The Colours Of The Rainbow Series- The Memoirs Of Opal May Kane 1st entitled I'll Suffer First 2nd entitled Lost Connections 3rd Home Is Where The Heart Is

Derek Chandler darrick40@hotmai.com 3772911747226

DRAMA EPIC FAMILY MEMOIR YOUNG ADULT OTHER BIOGRAPHICAL

1960s & '70s,1980s & '90s,1920s & '30s,1940s & '50s,2000s,20th Century (multiple decades)

Derek Chandler

Logline

A African Americans families life who has been ravished by the hardships of life. The family becomes separated after all these hardships then are finally all reunited as a family unit.

Genre

Drama,Epic,Family,Memoir,Young Adult,Other,Biographical

Short Summary

1st Part-This novel follows the Journey of Opal May Kane life a poor southerner girl who grew up on a small pig farm in Mississippi. She begins life from some very humble begginings. These humble begginings have caused Opals life to be ravished by an unjust and unfair cruel existence.


The youngest son reunites the family after many decades of being separated and they finally all become a family unit again as the Kane family.

Setting

Mississippi, New York, Detroit, Baltimore, Virginia, Vietnam, Italy

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth,Tragedy,Other

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Coming of Age,Philosophical Questions,Twist,Other

Mature Audience Themes

Sexual Abuse,Substance Abuse, Language/Profanity

Main Character Details

Name: Opal and her eight children

Age: Varies

Gender: Female

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Complex,Desperate,Faithful,Flexible,Insecure,Naive,Strong Moral Code,Selfless,Religious,Uneducated,Modest

Additional Character Details

Name: Opal eight children

Age: From ages of 1 to 60

Gender: Male

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Charming,Complex,Confident,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Insecure,Leader,Naive,Lone Wolf,Strong Moral Code,Secretive,Visionary,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Blunt,Religious,Obedient,Modest,Masculine,Underdog

Additional Character Details

Name: Opals 8 children

Age: 1-60

Gender: Male

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Underdog,Masculine,Aspiring,Modest,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Flexible,Heroic,Educated,Insecure,Leader,Lone Wolf,Strong Moral Code,Sophisticated,Secretive,Romantic,Funny,Visionary,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Religious,Blunt,Patriotic,Sexy,Uneducated,Obedient

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

1st Part-This novel follows the Journey of Opal May Kane life a poor southerner girl who grew up on a small pig farm in Mississippi. She begins life from some very humble begginings. These humble begginings have caused Opals life to be ravished by the depths of a unjust and unfair cruel existence. Which is seen in her upbringing. Where she has not had a fair shot at normalcy throughout her younger years. She has grown up in a very difficult day and age. The social climate and times are different when Opal first came into existence. Opal has come to experience and encounter various hardships that have brought nothing but grief to her heart and life. She has experienced all of life's set backs that life had to offer from violence, sexual abuse, substance abuse, and family dismay. The life Opal was given was not routinely fair. This young girl was never given the deserved equal chances and opportunities that other have become accustomed to in life. This lack of of unjust, undeserved chances and opportunities has led Opal to get involved in many relationships where as the men in her life which Opal tried to choose carefully were only trying to abuse her to fill their own selfish needs. Theses selfish needs mostly included pleasuring themselves to satisfy their craving of importance. As the story goes on it gives a detail look at life through the eyes of Opal May Kane. From her younger years of just a innocent kid that had to mature at such a tender early age and who had to adap

