The Case of the Notorious Roboticist

David Hearne davidhearnewriter@gmail.com 3679206736026

CRIME DETECTIVE SCI-FI SUSPENSE/THRILLER

Future

David Hearne

Logline

Moroz is an old-fashioned gumshoe fighting for equality in a futuristic woman’s world where the lines between human and robot love are blurred. Roboticist Isadora is both his greatest adversary and his only hope. When Isadora is charged with murder, Moroz must consider the cost of solving the case.

Genre

Crime,Detective,Sci-fi,Suspense/Thriller

Short Summary

A man is gunned down in Paris as he protests for men's rights. Roboticist Isadora may be to blame as she builds machines with bias to keep men under her thumb. Moroz wants only to restore equality between the sexes - and Isadora is both his greatest adversary and his only hope.


Roboticist Isadora's Machiavellian plot is uncovered by Moroz who finds a way to begin the journey to restore equality between men and women. In addition, he has found love, firstly with a robot (unknowingly) and then with the woman the machine was based on.

Setting

New York, London, Paris.

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain,Voyage and Return

Plot - Other Elements

Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Language/Profanity

Main Character Details

Name: Moroz

Age: 48

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Underdog,Modest,Lone Wolf,Strong Moral Code,Naive,Honorable,Faithful,Clumsy

Additional Character Details

Name: Isadora

Age: 35

Gender: Female

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Villainous,Charming,Confident,Criminal,Honorable,Heartthrob,Unapologetic,Manipulative,Secretive,Sarcastic,Outspoken,Power Hungry

Additional Character Details

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Development Pitch

'She thrill-killed a robot on a regular basis then the human it was a facsimile of turned up at her house uninvited...' Moroz is an old-fashioned gumshoe fighting for equality in a futuristic woman’s world where artificial intelligence systems exercise punishing levels of power and human-form androids are a routine mechanism to do their bidding. Roboticist Isadora is both his greatest adversary and his only hope to restore balance and justice: however her own plans are to keep men under her thumb. When Isadora is charged with murder, Moroz must consider the cost of trying to solve the case: something that could cost him his family, any chance of true equality and his very life. Additionally, footage of Isadora committing the crime makes the task appear a fool’s errand. In a world where the lines between human and robot love are blurred, a pending contract with the president could enable a new rise of the robots, where their intelligence grows at an incomprehensible rate, eclipsing humanity and foreshadowing its very destruction – commencing with men. Note: This package includes both the main Screenplay and in the additional files, the novel adaptation of the screenplay.

About The Author

David has studied journalism and screenplay writing through QPIX, and has written several screenplays and novellas--The Case of the Notorious Roboticist and Back in Time for a Doughnut being the most recent. He has dabbled in short films, including 72 to 1 which screened in Toowoomba as part of Flickerfest, and hopes to have a feature produced one day. His screenplays have been finalists in many film festivals including the Byron Bay International Film Festival and the Australia Independent Film Festival.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Hard Copy Available

No

WGA Number

1964636

Genre

SUSPENSE, DRAMA, ACTION

Brief

In a dystopian future, when robots and humans live together, and institutions are commanded by women, the detective Moroz is invited to investigate a case that involves his own brother and the woman who removed men's rights. Moroz represents the hope for a more equalitarian future.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

SCRIPT

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: GOOD

Premise: FAIR

Structure: GOOD

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

It does, but I believe the author could include other characters in the profile, such as Zaria, Petrov, and Seera.

Draw of Story

A future when women are in charge of everything and men are the ones to fight for equality sounds interesting as a scenario.

Possible Drawbacks

There are some sex scenes that are unnecessary (depending on the target), some lines are too explanatory and could be improved, and the fact that feminism is presented as a path to inequality. It is a dangerous subject.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

To me, the hook is the scenario, the environment, the world where women are in charge, and the drama and conflicts created by a place where humans and robots live together. However, the investigation itself (that is the main plot, and should be the hook) is somewhat secondary.

Fanbase Potential

I see a large fanbase if the story explores deeper the conflict that is created by the irresponsible use of A.I. as human servers.

Awards Potential

Yes, if the story approaches more intensely the situation of these robots being forced to serve humans. Also, if the plot of women in charge could be better developed.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

BLADE RUNNER - ROBOTS ARE PART OF SOCIETY; THE USE OF SEXUAL ROBOTS TO SATISFY HUMANS; A HUMAN WHO INVESTIGATES CRIMES IN A DYSTOPIAN FUTURE; THE HANDMAID'S TALE - DICTATORSHIP DEFINED BY GENDER.

