The Magic Feather

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ACTION ADVENTURE COMEDY FUNNY FAMILY YOUNG ADULT FANTASY

Contemporary

Wade Waters

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Logline

A teenage boy obtains a magic feather, with which he can turn into a bird and fly. His friends can change along with him, so they have many extraordinary experiences and a few adventures, changing their lives in wonderful ways.

Genre

Action,Adventure,Comedy,Funny,Family,Young Adult,Fantasy

Short Summary

Billy saves the baby of a bird with magic feathers, and is given one of the precious plumes for his help. He shares the secret with his friends and they have many wonderful experiences, many just for fun. They also find, however, the magic feather can help them solve some difficult situations.


After many avian exploits, Billy becomes a veterinarian who develops a reputation as an amazing healer of birds. He writes a book on the subject, and is thought by many to be the world's foremost authority on avian medicine.

Setting

St. Petersburg, Florida

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Other

Plot - Other Elements

Coming of Age,Happy Ending,Meaningful Message

Mature Audience Themes

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Main Character Details

Name: Billy Fischer

Age: 15

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Modest,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Heroic,Charming,Educated,Leader

Additional Character Details

Name: Robin McKenzie

Age: 15

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Complex,Empathetic,Outspoken,Engaging,Faithful,Skillful,Educated,Honorable,Leader,Decisive,Sophisticated

Additional Character Details

Name: Jay Martin

Age: 15

Gender: Male

Role: sidekick

Key Traits: Masculine,Clumsy,Patriotic,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Funny,Educated,Honorable

Additional Character Details

Name: Maryann Fischer

Age: 38

Gender: Female

Role: protagonist

Key Traits: Modest,Charming,Empathetic,Engaging,Faithful,Gracious,Romantic,Honorable

Development Pitch

Billy was a fairly average teenager until the day his life was changed significantly by the gift of a magic feather. The beautiful plume not only allowed him to communicate with birds, but gave him the awesome power to turn into a bird and fly. His friends could change along with him, and of course they had many extraordinary experiences and a few adventures, changing their lives in wonderful ways. Come fly along with our hero Billy and his faithful friends Robin and Jay, all good kids who try to do the right things, making them excellent role models who sometimes right wrongs or otherwise serve the community with their unusual power. Enjoy sharing their wonder and joy as they soar through the air, visit new places, and see the world from new perspectives, both literally and figuratively. This family-friendly story for people of all ages will warm your heart and tickle your funny-bone, as well as make you wish that you yourself had been the lucky person who had received the amazing gift of the magic feather.

About The Author

Wade Waters lives on Florida's Gulf Coast.

Target Audiences

Age: 7-12,13-17,18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: Amadeus Publishing, Inc.

Year Published: 2018

Hard Copy Available

No

ISBN

Information not completed

Genre

FANTASY

Brief

Billy rescues a fallen baby bird from the nest and ends up getting a magical feather from the mother bird. The feather allows Billy to understand what the birds say and still allows him to become a bird and fly. He uses magic to live adventures with his friends and even change situations he can't do as a human.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: FAIR

Premise: FAIR

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

It is accurate, but it would be interesting to include the villains in the profile—the boys who bully others.

Draw of Story

The rapidity with which we get into the action makes us more interested and connected with the main character and the central plot from the beginning.

Possible Drawbacks

Principally the final section, which looks more like a summary of life events in topics. It's interesting to know how these characters have evolved over the years, but it turns out to be quite tiresome because there are so many details.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is this idea of gratitude that nature has for people who care about it. Billy got the chance to fly after his concern toward animals. It's like a reward for being kind.

Fanbase Potential

It's a narrative for a very specific group because of the chimerical content of the premise.

Awards Potential

The story allows for beautiful visual effects and could therefore gain technical categories. However, the narrative itself would need more depth and drama to reach more relevant artistic categories.

Envisioned Budget

LARGE BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

DR. DOLITTLE: A VETERINARIAN IS GIFTED WITH TALKING TO ANIMALS AFTER AN ACCIDENT. HARRY POTTER SAGA: HOW THE TRANSFIGURATION INTO ANIMALS IS POSSIBLE THROUGH MAGIC, IN THE CASE OF ANIMAGUS.

What’s New About the Story

Children try to solve problems in human life through their animal forms. We often see men helping animals, and here happens just the opposite. Animals help men with nearly impossible causes.

Lead Characters

Billy, Jay, and Robin are three friends who work very well together. Each one has distinct characteristics, albeit a bit of cliché that appears a lot in teenage movies. One is studious, while the other is stronger and joins the football team, and the another is kind and adventurous. These are features that complement each other, but that could be a little more original.

Uniqueness of Story

It's not a rare gem because it has elements we've seen before and also because the narrative could be a little more complex.

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The ending could be improved. After following Billy and his friends' adventures and seeing that they managed to accomplish some achievements as birds, we jump to a section where we only see their efforts as humans. What they have achieved in school and personal life, however, the list of things is so extensive that it ends up being tiring and a little pointless. It's interesting to see what happened to the characters after a while, but knowing who did well in which school subject, who entered which university and stuff like that seems not very significant and even uninteresting as act 3 of the narrative. Knowing that Billy opted for the veterinarian and gained fame for his ability to talk to animals is an excellent way to end. But showing everything that happens to other characters ends up leaving this post-climax moment very long and tiring. The story is interesting, the characters are appealing, and the universe of these talking birds sounds quite original, but you get the feeling that the narrative lacks purpose. Why talk to birds? Why become a bird? Why does he solve his problems as a bird? Suppose all these topics have a more abstract and conceptual inclination, where the idea of ​​freedom allows Billy to release his fears and actually help people. In that case, it's interesting as a concept. However, if it's all just a matter of magic, fantasy, the sequence of events seems a little pointless, meaningless. Thinking about the central theme, what moves the narrative, and why Billy was chosen to receive this charm can already help make the narrative more cohesive.