Singles’ Holiday

Elaine Spires

Book Cover

GENRE

DRAMA EROTICA ROMANCE COMEDY

    Core Theme

    DESIRE

    TIME PERIOD

    Contemporary

    COMPARABLE TITLES

    COUPLES RETREAT, A BIGGER SPLASH

    CHARACTER LIST

    EVE MITCHELL (F/48) -- SINGLES' VACATION TOUR GUIDE; A CONSTANT PROBLEM SOLVER WHO JUGGLES A REUNION WITH AN OLD LOVER WITH HER MANY WORK COMMITMENTS.

    MELVYN MCGRASS (M/50S) -- A MARRIED FAMILY MAN WORKING IN ANTIGUA; AN OLD LOVER OF EVE'S WHO SEEKS TO SEDUCE HER AND TO COME BACK INTO HER LIFE, DESPITE BEING MARRIED.

    MICHAEL BROWN (M/30S) -- CHARMING, SOPHISTICATED VACATIONER WHO REVEALS THAT HE'S THE LONG-LOST SON OF EVE AND MELVYN.

    GERI (F/50S) -- INCREASINGLY HORNY AND DESPERATE BRITISH SINGLE WHO GETS INVOLVED WITH AN ABUSIVE MAN AFTER BEING REJECTED BY THE MOST SOUGHT-AFTER SINGLE ON THE TRIP.

    JO (F/50S) -- AN ATTRACTIVE VICAR WHO SETS HER SIGHTS ON A DESIRABLE, SINGLE VACATIONER AND WHO COMES TO BUTT HEADS WITH A JEALOUS GERI.

    DEANO (M/50S) -- A VAIN, YET CHARISMATIC MAN WHO ENTERTAINS WOMEN COMPETING FOR HIM DESPITE BEING MARRIED.

    Logline

    Tour manager Eve Mitchell accompanies a group of single holidaymakers on a trip to the Mango Tree Resort, Antigua, in the Caribbean. The story examines the success of the singles’ holiday. Everyone has their own backstory and reason for going away with complete strangers.

    Target Audiences

    Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

    Target Gender: Universal

    Setting

    Antigua, Caribbean

    Based on a True Story

    No

    Publishing Details

    Status: Yes: self-published

    Publisher: Elaine

    Year Published: Elaine Spires

    Starting Description

    A group of very diverse singles meet up at Gatwick Airport on a holiday to Antigua. It’s a first time for all of them and tour manager Eve Mitchell expertly works her magic to put them at ease so they can enjoy themselves and have the time of their life.

    Ending Description

    10 days later they have laughed & cried together & shared unforgettable experiences as they’ve got to know each other and themselves. It has been the holiday of a lifetime, one they’ll never forget, including Eve, who has the biggest two shocks of all.

    Group Specific

    Information not completed

    Hard Copy Available

    No

    ISBN

    978-0-9928672-2-5

    Mature Audience Themes

    Nudity

    Plot - Other Elements

    Twist,Other

    Plot - Premise

    Internal Journey/Rebirth,Voyage and Return

    Main Character Details

    Name: Eve Mitchell

    Age: 48

    Gender: Other

    Role: Protagonist

    Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Empathetic,Engaging,Flexible,Educated,Leader,Sexy,Skillful,Secretive,Sophisticated

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Melv McGrass

    Age: 51

    Gender: Other

    Role: Antagonist

    Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Masculine,Complex,Confident,Educated,Leader,Sexy,Funny,Seductive,Sophisticated

    Additional Character Details

    Name: Michael Brown

    Age: 30

    Gender: Other

    Role: emotional

    Key Traits: Charming,Complex,Secretive,Heartthrob,Educated,Masculine

    Additional Character Details

    The author has not yet written this

    Development Pitch

    This is the first of six books - each set in a different vacation location with Eve as tour manager and the series follows the will-they-won’t-they relationship between her and Melv over several years. In Singles’ Holiday we meet a very diverse group of people who are all travelling for different reasons and want different things from their vacation. The grumpy London taxi-driver; the divorcee recovering from breast cancer,; the lady-vicar; the jack-the-lad whose wife thinks he’s at a trade fair in Spain; the naive, overweight, kind shop-owner; the music nerd; the grown-up child star. Antigua itself with all it has to offer, becomes a further character in the story. Singles’ Holiday would make a great TV series. Every chapter in the book is a day and there are cliff hangers and plot twists. Strangers soon become friends. Or not. The characters are so diverse everyone will appeal to someone. Plus a tropical storm, a serious accident, glorious sunsets, cocktails on the beach... Added to this is the surprise reunion between Eve and Melv - she isn’t as keen to be in his company as he is in hers. Once Michael Brown - one of the group - tells Melv he has reason to believe he’s his son - we discover the secret Eve kept from him 30 years earlier. There is the possibility here of six seasons - one for each book - each in a different location - each with different stories to tell plus the ongoing love story of Eve and Melv.

