Out of Blue
LOGLINE: A decent man whose heart and soul are destroyed through the tragic loss of his beloved wife, must overcome his internal demons of self-blame and find himself again.
When Tyler's wife dies in a freak accident, he blames himself for her death and swears he’ll punish himself to his grave. Emotionally wrecked, he disconnects from life as he knows it and buys a motorcycle with an interesting past, then heads out to parts unknown.
Tyler once again finds someone who could become another life partner. But the tug of the road and unfinished healing finds him headed back onto the road. He becomes entangled in more precarious situations in the name of helping others. The sequel to his plight will be in the upcoming 2nd book.
USA Coast to Coast
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Internal Journey/Rebirth,Voyage and Return
Plot - Other Elements
Mature Audience Themes
Main Character Details
Name: Tyler Jameson
Key Traits: Adventurous,Confident,Honorable,Masculine,Strong Moral Code
Additional Character Details
Name: Kyle Jameson
Key Traits: Adventurous,Educated,Selfless,Outspoken,Charming,Honorable
Additional Character Details
Name: Kayla Jameson
Key Traits: Aggressive,Decisive,Blunt,Outspoken,Unapologetic
Additional Character Details
Name: Anna Richardson
Key Traits: Outspoken,Adventurous,Charming,Sexy,Confident,Seductive,Engaging
This book is written for adaptation for either episodic TV or it can be a feature film. It is a complete action, adventure story in the vein of the motion pictures, “The Punisher (original),” “Billy Jack” and the hit TV series “Then Came Bronson.” In these films the main characters have lost something cherished and irreplaceable. They are moved to do whatever it takes to aid in the misfortunes of others, always at a cost to themselves. This story is based in part on true events. This novel is not based on hellion bikers or gang activity. Rather, it is an inspiring and uplifting story of one man’s struggle to regain his heart and soul that have been blown to smithereens. He chooses to do it aboard a motorcycle no matter the weather conditions and struggles that come along with it. The reader can feel the wind in their face and cool draft in the jacket as life both good and bad comes at them over the handlebars. I am an avid motorcycle rider with a writing habit. I’ve raced motorcycles semi-professionally and ridden them for over twenty-five years across country in extreme conditions. I too lost my wife and my motorcycle helped me to get through it. I understand well the technical aspects of the machine along with the culture and the untold magic that only two wheels can deliver.
Tyler watches helplessly as his wife is killed in an earthquake. Unable to cope with sharing their now empty house, Tyler says goodbye to his family and heads for the open road. With just him and his motorcycle he tries to do good in order to forget his pain. Eventually he gets tired of running and sets down roots with a new life full of friends and newfound love.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
The book profile matches the description of the book, but the new love interest doesn't come along until the last third of the book. Having it be a focus of the main summary doesn't seem to match something that is not a focus in the book. Anna does help Tyler begin to heal, but she is not the focus of the storyline about Tyler healing. She's more like a subplot.
Draw of Story
The narrative being about love after death is unusual. The unexpected death and soul searching in a new setting are compelling as most people would seek comfort in familiarity and family. It is like a noble mid-life crisis.
Tyler's emotional growth seems to stem from distractions rather than true healing. His soul being crushed by his wife's loss doesn't seem to affect him much on the road after he leaves his kids so it is unclear how each new location is healing him. By showing how Tyler is emotionally affected in his grief by each encounter, the progression towards healing will feel easier to track.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that a man loses his wife in an earthquake and takes to the open road to find healing. Emotional dramas where men find themselves after lost love are rarer than females rediscovering themselves.
This could have a small to medium fanbase of and older crowd also facing loss in marriage and or mid-life crisis type. It would probably not garner interest in PG-13 or below crowds as the life experiences are not relatable to younger people.
This could have awards potential if the protagonist has more consistent internal conflict with a clear pathway towards healing. Tyler's range of emotions at present once he leaves his kids and grandson are not as dynamic as they could be in order to garner acting accolades.
Similar Films/TV Series
EAT PRAY LOVE, MOTORCYCLE DIARIES, A DOG'S PURPOSE, CALL OF THE WILD, SAFE HAVEN, ENOUGH SAID
What’s New About the Story
Tyler's solitude and choice to heal by starting anew despite his children is unusual. Making Kayla's justification for her anger more clear would help make Tyler's split from his old life easier to understand. Originally Tyler just couldn't be around the same spaces he used to share with his former wife, but he seems to lose touch with his children in his new life. Making his new life fit more cohesively with his old life and matching his healing goals with real emotional progress would help make his transition seem more realistic.
Tyler is upstanding and resilient. He thinks of others even in the wake of intense grief and depression. That takes a lot of strength to be kind while so sad.
Uniqueness of Story
This has potential to be cathartic and rare, but it needs to match the emotional arc with the physical journey. Showing Tyler's emotions rather than him checking in with telling others about his traits will help intertwine the storylines and earn the progression to new relationship better.
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
Matching the second love story to the inner healing main conflict would help even out the pacing of the two. The emotional work has to be more obvious in the grief healing in order for Anna and Tyler to logically be together. Showing how Tyler is grieving through emotions and memories will help more easily show how he is overcoming the tragedy.