The Last Savior book 1

Jalleh Doty/ Pari Adli

Book Cover

GENRE

ACTION APOCALYPTIC EPIC SCI-FI RELIGIOUS FANTASY

    Core Theme

    FAITH IN GOD

    TIME PERIOD

    Future,Contemporary

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    THE SAVIOR (2014), MESSIAH (NETFLIX)

    CHARACTER LIST

    • ILHAM: LEAD, NAÏVE, TALENTED, STRONG, RESILIENT

    • YAZDON: STRONG, IMPULSIVE, DEVOTED, SAVIOR AND ONE OF ILHAM’S TWIN SONS

    • THERESE: INQUISITIVE, AMBITIOUS, MENTOR, FRIEND AND DOCUMENTARIAN OF ILHAM AND HER SONS’ LIVES

    • CELINE: CARING, PHILANTHROPIC, MENTOR, FRIEND OF ILHAM AND EDUCATOR OF HER SONS

    • ARMON: SUCCESSFUL, WEALTHY, ADAPTABLE, ILHAM’S HUSBAND BLESSED

    • PEACEMAKER: PIOUS, INSIGHTFUL, MENTOR TO YAZDON

    • JAMON: TALENTED, SWEET, DEVOTED, TWIN BROTHER OF YAZDON AND ILHAM’S SON

    Logline

    What would happen if Jesus Christ came back to the modern world? Would he save us from out sins again? Forget the Jesus of the bible and follow the modern Jesus who was a humanitarian, activist and philanthropist who will start a journey to change humanity in the modern age

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34,35-54

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    Story takes place worldwide in a dystopian world where world events have caused people to be ever more dependent on technology

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: with a Publisher

    Publisher: Britains next bestseller

    Year Published: 2018

    Starting Description

    In an occupied middle eastern country a young girl finds out that she is destined to be give birth to the savior of humanity before society truly decays. We come to a world where the environment is gone, WW 3 is in full swing and players come to the stage to help save humanity from itself

    Ending Description

    An unexpected plot twist occurs where the hero of out story is forced to fake his death and from that, humanity gets the power to change and 'finally' live in peace

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    Yes

    ISBN

    Information not completed

    Mature Audience Themes

    Language/Profanity,Substance Abuse,Sexual Abuse

    Plot - Other Elements

    Philosophical Questions,Twist,Meaningful Message

    Plot - Premise

    Overcoming Monster/Villain,Rags to Riches,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest,Tragedy,Voyage and Return

    Main Character Details

    Name: Ilham

    Age: 17

    Gender: Female

    Role: Mentor

    Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Crazy,Decisive,Desperate,Empathetic,Heroic,Naive,Visionary,Modest

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Clemente

    Age: 42

    Gender: Male

    Role: Sidekick

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Underdog,Masculine,Narcisstic,Complex,Confident,Crazy,Blunt,Desperate,Selfless,Heroic,Educated,Unapologetic,Lone Wolf

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Yazdon

    Age: 38

    Gender: Male

    Role: mentor

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Charming,Complex,Masculine,Underdog,Obedient,Sexy,Blunt,Decisive,Skillful,Funny,Flexible,Gracious,Visionary,Leader

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Therese

    Age: 35

    Gender: Female

    Role: logical

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Complex,Clumsy,Crazy,Blunt,Faithful,Outspoken,Skillful,Flexible,Gracious

    Development Pitch

    Do you desire a new and unique idea that has 'never' been thought of, In a world where the same old, gets rehashed over and over again? Check out new idea/concept that redefines who Jesus Christ was outside of a religious context. Read a story that starts the journey of a real life hero of the people, who was just not a figure of the bible, but a human being who was an activist, humanitarian and philanthropist who redefined the concepts of the mind as he does his miracles. We come to the future dear reader, the world has gone to hell. Environmental disaster have occurred, food shortages are plenty, the governments of the world are as corrupt as ever all the while dealing with a third world war that devistated the earth. Fear is the main theme as we go to back drop of a war torn country where soldiers have free reign to do whatever they want and terrorize the local population. We meet a girl named Ilham, who from an unfortunate event learns that she will become the mother of The last Savior, a person destined to save all off humanity; even from itself. Unlikely heros will rise to help our main character grow up in a decayed world and foster his abilities of the mental and social. Villians will be threatened by him who feel that he is a threat to there tyrannical power. In the end, all the the hero wants is social change and become a legend not by off his own making as he single handedly redefines religion, science and the unlimited potential for humans to evolve

    Genre

    THRILLER, RELIGION, ACTION

    Brief

    Ilham is a teenage girl in a war torn Middle Eastern country. Her life is turned around when she gives birth to the second coming of Christ. Her son works to reverse WWIII by changing the hearts and minds of people rather than just using his powers by force.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: GOOD

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: GOOD

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    The book profile talks about how the story is separate from religion, but religious discussion is a substantial part of the book and tied to sources of conflict. There are multiple religions and their beliefs and issues are dissected throughout the story.