    Genre

    COMEDY, ROMANCE, MATURE AUDIENCE, DRAMA

    Brief

    Led by a dedicated tour manager, a diverse group of horny British singles head to Antigua, where relationships form, animosities take shape, and secrets come out.

    Overall Rating

    FAIR

    Point of View

    THIRD PERSON

    Narrative Elements

    Authors Writing Style: FAIR

    Characterization: FAIR

    Commerciality: FAIR

    Franchise Potential: FAIR

    Pace: FAIR

    Premise: FAIR

    Structure: FAIR

    Theme: FAIR

    Accuracy of Book Profile

    Yes, it does a fair job. If anything, more can be done to signal how much sex is included.

    Draw of Story

    What draws the reader in immediately is how fast-paced this work is. It feels like the author is daring you to keep up and to keep track of the many characters. In a sense, the reader is thrown into the chaos of traveling and meeting many new faces, just as each of the singles do.

    Possible Drawbacks

    There were a few things. For one, while the fast pace at first feels fresh and challenging, it quickly becomes dizzying and tiresome. It feels like we are spread too thin-- asked to invest in and care about too many characters without having proper characterization to earn it. Before long, the reader gets spun out, jarred by the relentless, montage-like structure of this work. The many sex scenes feel quite gratuitous, pandering to the audience as opposed to actually serving the narrative or the characters. Most sex scenes seem to go on for far too long, and subsequent scenes for each couple end up feeling entirely redundant to what has come before. Moreover, there are many sections that veer right into erotica territory in how excessive and graphic they are rendered. Other times, it feels uncomfortable and borders on self-parody, like when one character seductively licks the ear of another. Last, more could be done to earn sympathy for the characters. Granted, they have desires, but it feels like little is done to make us want to root for them. They often come across as rather ordinary, self-interested people. The author is sure to make us feel pity for the characters on occasion, but that is not the same as earning sympathy for the audience to actively root for them. Even given their flaws and complexities, we have to like them or at least find them interesting-- at least more so than the average person.

    Use of Special Effects

    THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

    Primary Hook of Story

    This book seems dead-focused on appealing to a 40-and-over, likely single crowd. It is uniquely suited to this demographic's experiences and perceivably what might galvanize them thematically-- sexual re-awakenings, second chances at love, and coming to grips with one's secrets and insecurities.

    Fanbase Potential

    It is doubtful. As noted, this work seems to be zeroed in on an over 40 or 50 demographic, particularly appealing to singles within this demographic. It's foreseeable that the further an audience member is outside of this demographic, the less they have to gain from the story.

    Awards Potential

    No, this is not an awards-type project as it veers more toward melodrama and sex comedy, even despite its thoughtful thematic backbone. This work seems wholeheartedly committed to being more of a trashy-fun, summertime type of project.

    Envisioned Budget

    MEDIUM BUDGET

    Similar Films/TV Series

    COUPLES RETREAT, A BIGGER SPLASH

    What’s New About the Story

    It feels original in that it zeroes in on an often under-utilized demographic. Not only that, but it is quite heavy on sex and desire themes, which is uncommon for this above-40 crowd. Some of the drama in this work feels familiar, as in one can sense elements are derived from other works of this ilk. Perhaps more can be done to differentiate this work as far as the long-lost son and cheating spouse story elements are concerned. It all works fine and well, but what can be done to make it more compelling, more unexpected? What can be done to subvert some of the melodrama tropes in this work? What can be done to reinvent these traditions? These are questions that are worth further consideration.

    Lead Characters

    Eve is a workhorse and a problem-solver, which makes her sympathetic. She is further strengthened as a character in that she has endless problems to solve-- She is constantly on a constant mission, all while trying to juggle personal relationships. All in all, the time we spend with Eve is the most compelling and forward-moving in this work.

    Uniqueness of Story

    It would be hard to argue that there are not some intriguing aspects conceptually, and it is fair to say that credit is due for the author's commitment to this story's age group and to the experience of being single. However, this work is encumbered by is erratic pacing and largely populated with underdeveloped, sometimes redundant characters that would be better off sidelined so that we can spend more time with Eve, the single most well-rounded and compelling character. Moreover, the sheer amount of sex comes across as extreme, and the graphic nature comes across as excessive. It feels like these scenes are serving the audience more than the story, which makes them feel often hollow. The notion of less being more applies here.

