Oyster Katcher Killers

David Ashby davidashbync@gmail.com 5192768684186

SUSPENSE/THRILLER

2000s

David W. Ashby

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Logline

A string of grisly murders up and down the Outerbanks of North Carolina, and the beautiful FBI agent, Kelli Muller is assigned to the case. She falls in love with Jake Ryan, a rogue private detective, and they pursue two serial killers working in harmony up and down the Banks.

Genre

Suspense/Thriller

Short Summary

A wealthy real estate developer is stalked and drowned near the Cape Hatteras light house . The scene is described in great detail, as Hercules ( obviously not real name) , an Ex Navy EOD diver savagely, and without mercy drowns an unsuspecting prey,


Kelly is Kidnapped by Hercules and taken to Portsmouth village, the only ghost town on the eastern seaboard ( real location). Jake races his love with an ex-navy seal, and his best friend Jeff Harris. Will they be able to save Kelli or will the Hurricane bearing down on them take them all?

Setting

OuterBanks of North Carolina

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain

Plot - Other Elements

Twist,Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Kelli Mueller

Age: Late Twenties to early Thirties

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Badass,Aggressive,Sexy,Empathetic,Selfless,Charming,Heartthrob,Romantic,Visionary,Outspoken,Seductive,Heroic

Additional Character Details

Name: Jake ryan,

Age: Early Thirties

Gender: Male

Role: Sidekick

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Masculine,Badass,Aggressive,Confident,Complex,Empathetic,Blunt,Funny,Heartthrob,Heroic,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Unapologetic

Additional Character Details

Name: Jude Locklear

Age: Fifties

Gender: Female

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Badass,Villainous,Narcisstic,Criminal,Greedy,Seductive,Sophisticated,Unapologetic

Additional Character Details

Name: Herculas

Age: Thirites

Gender: Male

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Masculine,Badass,Aggressive,Villainous,Narcisstic,Criminal,Crazy,Complex,Skillful,Secretive,Lone Wolf,Unapologetic

Development Pitch

This book is highly marketable to those that love a good crime drama. Think CSI or Criminal minds meets Stephen King or Dean Koontz. The book also appeals to those that fear the oil and gas companies pursuit of cheap energy sources will eventually destroy the Earth's delicate environment, thus causing mass extinct including Mankind. It is a very realistic tale, because as an Ex-history teacher, I go into depth describing these mysterious barrier islands full of shipwrecks, lighthouses, Lifeguard stations, lighthouses, and don't forget Edward Teach alias Black beard, the most infamous pirate of all time.

About The Author

I graduated from Western Kentucky University in 1982, after serving in the United Navy went back to school and earned a Teacher certification in secondary education (High School). The Oyster Katcher Killers was published in 2017 by Sarah Book publishing , and quickly was there top revenue producer for several months that year. I am the proud father of three sons, that have all served in the US Military. The second edition of the Oyster Catcher killers, (noticed the spelling ) is presently on Amazon/Kindle, I enjoy Hiking, Biking, snow skiing, anything in the great outdoors. All three of my books have the underlining theme of how we are destroying the environment in our greedy pursuit of the almighty dollar.

Target Audiences

Age: 35-54

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Environmental

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: Sarah Book Publishing

Year Published: 2017

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

13-978-1729334188

Genre

ACTION, SUSPENSE, THRILLER, DRAMA

Brief

Ten people die off the coast of North Carolina in gruesome murders at the hand of a serial killer team. FBI agent Kelli uses her local detective partner Jake to her advantage in getting the locals to talk. Kelli gets to near the killers and gets kidnapped by the killers. It is up to Jake and his friends to take down the supernatural murderers and save Kelli before she becomes the next victim.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes the book profile showcases the narrative in the logline and describes the very beginning and end in the short summary. It may be helpful to better reflect the book by keeping Kelli's name spelling consistent, focusing on the protagonists in the summary instead. In particular adding more to the development pitch outside of why it s marketable for similar shows but explaining what makes in terms of the genre. For example, the setting in a unique focus that is explained, but the themes of the story would also be helpful to showcase the individual merits of the narrative in its marketing potential.

Draw of Story

The supernatural elements and eerie loneliness of both the victims final moments and Hercules is enticing and definitely original to the story as water murders are uncommon due to the physical stamina needed to overpower someone in their location.

Possible Drawbacks

The font size tends to change often and the inner conflicts are somewhat unclear. Hercules is menacing but he doesn't seem to have the malice that Jude does thus despite being the majority physical killer, he seems less proactive as an antagonist internally.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that controversial but esteemed people visiting the North Carolina coast keep getting murdered out at sea. The physical ability to do so of the killer is uncommon as is pinning down a motive that ties all of the deaths together in order to prevent the next.

Fanbase Potential

This could potentially have a large fanbase with further depth to the characters by adding clearer inner conflicts.

Awards Potential

Due to its genre and lack of exploring uncommon social issues, the crime piece is unlikely to win any prestige awards.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

THE SHAPE OF WATER, CRIMINAL MINDS, THE SILENCE OF THE LAMBS, GIRL ON THE TRAIN, RIVER’S EDGE

What’s New About the Story

The originality of the story stems from the killers and the settings and the cause of death. Either creating more North Carolina-centric investigations or creating clearer inner conflicts for the protagonists will help make them as memorable as the antagonists and victims.

Lead Characters

Kelli is brave, determined and practical. Jake is loyal, strong and organized. Hercules is bitter and a follower. Jude is wily, aloof and menacing.

Uniqueness of Story

The water deaths and abnormalities of Hercules as the killer are chilling, but the plot of the investigation is pretty standard.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

Adding more foundation to Jake and Kelli's chemistry and why they like each other outside through showing chemistry together and how they act rather than talking about how they think about one another would help create greater emotional investment in the couple. Making Hercules more internally motivated will make him feel in sync with Jade as an an equally menacing antagonist.