ACTION, RELIGION, DRAMA

A group of prisoners on a boat must survive a treacherous journey across the choppy Mediterranean. The apostles Paul and Luke attempt to help the passengers navigate the waters and their faith. Temeros becomes their protege. Demetrius pursues the ship to seek revenge on Paul which adds danger to the passengers outside of weather peril.

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THIRD PERSON

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

The profile and book have the same premise but the breakup of character focus is somewhat different. For example the book has a bigger relationship between Luke and Temeros and Luke almost seems to be the focus. However in the profile Temeros is listed as the protagonist but Paul is the subject of the logline and short summary. Deciding who the singular protagonist is and keeping it consistent would make the takeaway from the profile and book easier to follow as to who is the focus. If there is meant to be a ensemble focus then listing all of the characters within the summary and logline would better reflect the idea behind the books ensemble.

The idea that Paul's teaching can have such two different visceral reactions in compelling because it shows the use of free will at work while adding concrete tension to evangelism.

The characters either have unclear inner conflicts and or are static without a transformation which can create a feeling of one-dimensionality at times for characters in certain scenes. Making the conflict more apparent as flaws rather than just based around their faith journey would help make their inner conflict easier to understand.x

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that there is always danger in being a believer. Just when the ship is safe landing on an island, Paul is in danger for his beliefs. However his same beliefs also create safety in eternal life and change for good in other characters. It is an interesting effect how the same message of God can be interpreted in such different ways.

This may have a decent fanbase in the Christian circles for those already familiar with biblical epics.

Due to its religious aspects but less emphasis on theme and character range and perspective, this is likely only to gain nominations within religious awards rather than the secular industry.

MEDIUM BUDGET

NOAH, THE PRINCE OF EGYPT, 300, THE TEN COMMANDMENTS, EXODUS: GODS AND KINGS, PAUL: APOSTLE OF CHRIST

The originality of the story stems from Luke and Paul preaching the message of Jesus to Romans and non-believers within the generation of Jesus. The boat as the external conflict is a good analogy for faith and is a good source of tension.

Luke is level-headed, methodical and observant. Paul is passionate, wise and loyal to his beliefs. Temeros is curious and open-minded with an adaptability that others lack despite hardships.

The setting and intention are great for an external conflict, but the inner conflicts are not as developed.

Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

By showing an unexplored aspect of the characters struggle in faith and showing their transformation as characters through refined inner conflicts, the story can maximize its emotional investment.