    Possible Formats

    Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Cable, TV Series - Streaming

    Analyst Recommendation

    WORK IN PROGRESS

    Justification

    As noted, more can be done to make the pacing more palatable. What starts out as fast and challenging quickly becomes dizzying and tiresome. The audience needs more reprieves, more breathers. When everything is dramatic and exciting, nothing is. Moreover, there seems to be a bit of bloat in this work-- Some of the characters and especially some of the sex scenes feel redundant. There are many scenes--sex and not--that go on for longer than they should, and they function to bog the reader down and to encumber what is perhaps the strongest character and story thread in Eve's.

    Tips for Improvement

    Subsequent passes to smoothen out the pacing and to endow this work with more of a squeeze-and-release structure would be welcome. Also, there is much room to cut, condense, and simplify this work with its rampant sex scenes and seemingly endless supporting characters. Every word and every character should be of utmost importance to the final product. This adage does not feel like it has been as honored as much as it could be in this work's current form.

    Brief

    Dedicated tour manager Eve Mitchell accompanies a group of singles on a trip to Antigua, where love affairs and sexual politics run wild and where diverse secrets come to light.

    What We Liked

    The author makes an inspired effort to transport the audience to Antigua. It's easy to get a sense of the beautiful vistas and of the busy local community. The author is sure to drop her audience right in the mix, taking them on a journey with the characters through many incredible excursions and love affairs. The drama that ensues is affecting, and the secrets that come out are shocking.

    Moreover, what really sets this work apart is its commitment to its themes-- The author delves deep in the topics of love, desire, jealousy, insecurity, and more. That the she plays with characters of demographics often under-seen and under-explored further distinguishes this work.

    Film: Aside from the glorious vistas and tropical imagery, this work has a fair share of heart-pounding, consequential drama that are sure to give way to memorable moment on the silver screen. Moreover, the many sexcapades and popcorn moments in the form of excursions will be sure to attract a target audience.

    TV: This work has many ingredients that are sure to entice its target audience-- It's jam-packed with interpersonal drama, sexual intrigue, and, of course, sex. Moreover, that this work features such an expansive array of supporting players makes adaption to series particularly opportune. In fact, the extra time and consideration would perhaps be essential in order to give the fullest sense of life and depth to the many, many characters.

    Key points: 1. The picturesque location that presents many opportunities for indelible imagery.
    2. The well-rounded lead character in Eve-- someone with many problems to solve.
    3. The sheer amount of sex-- Instant attention-grabber.
    4. The dramatic payoffs-- Particularly with Eve's story thread.
    5. The themes of desire and second chances-- Thoughtfully and sincerely iterated.

    Synopsis

    A slew of British singles head to Antigua for a guided vacation. Eve Mitchell, 40s, is the tour guide-- A dedicated, hard-working professional. On the ground in Antigua, relationships quickly form, and desires quickly come out. Geri, a particularly angsty guest, has her eyes on the desirable Deano, but Deano is only interested in Jo, an attractive vicar. This causes a rift between Geri and the group.

    All the while, Eve reconnects with an old lover of hers from her teen years-- Melvyn. He's married now, with kids, but he tries to seduce Eve nonetheless. Deano sustains a serious leg injury, and it's revealed that he has been married all along, with his wife now on the way to Antigua. A riotous tropical storm comes, making Eve's work life quite complicated. Still, she ends up sleeping with Melvyn. Meanwhile, Geri is taken advantage of by a man.

    A single named Michael confronts Eve and Melvyn and reveals that he is their long-lost son, who Eve had to give away when she was young. As the three reunite with one another, Geri reflects on her insecurities and makes up with Jo. Melvyn tells Eve that he doesn't love his wife, that he agreed to stay in a loveless marriage for his kids' sake.

    Soon, the trip is coming to an end after 10 days. Eve and Melvyn foresee a future together, with both of them delighted to have Michael in their lives. On the plane, Jo confronts Deano's wife, outing Deano for being a cheater once and for all, and Geri reflects on her journey, with a newfound positive outlook on life.

    About The Author

    Elaine Spires is the multidisciplinary author of 11 novels, 2 short story collections, 2 novellas, and several plays. Spires also wrote the short film "Only the Lonely," which won the Groucho Club Best Short Film Award in 2019.