DRAMA

Casey grew up in Florida after his father dies from Leukemia. He goes to college with his best friend, but leaves before getting a degree. He starts having unusual experiences. He sees ghosts in photos he takes of his girlfriend, has a UFO sighting and meets people with abilities.

FAIR

FIRST PERSON

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: GOOD

Theme: FAIR

The book profile does accurately reflect the book. It could touch more on specific events of the story as it gives a very broad view.

The story begins with a lot of heart. Casey is speaking about his father and his final years with him. It is heartwarming and a nice tribute to his father's memory.

The story is a autobiography of a man's life. Most of it is normal, mundane details of Casey's life. The most interesting parts are of his unusual encounters with ghosts, UFO's and people with different abilities. That should take precedence over the meandering through the normal events of his life. It needs more to hold the attention of the audience.

THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

The hook is that Casey has some encounters with unexplainable phenomenon's like floating balls of light. I would watch the movie for the unusual events of Casey's life but not much else is very interesting.

This would not have a large fanbase as is. Casey lives a relatively normal existence with a few moments of interest. There isn't much substance that is engrossing for an audience. The story touches on his unique experiences but spends so little time on it compared to other events in Casey's life.

This does not have awards potential. The storytelling is solid but the content is mundane. Casey goes to college, he gets a girlfriend, he leaves school and gets a job, he loses the job, he gets in engage, his fiancé leaves him, etc. Normal life does not translate to compelling drama, in this case.

MEDIUM BUDGET

GHOSTBUSTERS

The story is not original. Casey is living a normal life and has a few unusual encounters with otherworldly entities.

The lead character does not stand out. He is a young, white man in America living his life. He has a very typical story with a few interesting and unusual moments.

This is an average story that has been written well. If more focus was placed on the times in Casey's life where he encounters unexplainable phenomenon's and shows him exploring it further, it would add excitement to the story.

Film: Indie, Streaming

WORK IN PROGRESS

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

More focus on the science fiction elements of the story. That is where the story lies, not in the ordinary moments in Casey's life. The beginning and end feel like two different stories.