THE MYRIAD: Onto Old Earth

J. A. McFarland

Book Cover

GENRE

FANTASY/ACTION

    Core Theme

    IT IS A STORY ABOUT THE FUNDAMENTAL BATTLE BETWEEN GOOD AND EVIL, TWO FORCES THAT COME INTO CONFLICT EVEN WITHIN THE SAME PERSON.

    TIME PERIOD

    Other

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    THE LORD OF THE RINGS, GAME OF THRONES.

    CHARACTER LIST

    KING ETHWIN: 40+. LEAD. COURAGEOUS, FAIR, AND HONORABLE.

    QUEEN PERLAIN: 40-45. QUEEN OF PALAGON & ETHWIN’S LOVE INTEREST.

    KING DALRED: 30-35. KING OF HAVEN-NETH & ETHWIN’S FELLOW ON THE JOURNEY.

    HATH: 18-20. PRINCE OF THARDEN & ETHWIN’S SON.

    Logline

    Trespass into Old Earth delivers demons, evil entities, an unchained sorcerer, a necromancer rising from comatose. An ominous odyssey is doomed from the start. An epic quest to save Man, Artificer and Fair Folk teeters on the brink of disaster.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 13-17,18-34,35-54,55+

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    The Homeland. Old Earth.

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: James Anthony McFarland - Myriad Unlimited

    Year Published: 2011

    Starting Description

    The removal of sacred stones unleashes a deadly curse. Four dynasty kingdoms must bury the hatchet, join forces to confront an invisible enemy, a dark force rising in a world outside their own.

    Ending Description

    A breathless battle leaves four armies on the run, past the point of no return, through the gateway of Old Earth. A motley alliance is forced to separate, hopelessly outnumbered by enormous evil, unaware of the enemy within!

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    No

    ISBN

    978-0-692-00756-3

    Mature Audience Themes

    Extreme Violence

    Plot - Other Elements

    Twist,Meaningful Message,Happy Ending,Other

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain,Quest,Voyage and Return,Other

    Main Character Details

    Name: King Ethwin, Lord of Femur Forest, exudes honor, dignity, unswerving chivalry. A hero to the Homeland, a dragon slayer who harbors a deep, dark inner secret. The king is a widower, a father of three sons who wields the battle-axe GLEANFIRE, an ordinary weapon yet a blade containing hidden power, unknown, untapped by the user himself. The King of Tharden is kind, caring, brave and bold, desperate and engaging, confident and compassionate, heroic, selfless, a romanticist who falls in love with Queen Perlain of Palagon. Ethwin is a diplomat, a peacemaker in the midst of rival kings, political intrigue, untrusting allies. He is wise and witty, a respected authority amongst his peers, spearheading Homeland armies into the unexplored regions of Old Earth.

    Age: 44

    Gender: Male

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Confident,Decisive,Engaging,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Selfless,Skillful,Romantic,Secretive,Aspiring,Desperate,Modest

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Queen Perlain of Palagon, valiant leader of the GLAUDION army, regal and refined, charming, confident, poised and prominent, decisive, gifted with intuition, palmistry, use of knives, bears an omnipotent crystal, a mysterious scepter forenamed TRAILBREAKER

    Age: 40

    Gender: Female

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Badass,Charming,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Heroic,Honorable,Leader,Selfless,Skillful,Romantic,Adventurous,Aspiring,Gracious,Underdog,Strong Moral Code

    Additional Character Details

    Name: King Dalred, Iron King of Haven-neth, brash, arrogant, manipulative, greedy, lusts for power, allegedly succeeded to the throne via assassination, mysteriously unaged, wields a fiery sword: RAZIER-the RIVAL SLASHER, a lightning rod evoked by emotion, specifically Dalred's rage,

    Age: unknown, approximate by appearance: 28 to 32

    Gender: Male

    Role: protagonist

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Aggressive,Complex,Greedy,Leader,Badass,Criminal,Heroic,Manipulative,Secretive,Sarcastic,Outspoken,Power Hungry