    Draw of Story

    Ilham's perspective as a teenage girl in a fanatical Islamic household who is raped is compelling. Her family situation and war torn backstory adds many layers to her attack and recovery.

    Possible Drawbacks

    The dialogue lacks subtext and nuance at times. It is very direct and can come off as unnatural with how upfront people speak to each other to accomplish their goal within a scene.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    The hook is that Jesus returns during WWIII, but uses activism to restore humanity rather than his powers on a large scale.

    Fanbase Potential

    This could have a smaller fanbase that is Christian, but those same individuals would have to be open to other religious beliefs. The depiction of the other religions is not sympathetic for the most part so may alienate some viewers holding those beliefs. There is also a large portion of people who are non-religious that may not mesh well with Christian overtones.

    Awards Potential

    This might have some awards potential in the Christian film industry. Secular award shows tend to shy away from religious films.

    Envisioned Budget

    LARGE BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    AJAMI, THE LEFT BEHIND SERIES, PERSEPOLIS, THE NATIVITY STORY, JAFFA

    What’s New About the Story

    The story involves a futuristic application of the Christian prophecy of Jesus' second coming that is grounded in the gritty realities of international and Middle Eastern politics. It had bursts of gritty realism, but mostly quieter moments of contemplation, by having less religious discussions and more activism, it will reflect its intention.

    Lead Characters

    The lead character of Ilham takes an unexpected path of being a teenage rape victim in a war torn community to making peace with her past, raising twins and having a successful singing career. She is a very strong and optimistic person. Yazdon has an interesting internal struggle of being too powerful, but trying to balance his anger for good.

    Uniqueness of Story

    This could have potential if there was focus on one main character as there are two separate stories of Ilham and Yazdon which delays the pacing of each other. The concept is solid, but the dialogue and dual character structure disrupts momentum towards a clear climax.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, Film - Studio

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

    Tips for Improvement

    Ilham and Yazdon are both compelling characters, but their stories are separate concepts. By either intertwining them more as Yazdon gets older, or separating the ideas into separate films, the theme of the story would be clearer. Adjusting this will even out the pacing. The dialogue often does not advance the plot and reducing the amount of quiet moments will give the ones that are included greater impact in their message.

    Brief

    As World War III rages on as a result human created crises, a baby boy is born to heal the world. His life is chronicled as he grows into the modern day savior he is destined to become.

    What We Liked

    - This is an interesting take on a modern day savior. The story addresses and brings awareness to religious differences, human rights issues, environmental activism, etc. It serves as a conversation starter if nothing else.
    - Film: A feature adaptation of the story would most likely require a franchise of films that could traverse time and place. The story in this first book is really more of a set up and the meat of the story will presumably come in future installments.
    - TV: Adapting the book into a television series would be an easy transition. The structure lends itself to the episodic format that chronicles the life of the savior as he grows up and makes his mark on humankind.
    - Key points: Franchise Potential; Relevant; Strong Characterization; Presumptive Inspirational Ending; Cinematic

    Synopsis

    Ilham, a young girl in a war torn middle eastern country, is savagely raped by allied soldiers. She becomes pregnant from the incident and is ostracized from the draconian society of which she is a part. French missionaries take pity on her and help smuggle her out of the country and set her up safely in a convent in France. She begins to telepathically communicate with the life inside of her and discovers that she will give birth to twin boys. As the time of her labor approaches, people from far and wide are inexplicably drawn to the convent to witness the birth. The birth is attended by a doctor called Celine, a journalist called Therese and a Buddhist monk called The Blessed Peacemaker. After the twins are born, an angel appears bringing the news that one of the boys will become a modern day savior. Ilham names the boys Jamon and Yazdon.

    Celine and Therese stay on to help Ilham raise the babies. Ilham becomes a local opera star and catches the eye of a wealthy international real estate developer called Armon. They fall in love, travel to America and get married. Soon after the wedding, Ilham discovers that she is pregnant with twin daughters. Things go well for the family after Eva and Emma are born, but when they around the age of five, Armon doesn’t feel that it is safe to remain in America and the entire family relocates to Sweden.

    As the boys mature it becomes apparent that Yazdon is the son destined to become the savior. As a young adult he travels the world to learn about other people and religions before he goes off to Asia to train with The Blessed Peacemaker and Clement, his martial arts instructor.

    Yazdon fits well into his role and begins traversing the world on his quest. As he preaches to his followers, he learns of a rouge Catholic called The Wandering Saint who is spreading his own teachings. Serendipitously, his given name is Edward and he happens to be Yazdon’s cousin. When Yazdon inadvertently discovers that he no longer has absolute healing powers, he goes in search of Edward for help.

    About The Author

    Jalleh Doty is a 2nd time book author with a previous work Poetry and Satire for the Avante garde to her credit. Jalleh Doty has won various Poetry and short story awards from there Iliad press for her work. Pari Adli is a former Psychologist with essays and pieces published in magazines for Psychology periodicals for the past 30 yrs. Pari Adli and Jalleh Doty are also authors of The Last Savior books 2 and 3.