En mi defensa
Logline
Un hombre está dispuesto a todo por encontrar al asesino de su novia mientras tiene que defenderse de dos mujeres, convencidas de que tiene algo que ver con el crimen. Lo que no sabe, es que sufre esquizofrenia y trastorno disociativo, y las mujeres estaban en lo cierto. Él es el asesino que busca.
Genre
Drama,Suspense/Thriller,LGBT,Detective
Short Summary
Javier, sin ser consciente de lo que ha hecho minutos antes, encuentra el cadáver de su novia. En ese momento iremos al pasado para ir viendo, paso a paso, lo que sucedió hasta llegar a este momento. Después de que encuentre el cadáver, empieza una lucha insistente por encontrar al responsable.
Sabela, una inspectora de policía, tendrá que decidir si detener a Javier y perder al amor de su vida o rescatarla y dejar escapar a Javier. Elegirá el amor. Javier, destrozado porque ahora sabe quién es él y de lo que es capaz, se da a la fuga acompañado de sus dos personalidades: Guille y Andreu.
Setting
España (Asturias-Madrid y Galicia)
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Tragedy
Plot - Other Elements
Other,Meaningful Message
Mature Audience Themes
Sexual Abuse
Main Character Details
Name: Javier
Age: 29
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Crazy,Charming,Empathetic,Educated
Additional Character Details
Name: Sabela
Age: 34
Gender: Lgbt
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Aggressive,Sarcastic,Leader,Insecure
Additional Character Details
Name: Cris
Age: 30
Gender: Lgbt
Role: sidekick
Key Traits: Romantic,Seductive,Gracious,Confident,Sexy,Sophisticated
Additional Character Details
Name: Guille
Age: 29
Gender: Male
Role: antagonist
Key Traits: Aggressive,Crazy,Criminal,Villainous
Development Pitch
¿Alguna vez has deseado ser otra persona? ¿y qué pasaría si en lugar de ser esas otras personas, todas ellas se fueran apoderando de ti hasta el punto de no saber quién eres en realidad? Pues entorno a estas preguntas va a girar el argumento de esta serie: un thriller dramático, que combina el suspense con el género policiaco. Tendrá largo recorrido y comienza con una temporada de diez episodios de cuarenta y cinco minutos cada uno. Una serie que habla del empoderamiento femenino, la diversidad y la destrucción de la infancia por pensamientos misóginos y machistas. Todo ello envuelto en un universo transmedia que nos permite explorar al máximo cada una de las personalidades de Javier a la vez que profundizamos en otras subtramas. Además, es el momento adecuado para contarla porque nunca antes se le había dado tanta importancia a la salud mental como ahora, y mucho más, después de la pandemia que acabamos de atravesar.
Genre
THRILLER, SUSPENSE, DRAMA
Brief
Javier sees his girlfriend dead at home and tries to find the culprit for it. As the plot unfolds, other characters begin to realize that Javier is impersonating other people, which leads him to be the one to blame for her death. But when he acquires different personalities, not even Javier knows what is happening and considers himself innocent.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: GOOD
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: GOOD
Structure: FAIR
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
Having access only to the pilot, Cris would act more as a sidekick and emotional for Paula, but as she is not mentioned in the profile, it might be better to explain that the sidekick does not refer to the protagonist Javier, but to the second protagonist Sabela.
Draw of Story
The author does a good job of presenting, in a flashforward, that Paula was murdered. This prompts us to follow the story. The hook is not very clear from the start, since we don't know yet that Javier has mental issues.
Possible Drawbacks
The business part ends up taking a lot of time, and it's a little bit boring amidst so many things going on. It's necessary to add this professional layer to Javier, which will make him even more involved in this issue of multiple personalities, but being too on top of the business at the beginning of the series ends up making the plot less enjoyable.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is seeing all of Javier's personalities working together throughout the series.
Fanbase Potential
I think so. The author created good characters and has a good treatment for the first season, but the pilot could have more strength and intensity.
Awards Potential
If the plot genuinely focuses on the mental problems that lead to multiplicity of personalities and crime, it could have a chance of winning awards.
Envisioned Budget
MEDIUM BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
PSYCHO (OR BATES MOTEL): BY THE FACT THAT NORMAN BATES EMBODIES THE PERSONALITY OF HIS DEAD MOTHER. SPLIT: DUE TO THE EVIDENT PERSONALITY DISORDER OF THE PROTAGONIST THAT ENDS UP INTERFERING WITH THE PLOT.
What’s New About the Story
It's an interesting game of truth and lies in which the viewer has what it takes to be purposefully confused, which is great. However, the author could create a more original base to make this story of multiple personalities stronger.
Lead Characters
Many of the characters only exist in Javier's head, which makes this construction and interaction even more enjoyable. The supporting characters and the LGBT plot that unfolds throughout the pilot also make these characters more relevant and complex.
Uniqueness of Story
Not a rare gem. We've seen something like this before, but since it's a series, the author still has a chance to make his characters stand out, even more, using the same plot.
Possible Formats
Television
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the author has a pretty complete bible, and the story's unfolding over the season seems intriguing, the pilot's script itself doesn't seem impactful enough for the material at hand. It would be interesting to revisit the script for some improvements.
Tips for Improvement
Starting with the flashforward of the murder was a good idea because, beforehand, we already know what's to come, and it intrigues us to keep watching. In fact, already seeing Javier's personality change in the episode pilot is essential to set the tone for the series. Still, the script's development doesn't really seem to take off. It would be interesting to see more of Javier's personal life, tastes, choices, and problems before seeing him handling issues at work. The work part distances us from the protagonist because the environment feels too cold, especially for the first episode. It's understandable that this business-related storyline plays a key role throughout the season, but seeing these preparations and the work meeting itself doesn't seem exciting enough for a pilot episode, especially after seeing what would happen to Paula. The business subplot can be there, but not taking so many pages of the script. Certainly, Javier's multiple personalities will gain further development throughout the season, but it would be interesting to understand already a little of this construction in the first episode. It is possible to show this change in his behavior throughout the episode and at the same time surprise the audience with the revelation that he is impersonating someone else. It has good elements, a complete bible, good ideas, and exciting characters. The author would just need to work deeper in the pilot's script.