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Jotam, undead alchemist, also named Calob the Conjurer, usurper, murderer, antihero, philosopher, survivalist, High General of the Iron Mark army,

    Age: 120, approximate

    Gender: Male

    Role: protagonist

    Key Traits: Lone Wolf,Adventurous,Badass,Complex,Crazy,Criminal,Greedy,Heroic,Leader,Villainous,Narcisstic,Power Hungry,Outspoken,Skillful,Secretive,Sophisticated,Manipulative,Sarcastic

    Development Pitch

    Three kings, a queen, a reckless alchemist reluctantly join forces with an outlander, a wily wizard seeking to overthrow a devious necromancer, a host of evil, intent on delivering a Dark Age to the free world.

    Genre

    ACTION, ROMANCE, WAR, FANTASY

    Brief

    After an evil spirit invades his kingdom, a king gathers an entourage to collect mysterious crystals, which have unleashed forces of evil across the land. In the end, they separate to try to fulfill their final objective.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: GOOD

    Franchise Potential: GOOD

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: GOOD

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    It is accurate.

    Draw of Story

    The fact that it’s a story that takes place in a fantasy land, with echoes of classics like The Lord of the Rings.

    Possible Drawbacks

    Amid so many characters, names of things, and places, there is a lack of a more objective thread that guides us in this new world of adventures and maintains interest throughout such an extensive narrative.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The leading hook is an epic adventure in a classic style of good versus evil, with narratives full of battles, adventures, great dangers, and romances.

    Fanbase Potential

    There is great potential for building a large and loyal fanbase, especially among fantasy fans. However, for an adaptation to be successful, the story needs to be more focused and centered on a great threat, maybe even with fewer characters, but that are more and better developed to the point of identifying the characteristics of each one well.

    Awards Potential

    There is excellent potential for building a large and loyal fanbase, especially among fantasy fans. However, for an adaptation to be successful, the story needs to be more focused and centered on a significant threat, maybe even with fewer characters, but more and better developed so the public can identify the characteristics of each one.

    Envisioned Budget

    LARGE BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    THE LORD OF THE RINGS - JUST LIKE THE FIRST PART OF TOLKIEN’S STORY, THE HEROES SET OUT IN AN ENTOURAGE OF REMARKABLE PEOPLE TO SAVE THE WORLD FROM A GREAT EVIL. GAME OF THRONES - ALSO A FANTASY AND COMPLEX BATTLE BETWEEN KINGDOMS, FULL OF BETRAYALS AND DUBIOUS CHARACTERS.

    What’s New About the Story

    The creation of legends such as the crystals that guard evil spirits is original to a certain extent. However, the characters and the plot are too similar to other narratives about fantasy journeys. It would be essential to bring more unique aspects that differentiate the book from thousands of others in the same genre.

    Lead Characters

    The lead character is an honorable, courageous, and justice-loving monarch who, while keeping a great secret, always tries to do the best he can to help others.

    Uniqueness of Story

    It’s not a rare gem. As a rather extensive book, there is a lack of further explanation on various aspects of the plot. In addition, the narrative ends up being exaggeratedly confusing due to an infinity of names and expressions that the public is not used to and that do not receive the proper attention from the author.

    Possible Formats

    Film: Studio TV Series: Cable, Limited Run / Mini-Series, Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    The book is a work in progress because, perhaps due to its enormous size and the excess of plots that the author had to deal with, the narrative becomes excessively confusing. Although the universe created here is very developed, with its own rules and characteristics, much remains to be explained for us to understand the whole. Villains, for example, are a problem. There are an awful lot of them, but we don’t really know what differentiates one from the other, which one is more threatening or how they work together. This undermines the strength of this dark threat and makes the clashes between good and evil less compelling than they could be. Despite being a story with a lot of content, it lacks special attention to details that could make people fall in love with this fantasy universe.

