Daedalus

Ed Silva Jr scriptwriteredsilvajr@hotmail.com 3292622422061

ACTION ADVENTURE COMEDY CRIME DETECTIVE FANTASY MYSTERY POLITICAL RELIGIOUS SCI-FI YOUNG ADULT SUSPENSE/THRILLER ROMANCE

Future

Ed Silva Jr.

Logline

The discovery of a dead body on the moon will cause an astronaut to become embroiled in a conspiracy that will shake the foundations of all he has come to believe in.

Genre

Action,Adventure,Comedy,Crime,Detective,Fantasy,Mystery,Political,Religious,Sci-fi,Young Adult,Suspense/Thriller,Romance

Short Summary

The script starts with an astronaut in the middle of an EVA experiment. He is preparing grounds to begin a base. But everything changes once he discovers a body. He nicknames their discovery: Moony.


The Brazilian astronaut discovers that there is a secret Moon base on the far side of the Moon with Artificial Intelligence robots. They are there representing the future of mankind.

Setting

Moon (Space), NASA Kennedy Space Center (USA), The Alcântara Launch Center in Maranhao (BRAZIL), The Cultural Center Oscar Niemeyer in Goiania (BRAZIL)

Based on a True Story

Yes

Plot - Premise

Voyage and Return,Rebellion Against 'The One',Overcoming Monster/Villain,Quest,Rags to Riches,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Tragedy

Plot - Other Elements

Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Philosophical Questions,Twist,Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Astronaut Cirilo Correia

Age: 27

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Crazy,Decisive,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Modest,Patriotic,Skillful,Funny,Visionary,Romantic,Sarcastic,Secretive,Seductive

Additional Character Details

Name: The Captain of the Brazilian Space Agency

Age: 50

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Clumsy,Complex,Crazy,Confident,Visionary,Lone Wolf,Unapologetic,Manipulative,Sophisticated,Seductive,Secretive,Sarcastic,Romantic,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Power Hungry,Blunt,Religious,Patriotic,Sexy,Uneducated,Obedient,Narcisstic,Villainous,Modest,Underdog,Masculine,Criminal,Decisive,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Greedy,Heartthrob,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Insecure,Leader,Naive

Additional Character Details

Name: Commander Beatriz Machado

Age: 27

Gender: Female

Role: logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Gracious,Heroic,Insecure,Romantic,Visionary,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Power Hungry,Patriotic,Modest

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

I am looking for representation as a screenwriter and would like for you to please consider my new screenplay, Daedalus. The script is a mysterious journey through the bizarre and surreal world of our protagonist’s crush. Witness to a corpse found on the moon, he becomes embroiled in a conspiracy that will shake the foundations of all he has come to believe in. Everything is about to change. As well as writing Daedalus , I’ve written four novels, one of which placed first in the New Apple Literary Agency Competition in 2016. I have started converting those stories into a feature film script. Daedalus, I feel, is a unique script with an important message that today’s movie-going crowd will readily warm to and find gripping. The end of this script will be the future of human kind. This is my best work and deserves my best efforts to get it made. I feel your agency/production company would be perfect for this material. I look forward to your reply. Sincerely, Ed Silva Jr. Enclosure

About The Author

As well as writing Daedalus , I’ve written four novels, one of which placed first in the New Apple Literary Agency Competition in 2016. I have started converting those stories into a feature film script.

Target Audiences

Age: 13-17,7-12,18-34,35-54,55+,6 and under

Target Gender: Universal,Female Leaning,LGBT Leaning,Male Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Hard Copy Available

No

WGA Number

2049032

Genre

ACTION, SUSPENSE, THRILLER, POLITICS

Brief

Astronaut Cirilo is conducting research on a moon base when he discovers a human corpse near his research site. He reports this to his superiors, prompting an investigation into the origins of the body on the moon. He discovers the conspiracy involves the U.S. government secretly developing A.I. as the successors to humans. He has a struggle with his Captain who feels A.I. is bad for humanity, ultimately prevailing and thus, paving the way for a future with A.I.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

SCRIPT

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The script profile accurately reflects the script.

Draw of Story

The mystery of the story is made apparent in the opening pages and is pretty clear.

