Xenophon A Colony in Crisis
ADVENTURE SCI-FI WAR EPIC APOCALYPTIC CRIME DRAMA ROMANCE POLITICAL SUSPENSE/THRILLER ACTION
Carlos Leonel Ogaldez Jr.
Earth's 20-year war against a brutal alien race has ended. A modest officer and his wife, a strong-willed cabinet member take on top leadership roles, after a mysterious enemy hiding in plain sight conducts terrorist attacks, in hopes to sabotage the peace while a looming invasion is on the horizon.
The top members of the Government including the President are assassinated by a radical religious group, vaulting Eleanor into the Presidency. Her husband Dominic a Lieutenant is selected to join a peace mission in former enemy space while alien coup places his ship as the target of a new war.
The multiple characters come together and discover who is really behind the assassinations, the terrorist attacks, and even the alien coup both on Earth and in a battle near its established borders of space. By Defeating the enemy they forge a new peace with former enemies.
Sci Fi Large City, military bases and Space Battle Ships Alien planets
Based on a True Story
Plot - Premise
Voyage and Return,Quest,Overcoming Monster/Villain
Plot - Other Elements
Mature Audience Themes
Main Character Details
Name: Dominic Reed
Age: 28 - 32
Key Traits: Modest,Skillful,Complex,Insecure,Badass,Leader,Masculine,Patriotic,Selfless,Romantic,Honorable,Strong Moral Code,Adventurous,Charming,Faithful
Additional Character Details
Name: Eleanor Chapman-Reed
Key Traits: Aspiring,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Educated,Leader,Outspoken,Adventurous,Aggressive,Charming,Faithful,Engaging,Gracious,Honorable,Underdog,Patriotic,Romantic,Sophisticated,Strong Moral Code,Unapologetic
Additional Character Details
Key Traits: Adventurous,Aggressive,Badass,Complex,Confident,Blunt,Sexy,Romantic,Aspiring,Insecure,Honorable,Educated,Heroic,Faithful,Outspoken,Skillful,Funny,Sarcastic,Secretive,Strong Moral Code,Unapologetic
Additional Character Details
Name: Nicholas Avers
Key Traits: Badass,Masculine,Honorable,Educated,Heroic,Romantic,Strong Moral Code,Leader,Confident,Decisive,Empathetic,Faithful,Charming,Selfless,Patriotic
Earth had begun an in-depth exploration and colonization of space years after safe travels between Earth and planetary colonies on Mars, Venus, the moons of Jupiter, and Saturn had become an everyday occurrence. Once again, the time arrived to reach further into the depths of space. An exploration team had set out to survey the Alpha Centauri system when it encountered an aggressive alien race, The Nihan, conquerors who thrive in war with a goal to devour and control as many systems as possible. This encounter led to two decades of all out war. Now that Earth has ended a 20-year war against a brutal alien race, A modest up-and-coming officer and his wife, a strong-willed cabinet member, must take top leadership roles after a mysterious enemy hiding in plain sight conducts terrorist attacks. This new enemy has hopes to sabotage the peace negotiations while a looming invasion is on the horizon. XENOPHON, A Colony In Crisis, mixes science fiction, and fast-paced action with compelling, unique, and memorable characters in a vast universe at the brink of war.
ACTION, WAR, DRAMA, THRILLER
In the distant future, humans have moved from Earth to populate colonies along the solar system. The Federation of Defense is set up to keep the peace when new species reveal themselves. The Nihan's do not want peace and begin a strategic attack on Earth and its' defenses. Earth's forces fight on land and in space to stop them with a little help from their allies.
Authors Writing Style: GOOD
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Accuracy of Book Profile
Yes, the book profile accurately reflects the book.
Draw of Story
The story does well with world building. It takes place in the future where there are human colonies on different planets and contact with advanced species. The antagonist is revealed early and the plot is clear cut.
There are a large amount of characters with differing storylines. It can be confusing, on paper, to keep track of them all. The dialogue and the action seem to mimic other films. It didn't feel unique to the story.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY RELIES HEAVILY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The hook is that Meg is better off alone that married on her remote homestead. The antagonist isn't the environmental threats or strangers such as the outlaws, but the person who created the change in her circumstance in the first place, James. It's a relationship drama at the core of an adventure story.
This could have a large fanbase but it is very similar to other science fiction stories. That might repel audiences.
This does not have awards potential. The story focuses on the action and world building and is not character driven.
Similar Films/TV Series
STAR TREK (ALL), MIDNIGHT SKY, THE ORVILLE, PROMETHUS
What’s New About the Story
This story is not very unique, having many of the same plots seen in other stories. Hostile alien group, dying Earth, space military heroes escaping death just in time to save the day, large spaceship battles; everything you need in a epic sci-fi adventure.
The lead characters are so many, they do not stand out as individual. They all play their part to push the plot forward but there is not much time spent on a lot of character development.
Uniqueness of Story
This is an average sci-fi story that does well creating a world for its' story. The plot is not exceptionally unique but would keep the audience entertained with the constant action.
Film - Studio, Film - Streaming
WORK IN PROGRESS
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
A reduction in the amount of characters and storylines would enable character development and plot development. This could have a more satisfied ending while exploring the world of Earth and it's colonies.