ACTION ADVENTURE COMEDY CRIME DETECTIVE FANTASY MYSTERY POLITICAL RELIGIOUS SCI-FI YOUNG ADULT SUSPENSE/THRILLER ROMANCE
Ed Silva Jr.
The discovery of a dead body on the moon will cause an astronaut to become embroiled in a conspiracy that will shake the foundations of all he has come to believe in.
The script starts with an astronaut in the middle of an EVA experiment. He is preparing grounds to begin a base. But everything changes once he discovers a body. He nicknames their discovery: Moony.
The Brazilian astronaut discovers that there is a secret Moon base on the far side of the Moon with Artificial Intelligence robots. They are there representing the future of mankind.
Moon (Space), NASA Kennedy Space Center (USA), The Alcântara Launch Center in Maranhao (BRAZIL), The Cultural Center Oscar Niemeyer in Goiania (BRAZIL)
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Voyage and Return,Rebellion Against 'The One',Overcoming Monster/Villain,Quest,Rags to Riches,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Tragedy
Plot - Other Elements
Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Philosophical Questions,Twist,Meaningful Message
Mature Audience Themes
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Main Character Details
Name: Astronaut Cirilo Correia
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Crazy,Decisive,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Modest,Patriotic,Skillful,Funny,Visionary,Romantic,Sarcastic,Secretive,Seductive
Additional Character Details
Name: The Captain of the Brazilian Space Agency
Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Clumsy,Complex,Crazy,Confident,Visionary,Lone Wolf,Unapologetic,Manipulative,Sophisticated,Seductive,Secretive,Sarcastic,Romantic,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Power Hungry,Blunt,Religious,Patriotic,Sexy,Uneducated,Obedient,Narcisstic,Villainous,Modest,Underdog,Masculine,Criminal,Decisive,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Greedy,Heartthrob,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Insecure,Leader,Naive
Additional Character Details
Name: Commander Beatriz Machado
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Gracious,Heroic,Insecure,Romantic,Visionary,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Power Hungry,Patriotic,Modest
Additional Character Details
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I am looking for representation as a screenwriter and would like for you to please consider my new screenplay, Daedalus. The script is a mysterious journey through the bizarre and surreal world of our protagonist’s crush. Witness to a corpse found on the moon, he becomes embroiled in a conspiracy that will shake the foundations of all he has come to believe in. Everything is about to change. As well as writing Daedalus , I’ve written four novels, one of which placed first in the New Apple Literary Agency Competition in 2016. I have started converting those stories into a feature film script. Daedalus, I feel, is a unique script with an important message that today’s movie-going crowd will readily warm to and find gripping. The end of this script will be the future of human kind. This is my best work and deserves my best efforts to get it made. I feel your agency/production company would be perfect for this material. I look forward to your reply. Sincerely, Ed Silva Jr. Enclosure
ACTION, SUSPENSE, THRILLER, POLITICS
Astronaut Cirilo is conducting research on a moon base when he discovers a human corpse near his research site. He reports this to his superiors, prompting an investigation into the origins of the body on the moon. He discovers the conspiracy involves the U.S. government secretly developing A.I. as the successors to humans. He has a struggle with his Captain who feels A.I. is bad for humanity, ultimately prevailing and thus, paving the way for a future with A.I.
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
The script profile accurately reflects the script.
Draw of Story
The mystery of the story is made apparent in the opening pages and is pretty clear.
There are numerous problems with the characterization (little to no character development or traits to differentiate the characters), the plot (major plot holes, some plot points lack logic, ham-fisted thematic ideas), and pacing (The story overall feels rushed and not fully thought out). Overall, the author should consider putting more development into the plot, characters, themes, and pacing so the story is more cohesive and compelling.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The premise of a human corpse of unknown origin being found on the moon is interesting and strong enough to grab someone's attention.
I don't see this story having a large fanbase due to the aforementioned issues. This story would be largely dismissed due to its lack of an understandable plot despite its somewhat intriguing premise.
I do not see this story garnering awards/acclaim mainly due to the story not having a firm grasp on the thematic ideas it wants to get across. Trans-humanism and ethics are discussed towards the end but nothing profound comes of this discussion and the story even squeezes in sentiments about Covid-19 that feels almost exploitative as it doesn't really relate to the main plot.
Similar Films/TV Series
FILMS SUCH AS "MOON", "2001: A SPACE ODYSSEY", AND "STEALTH" ARE FILMS SIMILAR TO THIS SCRIPT DUE THEIR SIMILAR THEMES OF TRANS-HUMANISM AND ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE AND FOR THE COMPARABLE POLITICAL AND SPACE ORIENTED ELEMENTS.
What’s New About the Story
The story's premise of finding a human corpse on the moon during a time of early exploration is unique and potentially compelling as a gripping mystery.
There is unfortunately nothing about the lead characters that stand out.
Uniqueness of Story
This is not a rare gem, a reworking of the plot, characterization, the pacing, and the thematic message would go a long way in making this script stand out.
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, Film - Studio
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
Primarily, fleshing out the plot and the characters would go a long way in making this script viable for production. With a focus on strengthening the plot and characters, a good thematic message would inevitably follow as the characters will have clear goals, obstacles, and decisions they will ultimately make informing the audience of the themes.