About The Author

1st Part-This novel follows the Journey of Opal May Kane life a poor southerner girl who grew up on a small pig farm in Mississippi. She begins life from some very humble begginings. These humble begginings have caused Opals life to be revised by the deaths of an unjust and unfair cruel existence. Which is seen in her upbringing. Where she has not had a fair shot at normalcy throughout her younger years. She has grown up in a very difficult day and age. The social climate and times are different when Opal first came into existence. Opal has come to experience and encounter various hardships that have brought nothing but grief to her heart and life. She has experienced all of life's set backs that life had to offer from violence, sexual abuse, substance abuse, and family dismay. The life Opal was given was not routinely fair. This young girl was never given the deserved equal chances and opportunities that other have become accustomed to in life. This lack of of unjust, undeserved chances and opportunities has led Opal to get involved in many relationships where as the men in her life which Opal tried to choose carefully were only trying to abuse her to fill their own selfish needs. Theses selfish needs mostly included pleasuring themselves to satisfy their craving of importance. As the story goes on it gives a detail look at life through the eyes of Opal May Kane. From her younger years of just a innocent kid that had to mature at such a tender early age and who had to adapt to her ever changing life very fast. Opal has been faced with the harsh reality of taking care of a family before her coming of a suitable age to take on such a huge responsibility. The highs and lows in her life were very difficult indeed. She was never placed on solid ground that would sustain her chances of taken on responsibilities. She has not had a suitable home life. Only for very short periods of her life were there somewhat normalcy. Unfortunately that would not last long. Opal had such a sad life and existence. The majority of Opals life has been continuously plagued by a long history of mental and physical anguish. These in turn hardships have not only plagued Opal but also affected the lives of her kids. Opal contiuosly prays for better days. She prays for a life filled without grief and sorrow. Part 2- These are trying times for the Kane families children. They have all been separated. There are many struggles to endure after being up rooted from their mother Opal May Kane. The children of Opal continue to travel down the up rooted roads of life taken from their mother and fathers. They have become isolated in a world of harsh realities. Faced with problems of the world no child should have to endure. They have all been separated and put on different roads once the child services and authorities have stepped in and have become involved in their lives. The children have become a part of a world that has called for early maturity on their behalfs. Some of the roads traveled by the children are not the nicest paths to be on. There is not much of a choice when the children of Opals were not given equal opportunities to live a normal family life. They have been stripped of all common needs and nurturing since their mother and father have not been part of their life. The children have been all placed on separate roads and journeys in their lives. Most of the roads leading to the same desolouted end of lonlieness, yearning, and belonging. Opals eight children all have separate experience but all come back to the main truth that life would not be this difficult for them and totally different if there were some since of family unity, opportunity, or guidance along their paths. 3rd part- The Kanes path all leads to one. The Kane family have all been faced with hardships but with a little effort on the youngest sons behalf who is one of the last branches on the Kane family tree. The family is brought back together and intertwined as a family unit. This was not a easy struggle for the Kane family to get to the point of reaching out and meeting one another for the first time. Derek being the last child of Opal May Kane had to endure many of life's hardships to reach the final goal of being one family unit after all these years. After many decades of the Kanes family ties being lost. Derek searches for answers and always questions his families dis-array. Derek always believes they can become a family unit again. Even faced with the fact that so many precious years have passed by and been lost. The children all feel the need to connect to one another for the first time ever. With their mother Opal heading the table. Even if it is only for a short period of time. Opal May Kane and the Kane children feel the since of solitude, family unity and belonging that all people should feel. Opal is very pleased now. Finally she can breathe and feel as though her life and the lives of her children serve a meaningful purpose. Opal and her children have put their past transgressions behind them and finally felt the true meaning of peace, love, joy, and sense of purpose that every one should feel throughout their lives. The Kanes can all say they are part of a family at last.

Target Audiences

Age: 13-17,18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Abandoned Children and torn apart family's

Publishing Details

Hard Copy Available

No

WGA Number

Information not completed

Genre

DRAMA

Brief

After several hardships and having kids taken from her, Opal has the chance to meet her entire family again.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

SCRIPT

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

More or less. The development pitch gives the reader a good idea of the script, but the author could spend more time writing about the characters.

Draw of Story

The hook is clear from the first page. We can easily follow the story. The protagonist suffers so much that we feel empathy for her from the beginning.

Possible Drawbacks

Protagonists have to struggle to reach the final goal on their journey, but this story has too much hardship, too much suffering. The number of hardships is so excessive that it makes us want to put the script down. I believe the author could find a better balance of hardships and more peaceful moments.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

It talks about racism and sexism, so the theme is absolutely relevant. Also, women can fully understand Opal's struggles and fears.

Fanbase Potential

It needs further development to reach a large fanbase. I understand the author wanted to give the story a more realistic approach, but it's hard to follow a protagonist that only suffers, suffers, and suffers. If better developed, it could reach the audience it desires.

Awards Potential

It could if the author develops a more balanced narrative. It's a drama and people like to see a protagonist who struggles, however, the sequence of hardships is excessive.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

PRECIOUS: A PROTAGONIST WHO WAS SEXUALLY ABUSED BY HER OWN FATHER. TAKEN FROM ME: A MOTHER HAS HER SON ABDUCTED BY HER EX-HUSBAND, AND SHE WILL DO EVERYTHING TO SEE THE BOY AGAIN.

What’s New About the Story

It's not very original. It's the story of so many women around the world. However, I believe the author could give it a different approach, to make it stand out. It's a fictional story, so it gives the author freedom to create. The author doesn't need to change the story or the characters, but it could change the storytelling, the narrative.

