Christmas Carroll
Submision Type
book
Logline
Christmas Carroll is a fractured memoir about three young teens composing a yuletide carol for Miss December 1965 and inviting her to the parish CYO Christmas fundraiser to play the song live for her.
Genre
Comedy,Memoir,Funny
Short Summary
The author is lamenting the reality that his band is broken up as he and his older brother are indefinitely grounded in their bedroom for causing a scandal at their parish churches CYO Christmas fundraiser Battle of the Bands.
Setting
December 1965 in Salt Lake City, Utah
Based on a True Story
Yes
Plot - Premise
Quest
Plot - Other Elements
Coming of Age,Twist
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Don "Codge" Potter, Nic "Stump" Baker, and Jim "Chick" Potter
Age: 14 & 16
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Clumsy,Crazy,Desperate,Faithful,Insecure,Naive,Blunt,Funny,Sarcastic,Unapologetic
Additional Character Details
Name: Bob Baker
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Role: Logical
Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Confident,Engaging,Educated,Leader,Patriotic,Blunt
Additional Character Details
Name: Rolph Stonehocker aka "Schnitzel Von Strudel"
Age: 40
Gender: Male
Role: antagonist
Key Traits: Charming,Clumsy,Empathetic,Honorable,Modest
Additional Character Details
Name: Mr. & Mrs. Potter (Don and Jim's parents)
Age: 50
Gender: Other
Role: antagonist
Key Traits: Decisive,Faithful,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Modest,Religious,Blunt
Genre
COMEDY, ACTION
Brief
Codge, Nic and Jim have formed a band after The Beatles debut. They decide to enroll their band in a contest to create a song for Miss December 1965. They get tangled up in some local drama involving some criminal activity.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: GOOD
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: GOOD
Premise: GOOD
Structure: FAIR
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes the book profile accurately reflects the book.
Draw of Story
The story begins with The Beatles premiering and starting a cultural phenomenon. The young boys in this story were swept up in the Beatles mania and wanted to form a band. The youthful energy and desire to emulate the band is fun.
Possible Drawbacks
The book is a raunchy ride surrounding silly young boys. There are many movies like this that can be entertaining but have no substance. This can be avoided by more focus on them creating a song and having a rewarding prize at the end. It is a holiday romp that becomes more about the antics than the song.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that a group of young boys forms a band and tries to impress Miss December with a song. I would not watch this movie because it is a young boy fantasy film. They are adolescents running around, getting into trouble and looking at breast.
Fanbase Potential
This could have a large fanbase as many films like it have. This raunchy sort of comedy has cult followings. The story needs to be developed better, keeping to the plot and accenting it with the various shenanigans.
Awards Potential
This has no awards potential. This story's goal is pure entertainment and laughs. The plot is a vehicle for that purpose and nothing more.
Envisioned Budget
LOW BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
SUPERBAD, GOOD BOYS, THE NIGHT BEFORE
What’s New About the Story
This raunchy comedy is original because it is set in the 60's. Outside of that, it is very much like a adolescent, racy comedy.
Lead Characters
The lead characters do not stand out. They are young teenage boys who started a band. There are only think about there music and girls. There are few distinctions between the three main characters.
Uniqueness of Story
This is a very average film. It would have wide appeal as many films like it do. The story is unapologetic in what it is and can not be improved without completely changing its' purpose.
Possible Formats
Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The story would need to be more well rounded. The story begins with the Beatles and the band and moves into murder and shooting. Then it ends with a cameo from Hugh Hefner handing over a Playboy magazine. There needs to be a common plot to tie everything together.