What’s New About the Story

Matriarchy overpowering patriarchy is unique, but I believe this scenario needs improvement to be accepted by a big portion of the audience.

Lead Characters

The characters are interesting. The fact that Moroz looks and sounds like a standard old-fashioned man is interesting since we will be dealing with a futuristic world. The robot Benson, a comedian with internal conflicts, is also a good character. The antagonist could be improved to become a less villainous person.

Uniqueness of Story

The female "dictatorship" could be improved in order to become a social critique of patriarchy by comparison, instead of presenting the risks of having women in charge.

Possible Formats

Film - Studio, Film - Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The main investigation needs to be more relevant. We don’t care much about Isadora because she is the villain. We also don’t care much about Petrov because he is a different type of villain. We don’t care about Zaria, the robot who helps Petrov with his evil plans. So, the final discovery of who killed Xalvador is irrelevant. We also don’t care if Isadora or Petrov would be sent to jail. So, the main plot should be better developed so we could feel more intrigued by the final revelations, and we would root more for someone. It talks about feminism being so radical that it turns into a kind of matriarchy, where women become dictators, and men are slaves. I understand the author’s point that all extreme situations are bad, and it could be a very interesting critique about patriarchy itself, but the way it is presented now can create huge adverse effects coming from the audience. The author shows that a world commanded by women cannot be a good place to live in, and the order can only be restored if men get in charge again. The protagonist, who is the hope we have to bring the balance back to our lives, is a man. The project of making human-like robots is removed from Isadora’s hands because she is blinded by power, and it is also given to a man since Moroz believes he will be an unbiased creator. Again, I see the author’s point, but the story as it is will definitely make room for negative reviews and protests. The author is a promising storyteller, he is good at creating different plots that merge in the end, good at creating characters and dialogue, so I believe he could better develop the universe of the story. Instead of criticizing women in power, he could criticize unequal societies and patriarchy itself. I believe this is the only way he could have this story accepted by producers and the audience.

Logline

Moroz is an old-fashioned gumshoe fighting for equality in a futuristic woman’s world where the lines between human and robot love are blurred. Roboticist Isadora is both his greatest adversary and his only hope. When Isadora is charged with murder, Moroz must consider the cost of solving the case.

Short Summary

A man is gunned down in Paris as he protests for men's rights. Roboticist Isadora may be to blame as she builds machines with bias to keep men under her thumb. Moroz wants only to restore equality between the sexes - and Isadora is both his greatest adversary and his only hope.


Roboticist Isadora's Machiavellian plot is uncovered by Moroz who finds a way to begin the journey to restore equality between men and women. In addition, he has found love, firstly with a robot (unknowingly) and then with the woman the machine was based on.

FEEDBACK

'She thrill-killed a robot on a regular basis then the human it was a facsimile of turned up at her house uninvited...' Moroz is an old-fashioned gumshoe fighting for equality in a futuristic woman’s world where artificial intelligence systems exercise punishing levels of power and human-form androids are a routine mechanism to do their bidding. Roboticist Isadora is both his greatest adversary and his only hope to restore balance and justice: however her own plans are to keep men under her thumb. When Isadora is charged with murder, Moroz must consider the cost of trying to solve the case: something that could cost him his family, any chance of true equality and his very life. Additionally, footage of Isadora committing the crime makes the task appear a fool’s errand. In a world where the lines between human and robot love are blurred, a pending contract with the president could enable a new rise of the robots, where their intelligence grows at an incomprehensible rate, eclipsing humanity and foreshadowing its very destruction – commencing with men. Note: This package includes both the main Screenplay and in the additional files, the novel adaptation of the screenplay.

About The Author

David has studied journalism and screenplay writing through QPIX, and has written several screenplays and novellas--The Case of the Notorious Roboticist and Back in Time for a Doughnut being the most recent. He has dabbled in short films, including 72 to 1 which screened in Toowoomba as part of Flickerfest, and hopes to have a feature produced one day. His screenplays have been finalists in many film festivals including the Byron Bay International Film Festival and the Australia Independent Film Festival.

Mature Audience Themes

Language/Profanity

Characters

Main Character

Name: Moroz

Age: 48

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Underdog,Modest,Lone Wolf,Strong Moral Code,Naive,Honorable,Faithful,Clumsy

Character 1

Name: Isadora

Age: 35

Gender: Female

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Villainous,Charming,Confident,Criminal,Honorable,Heartthrob,Unapologetic,Manipulative,Secretive,Sarcastic,Outspoken,Power Hungry