successful real estate agent that is trying to find a little romance. She meets Andre, a guy she is instantly attracted to. Angela also starts having liaisons with Shay, a women. Angela and Andre try to make it work but too many secrets explode and turn dangerous for all involved.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
No, the book profile does not reflect the book. This is a romantic drama. It is full of lies, sex and deceit. Angela is looking for love but gets entangled in multiple relationships. Andre is possessive with devious motives.
Draw of Story
The story is hard to read but the characters are African American in a modern setting. They are young professionals which is always refreshing to see.
The dialogue, writing style and format are not professional. There are few punctuation marks and no parentheses to mark that a character is speaking. It is written as a run on sentence with no formatting to speak of. The dialogue sounds like an internal rant and rambles on through the entire story. The dialogue is very basic and the author uses expletive language to portray all emotions.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that Angela is looking for love but lots of drama finds her instead. This story shows African Americans as normal people without adding racism as a conflict. They are business people in a sophisticated setting which would translate well on screen.
This would not have a large fanbase. It is targeted toward a very specific genre of people who like the level of drama that this story reflects.
This does not have award potential because the story line is barely developed. There is no depth or character development. This is about drama and sensationalism, not about developing a well rounded story.
Similar Films/TV Series
THINK LIKE A MAN, THE HAVE AND THE HAVE NOTS
What’s New About the Story
There is nothing unique about this story. The stories purpose is to be sensational. There would need to be more development of the characters. The characters could be the same person because there is little distinctions in there speech and thoughts. This story would need a complete overhaul.
The lead character does not stand out. Angela is a normal woman dating and trying to make her relationships work. The plot twists and revelations that she is not actually Angela but Janae is the only thing that would make her stand out. It seems more of a interesting story element then a reflection of the character.
Uniqueness of Story
This is not a rare gem. It could be improved by an overhaul of the dialogue. There is a lot of profanity which does not enhance the understanding of the characters. The grammar is incorrect and takes away for the story.
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Streaming
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
For this to become a recommend the story needs structure. There are interesting elements; single life of a young woman, her dating experiences, experimenting, putting herself first. It has all of the right elements but them but then it seeks to shock you at the end with rape, bullying, hidden identities, murder and kidnapping. It does not need to take that type of turn. If it could choose one or the other.