Lead Characters

Opal is a common woman, and this is exactly what makes her stand out. The antagonists are also common men, which gives the story a more realistic tone.

Uniqueness of Story

Not a rare gem, but it could be a better script if the narrative could be changed to something more interesting, more engaging.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, Film - Indie

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

The theme is good and the story is relevant. The author just needs to find a better way to tell this story. It sounds repetitive, it's tiring to follow because the script has a long sequence of Opal being abandoned, abused, assaulted, treated bad. It can even be a realistic point of view, but in terms of fiction, it is tiring to watch. It needs some pauses/reliefs along the story to make the hardships more relevant, and the film itself more enjoyable.

Tips for Improvement

There are many good things about this script. The protagonist can reach a large audience because her struggles are the same struggles of millions of women around the globe. Her kids are taken from her, which elevates the drama. Racism, sexism, and sexual abuse are relevant subjects to explore in a movie. However, the author needs to improve the way the story is told in order to make it more impactful. Opal represents a lot of real women which gives the protagonist a more complex design, however, the narrative is repetitive. It looks like a list of struggles she has to go through to reach her goal. But what's exactly her goal? To survive? To see her kids again? To find a man who deeply loves her? It's not very clear. Opal is a standard kind of human being, a good person who also makes mistakes, which is good. However, she sounds very resigned. She accepts everything that happens to her. She keeps being hurt by men, but she continues having affairs, in an endless circle of events. She keeps getting pregnant and having kids taken from her. It all sounds repetitive: Opal has an affair, she has sex with the man, she gets pregnant, the man treats her bad, her child is taken from her. I know that this is the traditional sequence of events to many women but in a movie, it sounds repetitive. The story keeps jumping from Opal's main narrative to Opal's children's narratives. The problem is that we don't really care about these eight sons/daughters. They all become adults, and they are so many, living different lives, that we don't really follow them. The end is an anticlimax. After decades far from her children, Opal receives a phone call from her youngest son. The dialogue they have is everything but what we were expecting. There's no emotion, no tears, no drama, no beautiful words, nothing. This part demands desperately to be rewritten. It's the moment we were all expecting, and it's absolutely frustrating. Also, the fact that she dies after meeting her family sounds clichéd and unnecessary. The dialogue needs improvement, the narrative needs development, the end needs to be rewritten, the struggles could be diversified, and the characters could expose their emotions more often. It's a nice story with a good theme that needs further development to reach its highest potential.

Logline

A African Americans families life who has been ravished by the hardships of life. The family becomes separated after all these hardships then are finally all reunited as a family unit.

Short Summary

1st Part-This novel follows the Journey of Opal May Kane life a poor southerner girl who grew up on a small pig farm in Mississippi. She begins life from some very humble begginings. These humble begginings have caused Opals life to be ravished by an unjust and unfair cruel existence.


The youngest son reunites the family after many decades of being separated and they finally all become a family unit again as the Kane family.

FEEDBACK

1st Part-This novel follows the Journey of Opal May Kane life a poor southerner girl who grew up on a small pig farm in Mississippi. She begins life from some very humble begginings. These humble begginings have caused Opals life to be ravished by the depths of a unjust and unfair cruel existence. Which is seen in her upbringing. Where she has not had a fair shot at normalcy throughout her younger years. She has grown up in a very difficult day and age. The social climate and times are different when Opal first came into existence. Opal has come to experience and encounter various hardships that have brought nothing but grief to her heart and life. She has experienced all of life's set backs that life had to offer from violence, sexual abuse, substance abuse, and family dismay. The life Opal was given was not routinely fair. This young girl was never given the deserved equal chances and opportunities that other have become accustomed to in life. This lack of of unjust, undeserved chances and opportunities has led Opal to get involved in many relationships where as the men in her life which Opal tried to choose carefully were only trying to abuse her to fill their own selfish needs. Theses selfish needs mostly included pleasuring themselves to satisfy their craving of importance. As the story goes on it gives a detail look at life through the eyes of Opal May Kane. From her younger years of just a innocent kid that had to mature at such a tender early age and who had to adap

