The Truth Lies within the Heart & Soul
Submision Type
book
Logline
The Truth Lies within the Heart & Soul brings to light the missing pieces of who we are and how we are all connected. How humanity didn’t begin until the true love of Yeshua and Inanna, Twin Flames began creating, through love, the love of The Divine
Genre
Religious,Drama,Mystery
Short Summary
The Garden of Eden. The Garden of Eden was a place of beauty and tranquility with many kinds of animals who communicated telepathically. The human bodies while in The Garden of Eden were crystalline, meaning because our vibration was much higher and pure it did not break down like our present day
Setting
The Garden of Eden, Egypt, Jordan, Israel, Middle East, France
Based on a True Story
Yes
Plot - Premise
Internal Journey/Rebirth
Plot - Other Elements
Other
Mature Audience Themes
Substance Abuse
Main Character Details
Name: Jaimee Barrington
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Role: Emotional
Key Traits: Adventurous
Additional Character Details
Name: Jaimee Leigh Barrington
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Role: Emotional
Key Traits: Adventurous,Faithful
Additional Character Details
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Additional Character Details
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Genre
RELIGION
Brief
Christianity's storyline is turned on its head with the revelation of the Divine Ones. Rather than the traditional Trinity, the five Divine Ones correct the past's misconceptions. In particular Jesus and his true love Mary Magdalene's life story of reincarnation throughout the Bible is explained in depth. The Divine then help instruct how to change in order to become five dimensional.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
The logline and development pitch mostly reflect the major purpose of the book. Given that there are five Divine ones it would make more sense to focus on their five dimensional identities in the character details rather than repeating a singular version of one character twice. The short summary's focus the Garden of Eden is a small piece of the narrative and thus may be better suited by explaining the reincarnations throughout time instead of a singular moment. The use of "concur" in the development pitch seems like it would be better as "conquer" instead.
Draw of Story
The new Christian ideas are innovative and unlike any religious texts beforehand. The idea that three-dimensional beings should try to change to master their eternal self as the key to fixing problems on Earth is also interesting.
Possible Drawbacks
The structure makes the ideas difficult to follow and there is more focus on the characters rather than a clear narrative with an arc for the main characters for the audience to become emotionally invested in. In the same vein where Superman or movies about Jesus struggle to show relatable flaws, not knowing what the Divine's goal and flaws are makes seeing their inner transformation less apparent and supportable. By making the characters and their connection to their different version more clear and showing how their characters have changed not just telling about the change in discussions might help create an easier to follow plot and improve character support.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that Jesus and Mary Magdalene are twin flames that have existed in different moments throughout and Bible and history. They have a child which change the traditional views of Christianity on its head to showcase a Devine five member group rather than just the standard three.
Fanbase Potential
Given that this is a religious themed concept this is likely to have a smaller audience. Some Christians may view the innovative ideas as non-Christian so the fanbase within the religious community is likely to get smaller within its small base. Its controversy in the narrative's new ideas may however draw a surprise larger crowd based off media criticism.
Awards Potential
Given its religious overtones this is unlikely to garner awards and because of its alternative viewpoints will likely not get nominated for Christian or religious awards either.
Envisioned Budget
MEDIUM BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
ANCIENT ALIENS, THE DA VINCI CODE, GOD'S NOT DEAD, PASSION OF THE CHRIST, I ORIGINS, CLOUD ATLAS
What’s New About the Story
The use of reincarnation to explain destiny within Christianity is definitely inventive. The Divine being instead of five is unique and the use of Angels' perspectives in rare. Focusing more on a chronological narrative showing how the divine came to master the fifth dimension rather than telling how to ascend may make the narrative easier to emotionally invest in and bring a more dimensions to the characters outside of perfection in having already attained ascension.
Lead Characters
The characters of Gabriel and Adaria are wise and confrontational without being aggressive. They speak their mind about their own truths no matter how difficult the change might be that needs to be made.
Uniqueness of Story
This has some inventive ideas, but as a narrative it would need more of a unified internal conflict to create revelations and a storyline rather than a panel discussion about the fifth dimensions. The concepts are more difficult to understand as being told rather than explained through being shown in the characters' actions in a chronological order.
Possible Formats
Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
Using the inventive concepts as applied to a linear structure so that the characters show the examples rather than tell about the history, could make the plot easier to follow and create further investment in the characters. Giving the characters an internal conflict that they must overcome before ascension could help show their transformation and allow this life lessons to be shown in order by theme rather than reflected upon.