Scorched Earth, Alien Wonders

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SCI-FI FANTASY COMEDY ADVENTURE

Future

Delilah Jean Williams

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Logline

A futuristic, humorous, eco-fable set in the backdrop of climate change, endangered species, loyalty, love, betrayal and intergalactic enlightenment...with some bumbling Russians thrown in for comic relief. The message in this unique story gets more relevant every year.

Genre

Sci-fi,Fantasy,Comedy,Adventure

Short Summary

Future Earth in the year 2298


And there, dear Daisy, is your happy ending.

Setting

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Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Voyage and Return

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Twist,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Captain Stanley Memphis

Age: 20

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Charming,Funny,Leader,Engaging,Complex,Romantic,Strong Moral Code,Underdog,Visionary

Additional Character Details

Name: Dr. Lithia Jones

Age: 20

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Blunt,Adventurous,Confident,Complex,Skillful,Secretive,Heroic

Additional Character Details

Name: Second Officer Gerry Moore

Age: 20

Gender: Male

Role: skeptic

Key Traits: Adventurous,Complex,Confident,Funny,Outspoken

Additional Character Details

Name: Communications Officer Shasta Brown

Age: 20

Gender: Female

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Adventurous,Modest,Complex,Confident,Selfless

Development Pitch

The story is told from a unique, non-human perspective in the narration of alien leader Captain Stanley Memphis, who heads a small, quirky group of aliens disguised as prairie dogs—the only remaining animals left on the dying planet of Earth after most of the human population has relocated to Mars. Upon learning of plans by humans to move into the aliens’ quadrant of space, Memphis and his little team are sent to study how humans treat lesser life forms and find out if they are savage bastards or a benevolent tribe. But the routine assignment soon turns into more than who might soon be living next door. The environmental, climate change, animal extinctions, corruption and betrayal, love and loyalty themes of this book make it more relevant every year. It even has a few bungling Russians thrown in for comedy relief long before current events developed. The only thing that might be comparable today is the animated movie WALLE.

About The Author

Delilah Jean Williams is an environmental journalist, published author and political activist. Her work has appeared in Seattle Magazine, Neighborhood America, Women's Network Journal, Critters USA, Examiner.com and various online news sites. She has had dozens of Op/Ed articles published on the Internet and in national newspapers over the past twenty years.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Amazon CreateSpace

Year Published: 2015

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

9780578163697

Genre

COMEDY, ACTION, FANTASY

Brief

Aliens come to Earth disguised as prairie dogs to find out if humans are benevolent enough to smaller life forms to become the aliens' clone neighbors. The situation develops into a great opportunity to save life in general in the planet.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: GOOD

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the profile does depict the book.

Draw of Story

The craziness of the premise.

Possible Drawbacks

There is too much exposition and a fundamental lack of character development.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The premise. A bunch of aliens that come to a devastated Earth disguised as prairie dogs to find out if we are worthy beings.

Fanbase Potential

The premise would have the potential to form a large fanbase, but the narrative as it is developed still doesn't work properly.

Awards Potential

Not really. It is a bit uneven and undercooked for fantasy and sci-fi awards.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

WALL-E - AS MENTIONED BY THE AUTHOR HERSELF, A SOMEWHAT COMIC DYSTOPIA IN WHICH EARTH IS DESTROYED BY HUMAN ACTIONS AND MUST BE REBUILT. THEY LIVE - ALIENS COME TO EARTH CONCEALING THEIR APPEARANCE TO INTERACT WITH AND MANIPULATE US, IN A SOCIAL COMMENTARY ABOUT CONSUMERISM.

What’s New About the Story

The fun premise, but the narrative and characters could be further develop in order to unlock its full comic potential.

Lead Characters

Captain Stanley Memphis is a courageous and somewhat funny leader, who is trustworthy and kind to everyone.

Uniqueness of Story

Not really. Despite the intriguing premise, character and story development still require a lot of extra work.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The book is too obvious in its approach to the main theme, even though the premise is unexpected. As a social critique about our habits and general disregard for environmental issues, it should be more subtle and bring up these subjects through the interaction between the characters, and not through explanations that are somehow similar to the ones found in history books. This might be an essential difficulty in an adaptation. Furthermore, the character development is generally ineffective, failing to show us their main interests and the aspects that differentiate them, making things even more confusing for the reader. An adaptation would benefit from focusing on less characters but turning them more remarkable to the audience. The humor is also one of the highs and lows of the story. While it certainly has many funny elements and moments, sometimes in the narrative the humor is excessive and feels a bit too childish. For it to work in the screen, there would need to be alterations aiming at the public's best experience. Therefore, the story would require a lot of work, changes and revisions to become a successful adaptation for the screens.