For Sale - A human trafficking novel
Submision Type
book
Logline
Children are going missing at an alarming rate. As the investigation pursues, the detectives are shocked to see who is behind the kidnappings.
Genre
Suspense/Thriller
Short Summary
Another child goes missing and the detective assigned the case realizes he is about to unravel a quagmire of clues as to who is involved.
Setting
Nebraska
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain
Plot - Other Elements
Meaningful Message,Twist
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Chad Camdale
Age: 42
Gender: Male
Role: Antagonist
Key Traits: Empathetic,Engaging,Leader,Honorable,Educated,Strong Moral Code
Additional Character Details
Name: Adam Mosely
Age: 55
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Narcisstic,Badass,Aggressive,Criminal,Greedy,Secretive,Power Hungry
Additional Character Details
Name: Tom Middleton
Age: 36
Gender: Male
Role: sidekick
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Confident,Leader,Honorable,Heroic,Strong Moral Code
Additional Character Details
The author has not yet written this
Genre
SUSPENSE, DRAMA
Brief
A chief detective and his team uncover a child-trafficking net deeply rooted in public administration at a small town in Nebraska.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: GOOD
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, it is accurate, but there is a lack of information and some mistakes. For instance, Chad is described as the antagonist, while he is actually the story's protagonist. Adam, on the other hand, is listed as the protagonist, and he is in fact an antagonistic figure.
Draw of Story
The timely and relevant main theme.
Possible Drawbacks
The writing is too simplistic and some of the occurrences and dialogues don't sound believable.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
A child-trafficking organization dominating a small town public administration, something that sounds very frightening to think of.
Fanbase Potential
That's not the case, but it could attract people interested in police stories and social drama.
Awards Potential
Not really, the story would have to be much better developed for that to happen.
Envisioned Budget
MEDIUM BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
TAKEN - A FORMER FBI AGENT DISMANTLES A WOMAN-TRAFFICKING ORGANIZATION IN ORDER TO FREE HIS ABDUCTED DAUGHTER. VERY YOUNG GIRLS - A DOCUMENTARY THAT FOLLOWS AFRICAN-AMERICAN TEENAGERS AS THEY ARE LURED AND TRAFFICKED BY PIMPS ON NEW YORK STREETS.
What’s New About the Story
The idea of a whole town administration involved in such a horrendous crime. However, the story could better developed and freed from clichés to become really unique.
Lead Characters
Chad is a strong-willed policeman with an unshakable sense of justice and honesty.
Uniqueness of Story
Not really. Storytelling must be strongly worked upon, characterization still lacks depth and the whole narrative needs more thrills and suspense.
Possible Formats
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
To be adapted into a film or a TV series, the book requires extensive changes and rewrites. First of all, many dialogues are not believable and sometimes feel even inappropriate for the specific moment in which they take place. A lot of the characters' actions are also questionable, especially considering some of them are experienced police agents. For example, the protagonist, who leads the main investigation, immediately allows his daughter to go out unprotected right after realizing there is a sexual predator at loose in town. Furthermore, he places a former victim of abduction in an unprotected house, which leads her to become an easy prey for the criminal organization. Other than that, the whole plot could be better structured, and the people in it would need more impactful characterization to actually be remarkable, which they are not as of now. So, even though the intentions and the main idea for the story are great, it still needs a lot of work in order to become ready to be a successful audiovisual adaptation and attract large audiences.