Beneath The Surface
ROMANCE COMEDY DRAMA EROTICA FAMILY
Gracie C. McKeever
The fix is in, and even EJ Vega's telepathy can't save him from his matchmaking sisters once they decide he and Tabitha Lyons belong together. Find out what secrets Personal Shopper Tabitha Lyons and bestselling author EJ Vega are hiding beneath the surface.
Former Madison Avenue ad exec EJ Vega just landed a seven-figure advance from Renegade Publishing. Older sister Evelyn convinces him he needs a fashion makeover before he goes on his first national book tour and has just the person in mind to turn his wardrobe inside out.
This erotic romance of healing and forgiveness sees the h/h finally reunite after a falling out where Tabitha discovers EJ's telepathic. EJ and Tabitha reunite at one of his book signings when Tabitha shows up out of the blue and remains until the end before EJ finally notices her.
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Plot - Other Elements
Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions
Mature Audience Themes
Main Character Details
Name: Tabitha Lyons
Key Traits: Aspiring,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Honorable,Sarcastic,Skillful,Outspoken,Sexy,Blunt,Strong Moral Code,Unapologetic,Faithful,Engaging,Funny,Lone Wolf
Additional Character Details
Name: EJ Vega
Key Traits: Masculine,Charming,Complex,Confident,Aspiring,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Heartthrob,Heroic,Honorable,Funny,Skillful,Romantic,Sexy,Strong Moral Code
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Aspiring,Adventurous,Charming,Complex,Masculine,Funny,Sarcastic,Unapologetic
Additional Character Details
Name: Angela Calminetti
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Honorable,Leader,Blunt,Selfless,Outspoken,Romantic,Strong Moral Code,Manipulative,Unapologetic
The Matchmaker: Angela Calminetti, mother of five, New Age practitioner and gifted psychic and telepath, is proud of her family ties and does everything she can to make sure that all of her younger siblings are as happy in love and marriage as she is…whether they want her to or not. Former Madison Avenue ad exec EJ Vega just landed a seven-figure advance from Renegade Publishing. Older sister Evelyn convinces him he needs a fashion makeover before he goes on his first national book tour and has just the person in mind to turn his wardrobe inside out. EJ, too late, recognizes the handiwork of his oldest, matchmaking sister Angela, and by the time he realizes what he's gotten himself into, a very hot and uptight personal shopper has invaded more than just his wardrobe; she's invaded his soul. From a broken home and driven by past demons, Tabitha Lyons is the proprietor of flourishing Lyons Style, Inc. and knows success when she sees it. In EJ she sees not just success, but sexy and sin with a capital "S." She doesn't want to turn his wardrobe inside out as much as she knows EJ will turn her world upside down... The first in a series focusing on familial ties, with themes of healing and redemption, Beneath the Surface shows what it means to survive past tragedy and make a relationship work through the good and bad.
After EJ's sister decides to romantically unite him with her personal shopper, the pair lives a troubled and very hot relationship. In the end, despite the fact that he hid his psychic powers from her, they both get together, and she gets pregnant.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, it does.
Draw of Story
The idea of someone with psychic powers going into a romantic relationship.
There are too many sex-oriented scenes, that could be fewer, more impactful and less repetitive.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The whole central plot involving sexual conquest and falling in love.
Maybe it could, with many alterations, in the same vein of Fifty Shades of Grey.
No, it is not at all the kind of story prized by Awards in general.
Similar Films/TV Series
FIFTY SHADES OF GREY - THE FILM SHOWS A WOMAN WHO FALLS IN LOVE WITH A RICH MAN WITH UNUSUAL SEX HABITS. WHAT WOMEN WANT - IN THE MOVIE, A MAN SUDDENLY GAINS THE ABILITY TO HEAR WOMEN'S THOUGHTS, UNTIL HE BECOMES ROMANTICALLY INVOLVED WITH ONE.
What’s New About the Story
The idea of introducing psychic powers into a torrid, romantic story. However, this aspect should be more displayed throughout the story.
EJ and Tabitha are both very different, and that is why they complete each other. Even though they both operate as clichés of the romantic genre, they end up showing some different aspects of their personalities.
Uniqueness of Story
Not really. The narrative should invest more in its psychic powers' aspect, because other than that it is just a very clichéd romantic/erotic story.
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The dialogue and interactions between the characters feel too unnatural to be credible. If adapted, there should be many changes in order to make these actions more realistic for the public. There is also an excess of sexual content in the book, which could be an issue when adapting it to the screen. There might be no problem in having explicit scenes, but the book overemphasizes how excited the lead characters are around each other. These moments end up being weird, repetitive and tiresome, and could be made more condensed and impactful in an adaptation. The story itself also seems somewhat forced, taking too much time to establish the central couple, stopping them from being together many times without believable reasons. Furthermore, the final conflict is resolved too fast and too easily, not leaving time enough for the public to really feel bad for the pair's separation. As a whole, the story is still a bit derivative. Its most intriguing aspect, which is EJ's ability to read minds, is left aside for the most part of the narrative and doesn't play as essential a part as it should in the central plot. If adapted, this is a crucial point that should be changed to make the story more compelling for the audience.