The Colours Of The Rainbow Series- The Memoirs Of Opal May Kane 1st entitled I'll Suffer First 2nd entitled Lost Connections 3rd Home Is Where The Heart Is

DRAMA EPIC FAMILY MEMOIR YOUNG ADULT OTHER BIOGRAPHICAL
1960s & '70s,1980s & '90s,1920s & '30s,1940s & '50s,2000s,20th Century (multiple decades)
Derek Chandler
Logline
A African Americans families life who has been ravished by the hardships of life. The family becomes separated after all these hardships then are finally all reunited as a family unit.
Genre
Drama,Epic,Family,Memoir,Young Adult,Other,Biographical
Short Summary
1st Part-This novel follows the Journey of Opal May Kane life a poor southerner girl who grew up on a small pig farm in Mississippi. She begins life from some very humble begginings. These humble begginings have caused Opals life to be ravished by an unjust and unfair cruel existence.
The youngest son reunites the family after many decades of being separated and they finally all become a family unit again as the Kane family.
Setting
Mississippi, New York, Detroit, Baltimore, Virginia, Vietnam, Italy
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Internal Journey/Rebirth,Tragedy,Other
Plot - Other Elements
Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Coming of Age,Philosophical Questions,Twist,Other
Mature Audience Themes
Sexual Abuse,Substance Abuse, Language/Profanity
Main Character Details
Name: Opal and her eight children
Age: Varies
Gender: Female
Role: Emotional
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Complex,Desperate,Faithful,Flexible,Insecure,Naive,Strong Moral Code,Selfless,Religious,Uneducated,Modest
Additional Character Details
Name: Opal eight children
Age: From ages of 1 to 60
Gender: Male
Role: Emotional
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Charming,Complex,Confident,Engaging,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Educated,Honorable,Insecure,Leader,Naive,Lone Wolf,Strong Moral Code,Secretive,Visionary,Funny,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Blunt,Religious,Obedient,Modest,Masculine,Underdog
Additional Character Details
Name: Opals 8 children
Age: 1-60
Gender: Male
Role: emotional
Key Traits: Adventurous,Underdog,Masculine,Aspiring,Modest,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Confident,Desperate,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Flexible,Heroic,Educated,Insecure,Leader,Lone Wolf,Strong Moral Code,Sophisticated,Secretive,Romantic,Funny,Visionary,Skillful,Outspoken,Selfless,Religious,Blunt,Patriotic,Sexy,Uneducated,Obedient
Additional Character Details
The author has not yet written this
Development Pitch
1st Part-This novel follows the Journey of Opal May Kane life a poor southerner girl who grew up on a small pig farm in Mississippi. She begins life from some very humble begginings. These humble begginings have caused Opals life to be ravished by the depths of a unjust and unfair cruel existence. Which is seen in her upbringing. Where she has not had a fair shot at normalcy throughout her younger years. She has grown up in a very difficult day and age. The social climate and times are different when Opal first came into existence. Opal has come to experience and encounter various hardships that have brought nothing but grief to her heart and life. She has experienced all of life's set backs that life had to offer from violence, sexual abuse, substance abuse, and family dismay. The life Opal was given was not routinely fair. This young girl was never given the deserved equal chances and opportunities that other have become accustomed to in life. This lack of of unjust, undeserved chances and opportunities has led Opal to get involved in many relationships where as the men in her life which Opal tried to choose carefully were only trying to abuse her to fill their own selfish needs. Theses selfish needs mostly included pleasuring themselves to satisfy their craving of importance. As the story goes on it gives a detail look at life through the eyes of Opal May Kane. From her younger years of just a innocent kid that had to mature at such a tender early age and who had to adap
Genre
DRAMA
Brief
After several hardships and having kids taken from her, Opal has the chance to meet her entire family again.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: FAIR
Franchise Potential: FAIR
Pace: FAIR
Premise: FAIR
Structure: FAIR
Theme: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
More or less. The development pitch gives the reader a good idea of the script, but the author could spend more time writing about the characters.
