The Last voyage of The Emir

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ACTION ADVENTURE HISTORICAL FICTION RELIGIOUS

17th Century or Earlier

David Riley

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Logline

Bound for Rome, The Emir is carrying a group of prisoners, among them the apostle Paul. A sudden storm threatens all on board, but it isn’t the only danger Paul faces on his perilous voyage. His teaching inspired some to repentance but others to revenge.

Genre

Action,Adventure,Historical Fiction,Religious

Short Summary

A hate filled man is trying to catch up to a ship to exact revenge. The ship carries prisoners being transported to Rome. One of these is Paul, the subject of his rage. Also on board, Luke the physician, and a young crew member, Temeros, alone and scarred from family tragedy.


The ship runs aground after surviving a devastating storm. All on board are saved. The man, Demetrius, attempts to kill Paul but discovers his son is Temeros, the young crew member. Demetrius dies in the attempt. Temeros finds purpose in his faith and is mentored by Luke to become a doctor.

Setting

First century ship in the Mediterranean Sea

Based on a True Story

Yes

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Internal Journey/Rebirth,Voyage and Return,Tragedy

Plot - Other Elements

Happy Ending,Meaningful Message,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Temeros

Age: 19-20

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Modest,Faithful,Honorable,Insecure,Underdog

Additional Character Details

Name: Demetrius

Age: 40

Gender: Male

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Villainous,Aggressive,Narcisstic,Criminal,Blunt,Unapologetic,Outspoken,Decisive

Additional Character Details

Name: Luke

Age: 35

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Masculine,Confident,Religious,Decisive,Selfless,Empathetic,Faithful,Educated,Honorable,Strong Moral Code,Leader

Additional Character Details

Name: Paul

Age: 50

Gender: Male

Role: mentor

Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Obedient,Confident,Religious,Decisive,Selfless,Engaging,Outspoken,Faithful,Visionary,Educated,Strong Moral Code,Leader

Development Pitch

This Bible story of Paul’s shipwreck is found in Acts, chapters 27 and 28. I wanted to bring this story to life in a relatable way. Similar to the popular drama, The Chosen, about the life of Jesus, I feel this story humanizes Paul and Luke, showing them interacting with others on board, and dealing with their own discouragements. I imagined Paul would fill the slow days on board, prior to the storm, by teaching others. I could see him teaching about the armor of God and the Body of Christ here, long before he wrote about them in his epistles. As a doctor, I was intrigued to consider Luke’s role as the ship's doctor. I also wanted to tie the history of the ship itself to the life of Jesus and did that by having the captain share how The Emir got its name. The name, Emir Al Salaam, refers to the Prince of Peace, or Jesus. I imagined that when Mary and Joseph fled to Egypt with the infant Jesus, Joseph, the carpenter, helped build ships in the shipyard. The Owner of the ship saw young Jesus and was captivated by him so he named the ship after him. I do not find many novels about this particular event in Paul’s life, and I feel it is a unique approach to telling this Bible story while fleshing it out with added characters and subplots. I believe other believers would find this story and its scriptural references intriguing, but even non-believers would find the aspects of peril, family strife, revenge, and redemption relatable.

About The Author

David Riley is a Family Physician in Olathe, Kansas. He received his MD degree from the University of Kansas and completed his family practice residency at the Kansas University Medical Center. He has been practicing medicine for over twenty-five years. He and his wife, Renee, have three grown children, but their hearts belong to their granddaughters, Haven and Hadley.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+,13-17

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: Elm Hill books, former division of Harper Collins

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

978-1-400329212

Genre

ACTION, RELIGION, DRAMA

Brief

A group of prisoners on a boat must survive a treacherous journey across the choppy Mediterranean. The apostles Paul and Luke attempt to help the passengers navigate the waters and their faith. Temeros becomes their protege. Demetrius pursues the ship to seek revenge on Paul which adds danger to the passengers outside of weather peril.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The profile and book have the same premise but the breakup of character focus is somewhat different. For example the book has a bigger relationship between Luke and Temeros and Luke almost seems to be the focus. However in the profile Temeros is listed as the protagonist but Paul is the subject of the logline and short summary. Deciding who the singular protagonist is and keeping it consistent would make the takeaway from the profile and book easier to follow as to who is the focus. If there is meant to be a ensemble focus then listing all of the characters within the summary and logline would better reflect the idea behind the books ensemble.

Draw of Story

The idea that Paul's teaching can have such two different visceral reactions in compelling because it shows the use of free will at work while adding concrete tension to evangelism.

Possible Drawbacks

The characters either have unclear inner conflicts and or are static without a transformation which can create a feeling of one-dimensionality at times for characters in certain scenes. Making the conflict more apparent as flaws rather than just based around their faith journey would help make their inner conflict easier to understand.x

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that there is always danger in being a believer. Just when the ship is safe landing on an island, Paul is in danger for his beliefs. However his same beliefs also create safety in eternal life and change for good in other characters. It is an interesting effect how the same message of God can be interpreted in such different ways.

Fanbase Potential

This may have a decent fanbase in the Christian circles for those already familiar with biblical epics.

Awards Potential

Due to its religious aspects but less emphasis on theme and character range and perspective, this is likely only to gain nominations within religious awards rather than the secular industry.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

NOAH, THE PRINCE OF EGYPT, 300, THE TEN COMMANDMENTS, EXODUS: GODS AND KINGS, PAUL: APOSTLE OF CHRIST

What’s New About the Story

The originality of the story stems from Luke and Paul preaching the message of Jesus to Romans and non-believers within the generation of Jesus. The boat as the external conflict is a good analogy for faith and is a good source of tension.

Lead Characters

Luke is level-headed, methodical and observant. Paul is passionate, wise and loyal to his beliefs. Temeros is curious and open-minded with an adaptability that others lack despite hardships.

Uniqueness of Story

The setting and intention are great for an external conflict, but the inner conflicts are not as developed.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

By showing an unexplored aspect of the characters struggle in faith and showing their transformation as characters through refined inner conflicts, the story can maximize its emotional investment.