Journey to the Promised Land

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ADVENTURE

1960s & '70s,1940s & '50s

Dennis R McLeod

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With our time in Israel and the study I have completed, plus all the people we have met while in Israel. I have put together a historical fictional story built around the lives of holocaust survivors and the years after the war up to the mid 70s. Not a true story but based on historical events.

Genre

Adventure

Short Summary

The family are living in war torn Russia and can see the persecution occurring and know they will have to leave. With the terrors of the war and its aftermath as a background they face an uncertain future as they leave all they have behind and head for Poland and on to England.


The Yom Kippur war has come to an end and once more the future outlook is uncertain as things are not straight back to normal. With wounded still recovering and the question about prisoners of war, what does the future hold. But finally being able to gather as a family, there is hope for the future.

Setting

Europe - England - Israel

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Voyage and Return

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Simon Labosky

Age: Starts at 10 and goes to 31

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Decisive,Confident,Obedient,Religious

Additional Character Details

Name: Joseph

Age: Labosky

Gender: Male

Role: Logical

Key Traits: Religious,Aspiring,Confident,Decisive,Flexible,Educated

Additional Character Details

Name: Rose

Age: Young adult

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Charming,Religious,Confident,Faithful,Romantic

Additional Character Details

Name: Dina

Age: Middle age

Gender: Female

Role: logical

Key Traits: Religious,Aspiring,Charming,Confident

Development Pitch

During WWII many terrible things happened, but top of the list must have been the Holocaust. What few people are aware of, however, are the struggles of the Jewish people they experienced after the war, when they wanted to return to the homes they had fled from. This book is a fictionalised story of people who had lived at that time and experienced some of those horrors and their journey towards a final destination of peace. This is a story that was never going to be easy, as they put their past behind them and travelled into the unknown to make new lives for them and their families. People not only had to live with the memories of the war as they travelled, they also had to face hardships along the way as they re-established themselves in a new land. This is a story of uncertainty and even more war before they can look forward to a time of peace and stability.

About The Author

I left home at 15 and joined the Regular Force Cadets of the New Zealand Army as an apprentice Automotive Engineer. At age 18 I graduated into the regular force. I completed my apprenticeship and then became an instructor. On leaving the services I was employed as a Tutor at the local trade school. During that time I joined a Harrier club, was president of a School committee, refereed Basket Ball, a Bible teacher, and marriage celebrant. I have four children from my first marriage and now nine grandchildren. I have now been married to Penny, coming up to forty-four years. I wrote my first book when I was 72 and now I have just turned 78. My wife Penny and I spent three years in Israel. First as House parents to Arab Special Needs Children in Bethlehem, and then helping the poor of the Land in Jerusalem. I have also spent time in several countries in Africa.

Target Audiences

Age: 35-54,55+,18-34

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: wildsidepublishing.com

Year Published: 2019

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

978-0-473-47789-9

Genre

SUSPENSE, DRAMA, RELIGION, WAR

Brief

In the aftermath of World War II, Simon and his parents leave their small town in Russia to escape Stalin's oppression and persecution. Facing an uncertain future and carrying limited supplies, they travel through Poland, Germany, France, and England. Their journey allows them to meet people that will help them on their way. As their wounds heal, they will be able to reunite as a family again and see hope for the future.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: GOOD

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

It needs a full description of plot premises and other elements.

Draw of Story

It’s an adventurous and encouraging story of strength in the midst of challenging situations and difficult circumstances. Although the family faces many hurdles, they have high hopes for the future and remain optimistic. There are also some hints of humor, for example, when the family tries coffee for the first time and thinks that is why the Americans won the American Revolution while the British were drinking tea.

Possible Drawbacks

Simon's parents are lovely, but they are also pretty dull most of the time. Because of this, it's hard to regard them as interesting characters. While facing challenging circumstances and hard times, they could turn out to be more powerful characters.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

This is a great road story in which they meet interesting and fascinating characters on the way and get to learn about modern Jewish history. Facing an uncertain future and carrying limited supplies, the family goes on a journey trying to escape from war and oppression. Although, they remain optimistic while facing challenging situations and difficult circumstances. The story is based on true accounts of Jewish survivors who lived through dangerous times and, after the war, they wanted to return to the homes they had fled from.

Fanbase Potential

It's not a story for fanbases; however, the narrative about a boy and his family struggling to survive while escaping from war and oppression is captivating and sure to draw the audience.

Awards Potential

It is possible, especially if the family's encounters and connections are explored during their journey. The Awards typically salutes the refugee community and its diversity.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

BORN IN SYRIA, DHEEPAN

What’s New About the Story

This story is based on true accounts of Jewish survivors who endured dangerous times and wanted to return to the homes they had left behind. Regaining identity is at the heart of the narrative. The family's encounters and connections they made during their escape journey are also unique and fascinating. The cinematography of their travels through Poland, Germany, France and England can also be explored as a good road movie.

Lead Characters

The narrative is told from the perspective of a young boy named Simon. Along with his Christian parents, he leaves Russia to escape oppression under Stalin. Facing an uncertain future and carrying limited supplies, the family is always lovely with each other and remains optimistic while facing challenging situations and difficult circumstances. Later, as Simon and his wife move to Israel, they come to know the culture and identity they had once left behind.

Uniqueness of Story

There's not much rare in this story; we can find similar approaches in other productions about refugees and persecutions. However, the plot allows for exploring more interesting characters and unique locations that will appeal to the audience.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming TV Series: Limited Run / Mini-Series

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

It would be interesting to explore more the characters that the family meets on their journey. Also, Simon's parents are lovely, but they are also pretty dull most of the time. Because of this, it's hard to regard them as interesting characters. The hard times and hardships they faced could make them stronger characters.