Draw of Story
The hook is clear from the first page. We can easily follow the story. The protagonist suffers so much that we feel empathy for her from the beginning.
Possible Drawbacks
Protagonists have to struggle to reach the final goal on their journey, but this story has too much hardship, too much suffering. The number of hardships is so excessive that it makes us want to put the script down. I believe the author could find a better balance of hardships and more peaceful moments.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
It talks about racism and sexism, so the theme is absolutely relevant. Also, women can fully understand Opal's struggles and fears.
Fanbase Potential
It needs further development to reach a large fanbase. I understand the author wanted to give the story a more realistic approach, but it's hard to follow a protagonist that only suffers, suffers, and suffers. If better developed, it could reach the audience it desires.
Awards Potential
It could if the author develops a more balanced narrative. It's a drama and people like to see a protagonist who struggles, however, the sequence of hardships is excessive.
Envisioned Budget
MEDIUM BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
PRECIOUS: A PROTAGONIST WHO WAS SEXUALLY ABUSED BY HER OWN FATHER. TAKEN FROM ME: A MOTHER HAS HER SON ABDUCTED BY HER EX-HUSBAND, AND SHE WILL DO EVERYTHING TO SEE THE BOY AGAIN.
What’s New About the Story
It's not very original. It's the story of so many women around the world. However, I believe the author could give it a different approach, to make it stand out. It's a fictional story, so it gives the author freedom to create. The author doesn't need to change the story or the characters, but it could change the storytelling, the narrative.
Lead Characters
Opal is a common woman, and this is exactly what makes her stand out. The antagonists are also common men, which gives the story a more realistic tone.
Uniqueness of Story
Not a rare gem, but it could be a better script if the narrative could be changed to something more interesting, more engaging.
Possible Formats
Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, Film - Indie
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
The theme is good and the story is relevant. The author just needs to find a better way to tell this story. It sounds repetitive, it's tiring to follow because the script has a long sequence of Opal being abandoned, abused, assaulted, treated bad. It can even be a realistic point of view, but in terms of fiction, it is tiring to watch. It needs some pauses/reliefs along the story to make the hardships more relevant, and the film itself more enjoyable.
Tips for Improvement
There are many good things about this script. The protagonist can reach a large audience because her struggles are the same struggles of millions of women around the globe. Her kids are taken from her, which elevates the drama. Racism, sexism, and sexual abuse are relevant subjects to explore in a movie. However, the author needs to improve the way the story is told in order to make it more impactful. Opal represents a lot of real women which gives the protagonist a more complex design, however, the narrative is repetitive. It looks like a list of struggles she has to go through to reach her goal. But what's exactly her goal? To survive? To see her kids again? To find a man who deeply loves her? It's not very clear. Opal is a standard kind of human being, a good person who also makes mistakes, which is good. However, she sounds very resigned. She accepts everything that happens to her. She keeps being hurt by men, but she continues having affairs, in an endless circle of events. She keeps getting pregnant and having kids taken from her. It all sounds repetitive: Opal has an affair, she has sex with the man, she gets pregnant, the man treats her bad, her child is taken from her. I know that this is the traditional sequence of events to many women but in a movie, it sounds repetitive. The story keeps jumping from Opal's main narrative to Opal's children's narratives. The problem is that we don't really care about these eight sons/daughters. They all become adults, and they are so many, living different lives, that we don't really follow them. The end is an anticlimax. After decades far from her children, Opal receives a phone call from her youngest son. The dialogue they have is everything but what we were expecting. There's no emotion, no tears, no drama, no beautiful words, nothing. This part demands desperately to be rewritten. It's the moment we were all expecting, and it's absolutely frustrating. Also, the fact that she dies after meeting her family sounds clichéd and unnecessary. The dialogue needs improvement, the narrative needs development, the end needs to be rewritten, the struggles could be diversified, and the characters could expose their emotions more often. It's a nice story with a good theme that needs further development to reach its highest potential.