About The Author

1st Part-This novel follows the Journey of Opal May Kane life a poor southerner girl who grew up on a small pig farm in Mississippi. She begins life from some very humble begginings. These humble begginings have caused Opals life to be revised by the deaths of an unjust and unfair cruel existence. Which is seen in her upbringing. Where she has not had a fair shot at normalcy throughout her younger years. She has grown up in a very difficult day and age. The social climate and times are different when Opal first came into existence. Opal has come to experience and encounter various hardships that have brought nothing but grief to her heart and life. She has experienced all of life's set backs that life had to offer from violence, sexual abuse, substance abuse, and family dismay. The life Opal was given was not routinely fair. This young girl was never given the deserved equal chances and opportunities that other have become accustomed to in life. This lack of of unjust, undeserved chances and opportunities has led Opal to get involved in many relationships where as the men in her life which Opal tried to choose carefully were only trying to abuse her to fill their own selfish needs. Theses selfish needs mostly included pleasuring themselves to satisfy their craving of importance. As the story goes on it gives a detail look at life through the eyes of Opal May Kane. From her younger years of just a innocent kid that had to mature at such a tender early age and who had to adapt to her ever changing life very fast. Opal has been faced with the harsh reality of taking care of a family before her coming of a suitable age to take on such a huge responsibility. The highs and lows in her life were very difficult indeed. She was never placed on solid ground that would sustain her chances of taken on responsibilities. She has not had a suitable home life. Only for very short periods of her life were there somewhat normalcy. Unfortunately that would not last long. Opal had such a sad life and existence. The majority of Opals life has been continuously plagued by a long history of mental and physical anguish. These in turn hardships have not only plagued Opal but also affected the lives of her kids. Opal contiuosly prays for better days. She prays for a life filled without grief and sorrow. Part 2- These are trying times for the Kane families children. They have all been separated. There are many struggles to endure after being up rooted from their mother Opal May Kane. The children of Opal continue to travel down the up rooted roads of life taken from their mother and fathers. They have become isolated in a world of harsh realities. Faced with problems of the world no child should have to endure. They have all been separated and put on different roads once the child services and authorities have stepped in and have become involved in their lives. The children have become a part of a world that has called for early maturity on their behalfs. Some of the roads traveled by the children are not the nicest paths to be on. There is not much of a choice when the children of Opals were not given equal opportunities to live a normal family life. They have been stripped of all common needs and nurturing since their mother and father have not been part of their life. The children have been all placed on separate roads and journeys in their lives. Most of the roads leading to the same desolouted end of lonlieness, yearning, and belonging. Opals eight children all have separate experience but all come back to the main truth that life would not be this difficult for them and totally different if there were some since of family unity, opportunity, or guidance along their paths. 3rd part- The Kanes path all leads to one. The Kane family have all been faced with hardships but with a little effort on the youngest sons behalf who is one of the last branches on the Kane family tree. The family is brought back together and intertwined as a family unit. This was not a easy struggle for the Kane family to get to the point of reaching out and meeting one another for the first time. Derek being the last child of Opal May Kane had to endure many of life's hardships to reach the final goal of being one family unit after all these years. After many decades of the Kanes family ties being lost. Derek searches for answers and always questions his families dis-array. Derek always believes they can become a family unit again. Even faced with the fact that so many precious years have passed by and been lost. The children all feel the need to connect to one another for the first time ever. With their mother Opal heading the table. Even if it is only for a short period of time. Opal May Kane and the Kane children feel the since of solitude, family unity and belonging that all people should feel. Opal is very pleased now. Finally she can breathe and feel as though her life and the lives of her children serve a meaningful purpose. Opal and her children have put their past transgressions behind them and finally felt the true meaning of peace, love, joy, and sense of purpose that every one should feel throughout their lives. The Kanes can all say they are part of a family at last.

Mature Audience Themes

Sexual Abuse,Substance Abuse, Language/Profanity

Characters

Main Character

Name: Opal and her eight children

Age: Varies

Gender: Female

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Complex,Desperate,Faithful,Flexible,Insecure,Naive,Strong Moral Code,Selfless,Religious,Uneducated,Modest

Character 1

Name: Opal eight children

Age: From ages of 1 to 60

Gender: Male

Role: Emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Charming,Complex,Confident,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Insecure,Leader,Naive,Lone Wolf,Strong Moral Code,Secretive,Visionary,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Blunt,Religious,Obedient,Modest,Masculine,Underdog

Character 2

Name: Opals 8 children

Age: 1-60

Gender: Male

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Underdog,Masculine,Aspiring,Modest,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Flexible,Heroic,Educated,Insecure,Leader,Lone Wolf,Strong Moral Code,Sophisticated,Secretive,Romantic,Funny,Visionary,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Religious,Blunt,Patriotic,Sexy,Uneducated,Obedient