Possible Drawbacks

There are numerous problems with the characterization (little to no character development or traits to differentiate the characters), the plot (major plot holes, some plot points lack logic, ham-fisted thematic ideas), and pacing (The story overall feels rushed and not fully thought out). Overall, the author should consider putting more development into the plot, characters, themes, and pacing so the story is more cohesive and compelling.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The premise of a human corpse of unknown origin being found on the moon is interesting and strong enough to grab someone's attention.

Fanbase Potential

I don't see this story having a large fanbase due to the aforementioned issues. This story would be largely dismissed due to its lack of an understandable plot despite its somewhat intriguing premise.

Awards Potential

I do not see this story garnering awards/acclaim mainly due to the story not having a firm grasp on the thematic ideas it wants to get across. Trans-humanism and ethics are discussed towards the end but nothing profound comes of this discussion and the story even squeezes in sentiments about Covid-19 that feels almost exploitative as it doesn't really relate to the main plot.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

FILMS SUCH AS "MOON", "2001: A SPACE ODYSSEY", AND "STEALTH" ARE FILMS SIMILAR TO THIS SCRIPT DUE THEIR SIMILAR THEMES OF TRANS-HUMANISM AND ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE AND FOR THE COMPARABLE POLITICAL AND SPACE ORIENTED ELEMENTS.

What’s New About the Story

The story's premise of finding a human corpse on the moon during a time of early exploration is unique and potentially compelling as a gripping mystery.

Lead Characters

There is unfortunately nothing about the lead characters that stand out.

Uniqueness of Story

This is not a rare gem, a reworking of the plot, characterization, the pacing, and the thematic message would go a long way in making this script stand out.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, Film - Studio

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Primarily, fleshing out the plot and the characters would go a long way in making this script viable for production. With a focus on strengthening the plot and characters, a good thematic message would inevitably follow as the characters will have clear goals, obstacles, and decisions they will ultimately make informing the audience of the themes.

Logline

The discovery of a dead body on the moon will cause an astronaut to become embroiled in a conspiracy that will shake the foundations of all he has come to believe in.

Short Summary

The script starts with an astronaut in the middle of an EVA experiment. He is preparing grounds to begin a base. But everything changes once he discovers a body. He nicknames their discovery: Moony.


The Brazilian astronaut discovers that there is a secret Moon base on the far side of the Moon with Artificial Intelligence robots. They are there representing the future of mankind.

FEEDBACK

I am looking for representation as a screenwriter and would like for you to please consider my new screenplay, Daedalus. The script is a mysterious journey through the bizarre and surreal world of our protagonist’s crush. Witness to a corpse found on the moon, he becomes embroiled in a conspiracy that will shake the foundations of all he has come to believe in. Everything is about to change. As well as writing Daedalus , I’ve written four novels, one of which placed first in the New Apple Literary Agency Competition in 2016. I have started converting those stories into a feature film script. Daedalus, I feel, is a unique script with an important message that today’s movie-going crowd will readily warm to and find gripping. The end of this script will be the future of human kind. This is my best work and deserves my best efforts to get it made. I feel your agency/production company would be perfect for this material. I look forward to your reply. Sincerely, Ed Silva Jr. Enclosure

About The Author

As well as writing Daedalus , I’ve written four novels, one of which placed first in the New Apple Literary Agency Competition in 2016. I have started converting those stories into a feature film script.

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Characters

Main Character

Name: Astronaut Cirilo Correia

Age: 27

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Crazy,Decisive,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Masculine,Modest,Patriotic,Skillful,Funny,Visionary,Romantic,Sarcastic,Secretive,Seductive

Character 1

Name: The Captain of the Brazilian Space Agency

Age: 50

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Badass,Aggressive,Adventurous,Aspiring,Charming,Clumsy,Complex,Crazy,Confident,Visionary,Lone Wolf,Unapologetic,Manipulative,Sophisticated,Seductive,Secretive,Sarcastic,Romantic,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Power Hungry,Blunt,Religious,Patriotic,Sexy,Uneducated,Obedient,Narcisstic,Villainous,Modest,Underdog,Masculine,Criminal,Decisive,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Greedy,Heartthrob,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Insecure,Leader,Naive

Character 2

Name: Commander Beatriz Machado

Age: 27

Gender: Female

Role: logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Decisive,Faithful,Gracious,Heroic,Insecure,Romantic,Visionary,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Power Hungry,Patriotic,Modest