For Sale - A human trafficking novel

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SUSPENSE/THRILLER

2000s

J.H. Morris

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Logline

Children are going missing at an alarming rate. As the investigation pursues, the detectives are shocked to see who is behind the kidnappings.

Genre

Suspense/Thriller

Short Summary

Another child goes missing and the detective assigned the case realizes he is about to unravel a quagmire of clues as to who is involved.


The detective, with the help of the FBI, shut down the small operation of child trafficking in their state. Two survivors tell their stories and advocate for justice.

Setting

Nebraska

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain

Plot - Other Elements

Meaningful Message,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Chad Camdale

Age: 42

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Empathetic,Engaging,Leader,Honorable,Educated,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

Name: Adam Mosely

Age: 55

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Narcisstic,Badass,Aggressive,Criminal,Greedy,Secretive,Power Hungry

Additional Character Details

Name: Tom Middleton

Age: 36

Gender: Male

Role: sidekick

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Confident,Leader,Honorable,Heroic,Strong Moral Code

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

When children go missing, we may be blind to where, or what happens to them. This is a story of corruption and how the predators that are out there can actually be the people we are looking at to trust. In the end, the cooperation of multiple departments and the trust you have in others helps solve a small piece of a huge crime. Two girls that survived the ordeal end up advocating for justice and education.

About The Author

J.H. Morris grew up in California and received a degree in accounting and computer programming in 1986. After decades of sitting behind a desk doing IT roles, he is now semi-retired and pursuing his love of writing. He enjoys writing thrillers and suspense novels but does not limit himself to just those.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: IngramSpark

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

9781087934990

Genre

SUSPENSE, DRAMA

Brief

A chief detective and his team uncover a child-trafficking net deeply rooted in public administration at a small town in Nebraska.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, it is accurate, but there is a lack of information and some mistakes. For instance, Chad is described as the antagonist, while he is actually the story's protagonist. Adam, on the other hand, is listed as the protagonist, and he is in fact an antagonistic figure.

Draw of Story

The timely and relevant main theme.

Possible Drawbacks

The writing is too simplistic and some of the occurrences and dialogues don't sound believable.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

A child-trafficking organization dominating a small town public administration, something that sounds very frightening to think of.

Fanbase Potential

That's not the case, but it could attract people interested in police stories and social drama.

Awards Potential

Not really, the story would have to be much better developed for that to happen.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

TAKEN - A FORMER FBI AGENT DISMANTLES A WOMAN-TRAFFICKING ORGANIZATION IN ORDER TO FREE HIS ABDUCTED DAUGHTER. VERY YOUNG GIRLS - A DOCUMENTARY THAT FOLLOWS AFRICAN-AMERICAN TEENAGERS AS THEY ARE LURED AND TRAFFICKED BY PIMPS ON NEW YORK STREETS.

What’s New About the Story

The idea of a whole town administration involved in such a horrendous crime. However, the story could better developed and freed from clichés to become really unique.

Lead Characters

Chad is a strong-willed policeman with an unshakable sense of justice and honesty.

Uniqueness of Story

Not really. Storytelling must be strongly worked upon, characterization still lacks depth and the whole narrative needs more thrills and suspense.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

To be adapted into a film or a TV series, the book requires extensive changes and rewrites. First of all, many dialogues are not believable and sometimes feel even inappropriate for the specific moment in which they take place. A lot of the characters' actions are also questionable, especially considering some of them are experienced police agents. For example, the protagonist, who leads the main investigation, immediately allows his daughter to go out unprotected right after realizing there is a sexual predator at loose in town. Furthermore, he places a former victim of abduction in an unprotected house, which leads her to become an easy prey for the criminal organization. Other than that, the whole plot could be better structured, and the people in it would need more impactful characterization to actually be remarkable, which they are not as of now. So, even though the intentions and the main idea for the story are great, it still needs a lot of work in order to become ready to be a successful audiovisual adaptation and attract large audiences.