ACTION, DRAMA

Matthew is a high school reject who spends his time creating web comics for his imaginary galaxy instead of dating. One day the leader of the web galaxy finds Matthew and informs him his creation is memories from their universes' long lost hero. Matthew as the vessel for this hero, travels to his creation and helps them defeat their oppressive enemy.

FAIR

THIRD PERSON

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: EXCELLENT

Pace: GOOD

Premise: EXCELLENT

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Yes the profile accurately reflects the books, however to add improvements the development pitch and short summary could relay different information for a more well rounded profile. There is mention of a meaningful message so by citing the message in the pitch, the narrative will be better showcased as why the coming of age is different and unique. Matthew's inner conflict is central to the story for the development as the main conflict has already been explained in the logline and short summary.

The concept is slick and entertaining in that Matthew's creation comes to life to make his fiction become history on an alien planet. This is an intriguing hypothetical for the written aspect as well as the alien aspect.

When the characters do go through a transformation, in particular Matthew, it is more of a reaction rather than proactive. Otherwise many of the characters especially the Denab IV characters are static. By giving characters clearer inner conflicts with active transformation this will maximize the emotional investment in the external plot and their success will feel more earned.

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that Matthew is a high school writer whose alien planet comes to life to find him and bring him back to save their planet. Matthew learns to value himself through helping others and that within society he does have worth.

The story is jam-packed with sci-fi and action tropes could definitely appeal to superhero fans. With a greater depth to the characters despite being a fun action romp, there could definitely be a large audience both as a YA coming of age story as well as amongst male teens given the trend for female YA protagonists.

Given the cross-genre story being sci-fi and action as well as YA this is unlikely to get nominated for serious awards but might do well for teen awards.

LARGE BUDGET

THE PURPLE ROSE OF CAIRO, READY PLAYER ONE, JUPITER ASCENDING, LILO AND STITCH, INKHEART, WEIRD SCIENCE

The originality stems from the web comics being the actual memories of the main character as told through the writer who becomes vessel and hero to save the planet he was writing about. Making Matthew, the protagonist's transformation come more from an internal change rather than reactions to this situation could help make his heroics more valued.

Matthew is realistically insecure, but a talented writer and adaptable hero. Dr. Sierra is dedicated and wise.

This is a really great concept with entertaining world building, however the characters themselves are a bit underdeveloped. Further development of the characters could really skyrocket the concept's potential. There are a bunch of likeable characters, but their transformation could have more emotional investment if based off their own accord rather than as a reaction. In particular Michael's physical change making him more worthy than before has a confusing message.

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WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Altering the characters to be more dynamic and proactive rather than reacting to the plot would help maximize the potential. In particular the viewpoints of the males of the females could be more modernized. While playing into sci-fi trops is fun, sometimes going against the genre could also create more surprising plot progression as the setbacks are pretty standard (but followable) at present.