    Tips for Improvement

    Perhaps one of the best things to do is apply the concept of less is more, which doesn’t necessarily mean reducing the size or scope of this epic narrative. On the contrary, fans of the genre often like it. One can reduce the number of characters, make references to fewer entities and events from the past, and, instead, occupy the space that remains by delving into their personalities and histories. This is a crucial part of getting the audience involved with the plot. The dialogues are another aspect that could be worked on better. The problem is that it takes up a lot of space with unnecessary conversations and lines precisely when the plot should be moving forward at full speed. The very positive point is that most of the lines are written in an archaic way, which is adequate but also not impossible to understand. The story works as a fantastic tale about good versus evil, but in the middle of the way, it is necessary to base it all on a cohesive universe, in which we want to root for these heroes and hate the villains. It would be best if you felt better about how this world is built, what are the aspirations and thoughts of the main characters and the relationship between them. For this, the book must undergo extensive revisions and rewritings to be ready for the challenge of an audiovisual adaptation, whether for TV or cinema.

    Brief

    Evil spirits begin to dominate a previously peaceful world. What could the discovery of six enchanted crystals have to do with it? An entourage made up of kings and heroes sets out on a journey full of dangers and adventures to discover the truth behind these mysterious events. But will they have the courage and strength to save the world from the dark future that is coming?

    What We Liked

    Full of twists, dubious characters, and fantastic battles, The Myriad brings the audience an adventure in the mold of great epics like The Lord of the Rings. With charismatic heroes, terrifying villains, and a plot that leaves the audience always waiting for more, the book holds excellent promises for a narrative of significant proportions, with dialogues that accentuate the depth and complexity of this vast range of characters.

    Film: On the big screen, the special effects and the sheer scale of the sets, the scenes, and this fantastic world as a whole will be presented in all the necessary scale. Although cinema has a more restricted duration, requiring more extensive adaptations to the narrative, the silver screen can give the viewer the feeling of living an epic narrative like this in the form and size he should.

    TV: Due to its epic nature and the sheer size and scale of the story, this would make an excellent addition to the fantasy series canon. Just as plots from the Lord of the Rings universe have been adapted for the small screen, the TV format is excellent for ensuring that a narrative like this is presented as it should, without leaving out essential details of the story.

    Key points:
    - Epic scale
    - Dubious and complex characters
    - Elaborate action scenes and battles
    - A compelling plot filled with twists
    - Creation of a whole new fantastic world

    Synopsis

    An evil spirit attacks Tharden, the realm of king Ethwin. King Dalred, of Haven-neth, Queen Perlain, and her daughter, Princess Ryrena, arrive for a council to discuss the issue. Kydon, the River King, tells everyone how he got five precious power crystals in the tower of Mono Goth, releasing evil spirits in the world.

    The entourage leaves on a journey, and prince Hath stays in command of Tharden. The group meets wizard Bantebal, who joins their journey. After that, they find all the inhabitants of Athfar dead. A man called Wistker appears guarding the missing sixth crystal. To the entourage, Wistker tells about the origin of the world, the creation of good and evil gods, and the six evil entities trapped in the tower of Mono Goth, to which the six crystals correspond.

    Wistker talks about the Myriad prophecy, a journey to save all men from Third Earth, which they are fulfilling. They must defeat Scarmur the Necromancer and reassemble the crystals to do so.
    Finally, the entourage leaves with Wistkel. After casting a series of illusions, the Night Draul spirit attacks them, generating deaths and injuries. King Kydon, his son Kyran and their captain Torcus are lost in the river, as the evil entity is also mortally wounded. Meanwhile, in Tharden, Hath is captured by the usurper Skerl Hemlock.

    The entourage arrives at the Mono Goth tower. Later, during Wistkel’s farewells, the group is attacked by evil forces and Wistkel manages to capture the Father of Shadows. The captive’s prophecy shows that Torcus and Kyran are still alive and that there is a dark future ahead for all of them. They free the shadowy prisoner, flee and their journeys finally separate.

    About The Author

    As well as a writer of vivid imagination, James Anthony McFarland is a man of many professions. A property manager, a lawyer, an engineer, a facilitator, an actor, a singer, a lyricist, a filmmaker, a voiceover artist, a storyteller. With so many talents, it is hard to know what he will do next.