Sam Razor Private Investigator Case of the Blonde with the Bad Nose Job

carlo armenise carmenise@aol.com 1651349618747

ACTION COMEDY DETECTIVE MYSTERY

Contemporary

carlo armenise

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Logline

Sam Razor is hired by a rich woman in Las Vegas to find her sister who she thinks has been kidnapped to get some of their fortune. This is Sam's first case and out of his comfort zone.

Genre

Action,Comedy,Detective,Mystery

Short Summary

Sam is a private investigator that gets hired to by a rich woman to find her missing sister in Las Vegas. Sam, who normally only handles infidelity, takes on the kidnapping case and goes off to Vegas and gets involved with a series of dangerous situations he isn't prepared for.


Sam discovers that the missing sister he was hired to find, is in cahoots with the kidnapper and staged her own kidnapping to get the money she needs to pay gambling debts.

Setting

Las Vegas, Los Angeles

Based on a True Story

No

Plot - Premise

Overcoming Monster/Villain

Plot - Other Elements

Twist

Mature Audience Themes

Information not completed

Main Character Details

Name: Sam Razor

Age: forties

Gender: Male

Role: Protagonist

Key Traits: Charming,Engaging,Funny,Skillful

Additional Character Details

Name: Mary Whitfield

Age: thirties

Gender: Female

Role: Tempter

Key Traits: Confident,Seductive,Charming,Sophisticated

Additional Character Details

Name: Margret Whitfield

Age: thirties

Gender: Female

Role: antagonist

Key Traits: Aggressive,Complex,Desperate,Greedy,Secretive

Additional Character Details

Name: Jimmy Hallon

Age: forties

Gender: Male

Role: emotional

Key Traits: Aggressive,Criminal,Greedy,Power Hungry

Development Pitch

Sam Razor is a likeable, funny, street smart, irreverent private investigator with a knack for solving cases while putting his life in danger. In his first case, the Blonde with the Bad Nose Job, he gets hired by a rich Las Vegas debutant to find her missing sister. She thinks her sister's been kidnapped by her ex-boyfriend, a dangerous Vegas mafia enforcer, to get the money he needs to pay back the money he stole from a mafia boss. Sam, who up until this point, has only handled divorce cases, takes on the kidnapped sister case, because of the money he's going to be paid, and the beauty of the sister who's hiring him. So Sam goes off to Vegas and starts his investigation. The case immediately finds Sam in danger and almost cost him his life, as he finds out that the missing sister was kidnapped, but partners with a killer to stage it herself to get money she needs to pay her own gambling debts.

About The Author

Target Audiences

Age: 35-54,18-34

Target Gender: Universal

Group Specific

Information not completed

Publishing Details

Status: Yes: self-published

Publisher: LuLu

Year Published: 2020

Hard Copy Available

Yes

ISBN

978-1-6847-1523-7

Genre

SUSPENSE, ACTION

Brief

Sam is a private investigator used to handle infidelity cases. One day, he is invited by a rich woman to investigate her sister's kidnapping. At first, the case looks standard. However, as the story unveils, he will discover people are lying to him, including the person who hired him.

Overall Rating

FAIR

Point of View

FIRST PERSON

Narrative Elements

Authors Writing Style: FAIR

Characterization: FAIR

Commerciality: GOOD

Franchise Potential: GOOD

Pace: GOOD

Premise: FAIR

Structure: GOOD

Theme: FAIR

Accuracy of Book Profile

The logline could be improved. Suggestion: ""Sam Razor, an investigator used to handle infidelity, is hired by a rich woman in Las Vegas to find her sister who, apparently, has been kidnapped. This case will take Sam out of his comfort zone, and almost cost him his life."" The story has funny parts, the protagonist can be a funny person, but I don't see it as a comedy.

Draw of Story

It starts with Sam investigating a cheating wife. It's a nice, entertaining start to make us enter Sam's life.

Possible Drawbacks

I can see the irony in many lines, in the way the story is told, but I believe that even with the use of irony, some actions and dialogue seem too childish to make us buy it. If the idea is to make a comedy, the author should make himself more clear about it. The way it is, it looks like a messy James Bond that ends up solving the case, but the story is not "messy" enough to make us accept some choices.

Use of Special Effects

THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS

Primary Hook of Story

The protagonist is the hook. He is a fun guy to watch, and his character could become the lead of a franchise.

Fanbase Potential

If well developed, after having some problems fixed, I can see a "Sam Razor's" fanbase.

Awards Potential

No. It looks more like an action movie with some funny parts. It's for entertainment, which is not bad.

Envisioned Budget

LOW BUDGET

Similar Films/TV Series

HOLMES & WATSON - THE RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN SHERLOCK HOLMES AND WATSON WITH A HUMOROUS TAKE. JAMES BOND (FRANCHISE) - A CHARMING MAN WHO ATTRACTS WOMEN AND RISKS HIS LIFE TRYING TO SOLVE CASES.

What’s New About the Story

I believe that if the author wants to make it a comedy/action, he could improve the comedic features. It would feel more unique this way.

Lead Characters

The protagonist has interesting traits. Sam is ironic, fun, charming. He welcomes a great challenge in his career despite his fear of failing and even losing his life.

Uniqueness of Story

Not really. The whole plot is a little predictable. Since the premise has been explored in previous works, it would require a much more surprising revelation for the story to be really unique.

Possible Formats

Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series

Analyst Recommendation

WORK IN PROGRESS

Justification

While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.

Tips for Improvement

The most important thing here: if adapted, the production will have to decide between recognizing the story as a standard action movie with comical elements (as it is now) or turning it into an all-out comedy. Picking the correct tone would be essential to elevate this story. Besides, since the theme/premise is a bit worn out (staging a kidnapping, a rich woman being taken, an obscure detective who is unprepared to deal with a big case), it should have a surprising turning point, an unpredictable revelation, which is not the case. Also, the characters are flat and require more depth, the dialogue is too expository and should be more subtle (especially for detective stories, in which the mystery brought up by the dialogue could improve the narrative), the actions are not credible and could be rewritten in a smarter, more mature manner.