Beautiful Disaster
Submision Type
book
Logline
Three friends accidently discover a beauty formula that revolutionizes the industry. Then a unusual side effect pops up. It not only creates beauty but temporarily stops death. When death takes a holiday, is this a beginning of a new world or the end of mankind?
Genre
Action,Comedy,Funny,Sci-fi,Adventure
Short Summary
Three friends accidently create a beauty cream that erases all blemishes within minutes and hope to keep the formula for themselves. A sociopathic corporate spy will stop at nothing to steal it. They then discover the formula's side effect of prolonging life which makes it priceless.
Setting
Midwest and Southwest
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Other
Plot - Other Elements
Happy Ending
Mature Audience Themes
Language/Profanity
Main Character Details
Name: Danny Kesington
Age: 33
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Charming,Crazy,Funny,Educated,Sarcastic,Greedy
Additional Character Details
Name: Kevin Montgomery
Age: 33
Gender: Male
Role: Sidekick
Key Traits: Clumsy,Crazy,Empathetic,Faithful,Educated,Sexy,Funny,Charming,Greedy
Additional Character Details
Name: Maggie Penny
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Role: protagonist
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aggressive,Confident,Crazy,Decisive,Sarcastic,Funny,Faithful,Greedy
Additional Character Details
The author has not yet written this
Genre
COMEDY, ACTION
Brief
Kevin and Danny are scientist looking to create a new skincare product. Maggy, Danny's girlfriend, gives them a vial of a new formula for hair care, they mistakenly mix in with their own. The new product cures a lot more than wrinkles. They are being chased after by powerful organizations but to save humanity, must fight them to keep the formula to themselves.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: GOOD
Commerciality: GOOD
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Pace: FAIR
Premise: GOOD
Structure: FAIR
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.
Draw of Story
The story is a lighthearted science fiction. Kevin and Danny are screw up type characters who mistakenly mix up a "live forever" formula. They are reigned in by Maggie, the clear thinking character out of the trio.
Possible Drawbacks
The book rambles on with storylines that don't contribute to the plot. There is too much excess that is completely unnecessary. It is barely about the actual formula and more focused on the there escapades. The format of the book makes it difficult to read at times.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES A LITTLE BIT ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that two scientist, trying to create a skincare product, accidentally create a product that completely erases wrinkles but also stops people from dying. Unfortunately, it is not stable and some people begin to melt.
Fanbase Potential
This could have a large fanbase because it mixes genres and could be appealing to a large audience. It is a sci-fi comedy, reminiscing a buddy comedy with a straight shooting female companion. It also has some gore and a villain.
Awards Potential
This does not have awards potential. It is a simple story meant to entertain and be humorous. There is nothing truly dramatic about it and the characters are developed enough to make the story work.
Envisioned Budget
MEDIUM BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
PSYCH, PAUL, THE SPY WHO DUMPED ME
What’s New About the Story
The story is original because of the science it uses as its' plot device. The scientist are creating an aging cream that completely removes all wrinkles and blemishes but also cures death. Besides that, there are plenty of movies about scientist screwing up their experiment to create something diabolical, that an evil corporation wants to get there hands on.
Lead Characters
The lead characters do not stand out. They are goofy characters that have made huge mistake. They can barely keep it together and need the help of the clear thinking woman to steer them.
Uniqueness of Story
This story is average with nothing overly interesting. It can be improved by developing the main characters better. Kevin and Danny seem like the same, incompetent person.
Possible Formats
Film - Studio, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series, TV Series - Streaming
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
For this to be a consider, there needs to be more focus on the plot. There are a many deviations from the main plot that do not enrich the story. It drags along and can be cut down drastically.