Primed for Revenge, Sydney Jones Series

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ACTION CRIME DETECTIVE MYSTERY POLITICAL SUSPENSE/THRILLER ROMANCE

Contemporary

Carolyn M. Bowen

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Logline

Her success should be the pinnacle of her career. She never expected it to threaten her life… Practicing law in a large partnership, Sydney Jones was primed for making partner. Then her life turned upside down after a disagreement with her boss at Birdman & Birdman.

Genre

Action,Crime,Detective,Mystery,Political,Suspense/Thriller,Romance

Short Summary

Practicing law in a large partnership, Sydney Jones was primed for making partner. Then her life turned upside down after a disagreement with her boss at Birdman & Birdman. Leaving the office, she was swiftly kidnapped and taken to her assailants’ hideaway, beaten, and raped.


Tapped for a crime once nudged her toward caution for something afoul was going on at Birdman & Birdman. She prepared for a fight. With a vision of fury, she made a chilling decision — never to be a victim again.

Setting

Atlanta

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain

Plot - Other Elements

Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Extreme Violence,Sexual Abuse

Main Character Details

Name: Sydney Jones

Age: 32

Gender: Female

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Charming,Complex,Sexy,Confident,Skillful,Flexible,Gracious,Romantic,Heartthrob,Educated,Secretive,Seductive,Sophisticated,Strong Moral Code,Leader,Naive

Additional Character Details

Name: Dan Walker

Age: 36

Gender: Male

Role: Sidekick

Key Traits: Adventurous,Masculine,Charming,Complex,Confident,Sexy,Patriotic,Decisive,Skillful,Flexible,Heartthrob,Strong Moral Code,Leader

Additional Character Details

Name: Judith Garner

Age: 34

Gender: Female

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Adventurous,Aspiring,Badass,Aggressive,Narcisstic,Confident,Criminal,Decisive,Desperate,Engaging,Flexible,Visionary,Greedy,Heartthrob,Secretive,Educated,Unapologetic

Additional Character Details

The author has not yet written this

Development Pitch

What’s there to know about Sydney? Glamour. Prestige. Privilege. Betrayal. Revenge – hers. Practicing law in a large partnership, Sydney Jones was primed for making partner. Then her life turned upside down after a disagreement with her boss at Birdman & Birdman. Leaving the office, she was swiftly kidnapped and taken to her assailants’ hideaway, beaten, and raped. With no memory of whom she was has put her at a disadvantage with her captors. Through gritted teeth, she promised a day of repercussions for their actions while mentally visualizing her revenge. Warned by her assailants to keep her mouth shut or else, she was delivered to her home. Not recognizing her former living quarters, she was careful in exploring her options for regaining her memory. Piecing together the reasons for her kidnapping brought her into contact with people, some she could trust and others risky. The problem was the amnesia prevented her from recognizing the difference. Tapped for a crime once nudged her toward caution for something afoul was going on at Birdman & Birdman. She prepared for a fight. With a vision of fury, she made a chilling decision — never to be a victim again. ###

About The Author

CAROLYN BOWEN is a mystery author who calls on her life escapades and an adventurous, imaginative spirit to inspire and entertain. Bowen uses travel as a muse to explore cultures and dialogue to bring her stories to life. Her writing credits include Cross-Ties, a romantic adventure; The Long Road Home, a contemporary crime fiction mystery; The Sydney Jones Series Mystery Thrillers; Book 1: Primed For Revenge, Book 2: Chance, and Book 3: ONE.

Target Audiences

Age: 18-34

Target Gender: Universal,Female Leaning

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: with a Publisher

Publisher: Next Chapter

Year Published: 2019

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

978-1733685801

Genre

ACTION, DRAMA, ROMANCE

Brief

Sydney Jones is a successful lawyer assigned to a case that gets her kidnapped and raped. Luckily she escapes but with no memory of her former life. As Sydney gets her memories back she sets up a new and improved version of her old life by starting her own firm. Unfortunately she can't trust anyone who tries to get close to her besides her bodyguard and therapist.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

THIRD PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: FAIR

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: GOOD

Structure: FAIR

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The book profile has repeated information in the logline and short summary. The development pitch does the best job at scaffolding information in the order it occurs in the book. Addressing the entire mystery of Sydney not being able to trust anyone from her former life in the logline would better suit the guessing nature of narrative rather than just focusing on the beginning elements of the story.

Draw of Story

Sydney's bravery in surviving the attack is compelling but her need to conceal her amnesia in order to find out what happened is a delicate balance full of potential for tension. In order to figure out who she can trust she can't let them know what she doesn't know. This dilemma also works the reverse way in that the more she learns and the less she can trust others the more she has to pretend she doesn't know about them.

Possible Drawbacks

There are moments of tension that are often resolved extremely quickly when they could be drawn out to reach their full potential. For example, Walker's hesitance to cross professional and romantic boundaries with Sydney or Mitch stalking Sydney in her private home gym. Having multiple points of view to include the villains sometimes works in allowing the audience to know more than the characters to create suspense but often it removes the tension from not realizing who is trustworthy.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The hook is that in order for Sydney to remember what happened she has to be in contact with anyone who has information which means she doesn't know who she can trust and who is a danger to her.

Fanbase Potential

This could potentially have a medium sized dedicated fanbase thanks to the romance aspect and successful female protagonist. This is likely to appeal mainly to women in the older demographics with careers.

Awards Potential

Although there is trauma built into the storyline that is usually grounds for awards, the focus is on the investigation of what happened and getting legal revenge rather than showing how Sydney is working through her trauma thus is unlikely to garner many awards based off genre choice vs. normal genre preferences of awards shows.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

FIFTY SHADES OF GREY TRILOGY, SECRET OBSESSION, SECRET IN THEIR EYES, THE BODYGUARD, BEFORE I GO TO SLEEP, BEYOND THE LIGHTS

What’s New About the Story

Sydney's need to remember what happened that put her in danger requires her to reconnect with her past without knowing how to trust. By not giving away which person she can trust through their own pov, the tension and surprise in who betrays her will be more sustained.

Lead Characters

Sydney is brave, extremely kind and very strong to relive her trauma in order to get justice and work through her issues to regain control of her life. Walker is loyal and considerate beyond his job description and has a sixth sense for vetting who to trust.

Uniqueness of Story

Not a gem as it is. Keeping the tension by leaving who to trust as a surprise for longer periods a mystery and extending known points of tension such as the house intruder will help make the rising actions more consistent.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, Film - Studio

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

By allowing the relationships Sydney needs to reconstruct her attack to form by withholding knowing the others' secret intentions for a longer period, the surprise in their betrayal will be feel more organic and drum up more suspense. Also allowing Sydney and Walker to have flaws and make mistakes will help them seem more dynamic and realistic as characters.