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Harry `Stuart skatetown@earthlink.net 5106495193242

SUSPENSE/THRILLER

1960s & '70s,1980s & '90s

HARRY A STUART

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Logline

Story opens with Scott Deluca on death row for murdering his wife Becky. Follows his story from growing up in NJ to joining the Navy and being recruited by Paul Etes into a group of mercenaries who were responsible for the Kennedy assassination.

Genre

Suspense/Thriller

Short Summary

Scott is a contract killer on death row for murdering his wife. He is approached by the organization he works for to complete one last mission in return for his freedom.


Scott avoids killing the presidents by overcoming his captor who just admitted to him that he actually killed Scotts wife and not Scott. Paul Estes is captured and Scott reunites with his daughter Casey who has blamed him for her mothers murder for the last 11 years.

Setting

NJ; Washington State; Florida; Germany, Cozumel

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Voyage and Return

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Extreme Violence

Main Character Details

Name: Scott Deluca

Age: 21 to 35

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Complex,Empathetic,Honorable,Underdog,Masculine

Additional Character Details

Name: Sage

Age: 30+

Gender: Female

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Confident,Engaging,Heartthrob,Sexy,Sophisticated

Additional Character Details

Name: John/Alex

Age: 35

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Criminal,Villainous,Underdog,Skillful,Secretive

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

35 takes the reader on a thrilling journey from the hero's backstory in NJ through his failed attempt to improve his lot in life by joining the navy and then finally when he is recruited into an organization he believes exists to help the citizens of the US. He relates his story from death row where he is awaiting execution for the murder of his wife Backy. Scott is offered a chance to avoid execution if he agrees to complete one last mission for the group that recruited him. Having nothing to lose he agrees but finds out afterward that the mission is to murder the president of the US. Convinced by the conspirators that by assassinating the president he will be saving humanity he comes within minutes of completing the mission before he finds out the truth and also that he never actually murdered his wife.

About The Author

HARRY A STUART, First time author, retired teacher and business owner from Ft. Pierce, Fl. Married to Jerri for 47 years, Two daughters, 6 grandchildren and two rescue dogs.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Palmetto Publishing

Year Published: 2021

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

ACTION, DRAMA, POLITICS

Brief

Scott ends up in jail for killing his wife after living as a professional hitman. He is recruited by his old company after a decade in jail to carryout one last mission in exchange for his freedom and be with his daughter. However, as Scott reminisces he realizes the company's motives are not for justice but for profit. His company kills the president of the USA and Scott is able to go free thanks to his innocence.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT

Pace: FAIR

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

The book profile does mention different parts in the book however it mainly focuses on the ending of the story with the company trust unraveling when most of the narrative is about Scott becoming a hitman and before he ended up in jail rather than after. By mentioning the focus on Scott's journey rather than post-jail, the profile would better reflect the focus of the narrative.

Draw of Story

Scott is in jail for killing his wife which he doesn't remember. Although there is probable cause in that he kills people for a living there is a mystery there as well as what is so important about the murder he is asked to do that after a decade his company figures out how to get him free if he executes the mission correctly.

Possible Drawbacks

The structure of flashbacks from the jail cell undermines some of the tension as to how much danger Scott narrating about his past could really be in given that he is narrating about the past and thus survived. By altering the structure to show the slow progression in untrustworthiness of the company where Scott is already working for them, the tension might better be retained and the pacing may pick up a bit.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Scott is in jail for killing his wife but he has to kill the President Kennedy to get out of jail.

Fanbase Potential

As alternative history this may have a smaller fan-base whoever as an action film this could have a medium sized audience.

Awards Potential

Because of its action genre this is unlikely to win serious prestige awards but may garner popular awards depending on the structure retaining tension and maximizing emotional investment.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

PRISON BREAK, XXX, THE MAN IN THE HIGH CASTLE, BRIDGE OF SPIES, JOHN WICK

What’s New About the Story

The originality stems from Scott having to return to his old ways that got him into jail in order to get him out of jail. He is being lied to about his objective which does not align with his inner conflict and by showing he being tricked more consistently and earlier, the tension will build.

Lead Characters

Scott is loyal and a family man but able to think for himself with good street smarts and logic to defy corruption. Paul is also talented but corrupted and greedy. Sage is wise and compassionate.

Uniqueness of Story

There is an overarching main conflict that is relatable about how blindly trusting authority can be problematic, but the dual storyline of reminiscing about his past and Scott taking on the new mission aren't totally connected outside of being framed for his wife's murder.

Possible Formats

TV Series - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Network

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Making Scott's inner conflict more consistently developed throughout the story would help create a rising tension about his objective that drives the earlier parts before the distrust is established. This may also help make the reminiscing of Scott's origins into the company add more tension because of the framing and assassination request outcome.