"Legally Omitted"

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DRAMA MEMOIR YOUNG ADULT FUNNY MELODRAMA ROMANCE CRIME

20th Century (multiple decades),2000s,Contemporary,Future

C.F.Thomas

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Logline

This dramedy, chronicles the authors journey into adulthood after making a highschool bet on being a success.The reader gets to laugh and cry at the authors WTF situations as he attempts to navigate through them unscathed,living his life like a rock n roll concert!

Genre

Drama,Memoir,Young Adult,Funny,Melodrama,Romance,Crime

Short Summary

Fresh outta highschool,right into dreamland! Our protagonist begins to see a light of hope. Suddenly,pregnancy,bills,haters,talkshows! You tryn find love,god,success and that evassive American Dream, in the ghetto with a rock n roll mentality and you to will find yourself..Legally Omitted!


After 43 films,moms death and many trials and tribulations,the author settles for the 9 to 5 job,almost giving up on those dreams of grandeur,until he realizes it cant just be him who's lifes become a hot mess and the positive adventure begins.

Setting

Chicago

Based on a True Story

Yes

Plot - Premise

Internal Journey/Rebirth,Quest,Tragedy,Rebellion Against 'The One'

Plot - Other Elements

Coming of Age,Meaningful Message,Philosophical Questions,Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: C.F.Thomas

Age: 18

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Aggressive,Badass,Charming,Clumsy,Complex,Confident,Empathetic,Faithful,Flexible,Gracious,Heroic,Insecure,Leader,Underdog,Seductive,Sarcastic,Romantic,Visionary,Blunt,Sexy,Uneducated,Masculine,Modest,Naive

Additional Character Details

Name: Many

Age: Various

Gender: Other

Role: Antagonist

Key Traits: Power Hungry,Blunt,Aggressive,Complex,Criminal,Desperate,Insecure,Unapologetic,Sarcastic,Funny,Villainous,Narcisstic

Additional Character Details

Name: Various

Age: 18-30

Gender: Other

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Unapologetic,Insecure,Seductive,Greedy,Power Hungry,Uneducated,Narcisstic,Crazy,Aggressive,Villainous

Additional Character Details

Name: Steve

Age: 18

Gender: Male

Role: sidekick

Key Traits: Naive

Development Pitch

I feel the readers will enjoy and discover an eloquent and witty narrative which may enhance appeal to readers as a film or a series.This dramedy has a vibrant account of the authors personal thoughts and experiences that will resonate with a wide audience,as we march through whats become a "inner" reflective C19 pandemic.

About The Author

The books a true story,gathered over the yrs of trying to achieve the goal of becoming a writer/film maker.

Target Audiences

Age: 13-17,18-34,35-54,55+

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Urban

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: Page Publishing

Year Published: 2017

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

ISBN9781681394541. ISBN 978-1-68139-455-8

Genre

DRAMA

Brief

Chris has dreams of becoming a filmmaker but his path after high school involves partying, drugs and women. He moves from job to job, struggling along the way to make money and find love. His continues to make connections, trying to get his film made. An older Chris reflects on his life, work and relationships.

Overall Rating

GOOD

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: GOOD

Characterization: GOOD

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: FAIR

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: GOOD

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.

Draw of Story

The story is relatable and begins with a young man starting his own life. He is honest and upfront about his feelings when he moves into his own apartment. Chris explains the loneliness he felt and the hard times he faced. His years after high school are rough and filled with fun and shenanigans.

Possible Drawbacks

Chris' life flows in repetitive manner. Much of the story, he is struggling financially and in a dysfunctional relationship with a woman. His dream of being a writer and his script becoming a film never leaves him. There was too much focus on his romantic life when the time he spends trying to get his script read might be more interesting.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that Chris' adult life is filled with trials and tribulations and highs and lows. It is a life story. I would watch this story for a different perspective on the a black man's life. He struggled and learned lessons along the way but his story was not bogged down with racist experiences. He was a man who lived a life.

Fanbase Potential

This would have a smaller fanbase. It is biopic which doesn't garner wide appeal. At the moment, there is not a big resolution to the story. There isn't a driving plot but this would be more interesting if it focused on Chris' trying to get his script into the right hands.

Awards Potential

This could have awards potential if more details were taken for character development. Chris' emotional journey takes a back seat to the antics that he is apart of. This story spans decades and should follow is emotional growth and maturity.

Envisioned Budget

MEDIUM BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

STRAIGHT OUTTA COMPTON,GREEN BOOK

What’s New About the Story

The story is original because it is one man's true life story. He is a black man in America and his story is not about Black trauma which is refreshing. Chris' lived his life, he had a many experiences, romances, highs and lows. The ending could be more satisfying and tied up more completely.

Lead Characters

The lead character is a very relatable character. He is a normal person who didn't go off and do anything extraordinary with his life. He had dreams that he worked towards but like many people, he survived. He lived his life doing the best he could.

Uniqueness of Story

This is an average story that could be developed into something special if there is more character development. It is a character driven story and is not sustained on the events in Chris' life. It needs more to connect with the audience

Possible Formats

Film: Studio, Indie, Streaming

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

There should be less focus on the many women in Chris' life and present more internal dialogue about the events in his life. The beginning of the story touches on his emotions in connection with the events but that voice is lost towards the end of the story. His later years are rushed through and the fact that he has children is passed over quickly. There must be more defining moments in those years that create a more well rounded picture of the Chris who is writing his story.