Sam Razor Private Investigator Case of the Blonde with the Bad Nose Job
Submision Type
book
Logline
Sam Razor is hired by a rich woman in Las Vegas to find her sister who she thinks has been kidnapped to get some of their fortune. This is Sam's first case and out of his comfort zone.
Genre
Action,Comedy,Detective,Mystery
Short Summary
Sam is a private investigator that gets hired to by a rich woman to find her missing sister in Las Vegas. Sam, who normally only handles infidelity, takes on the kidnapping case and goes off to Vegas and gets involved with a series of dangerous situations he isn't prepared for.
Setting
Las Vegas, Los Angeles
Based on a True Story
No
Plot - Premise
Overcoming Monster/Villain
Plot - Other Elements
Twist
Mature Audience Themes
Information not completed
Main Character Details
Name: Sam Razor
Age: forties
Gender: Male
Role: Protagonist
Key Traits: Charming,Engaging,Funny,Skillful
Additional Character Details
Name: Mary Whitfield
Age: thirties
Gender: Female
Role: Tempter
Key Traits: Confident,Seductive,Charming,Sophisticated
Additional Character Details
Name: Margret Whitfield
Age: thirties
Gender: Female
Role: antagonist
Key Traits: Aggressive,Complex,Desperate,Greedy,Secretive
Additional Character Details
Name: Jimmy Hallon
Age: forties
Gender: Male
Role: emotional
Key Traits: Aggressive,Criminal,Greedy,Power Hungry
Genre
SUSPENSE, ACTION
Brief
Sam is a private investigator used to handle infidelity cases. One day, he is invited by a rich woman to investigate her sister's kidnapping. At first, the case looks standard. However, as the story unveils, he will discover people are lying to him, including the person who hired him.
Overall Rating
FAIR
Narrative Elements
Authors Writing Style: FAIR
Characterization: FAIR
Commerciality: GOOD
Franchise Potential: GOOD
Pace: GOOD
Premise: FAIR
Structure: GOOD
Theme: FAIR
Accuracy of Book Profile
The logline could be improved. Suggestion: ""Sam Razor, an investigator used to handle infidelity, is hired by a rich woman in Las Vegas to find her sister who, apparently, has been kidnapped. This case will take Sam out of his comfort zone, and almost cost him his life."" The story has funny parts, the protagonist can be a funny person, but I don't see it as a comedy.
Draw of Story
It starts with Sam investigating a cheating wife. It's a nice, entertaining start to make us enter Sam's life.
Possible Drawbacks
I can see the irony in many lines, in the way the story is told, but I believe that even with the use of irony, some actions and dialogue seem too childish to make us buy it. If the idea is to make a comedy, the author should make himself more clear about it. The way it is, it looks like a messy James Bond that ends up solving the case, but the story is not "messy" enough to make us accept some choices.
Use of Special Effects
THE STORY DOES NOT RELY ON SPECIAL EFFECTS
Primary Hook of Story
The protagonist is the hook. He is a fun guy to watch, and his character could become the lead of a franchise.
Fanbase Potential
If well developed, after having some problems fixed, I can see a "Sam Razor's" fanbase.
Awards Potential
No. It looks more like an action movie with some funny parts. It's for entertainment, which is not bad.
Envisioned Budget
LOW BUDGET
Similar Films/TV Series
HOLMES & WATSON - THE RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN SHERLOCK HOLMES AND WATSON WITH A HUMOROUS TAKE. JAMES BOND (FRANCHISE) - A CHARMING MAN WHO ATTRACTS WOMEN AND RISKS HIS LIFE TRYING TO SOLVE CASES.
What’s New About the Story
I believe that if the author wants to make it a comedy/action, he could improve the comedic features. It would feel more unique this way.
Lead Characters
The protagonist has interesting traits. Sam is ironic, fun, charming. He welcomes a great challenge in his career despite his fear of failing and even losing his life.
Uniqueness of Story
Not really. The whole plot is a little predictable. Since the premise has been explored in previous works, it would require a much more surprising revelation for the story to be really unique.
Possible Formats
Film - Indie, Film - Streaming, TV Series - Limited Run / Mini-Series
Analyst Recommendation
WORK IN PROGRESS
Justification
While the story has many positive points, it has room for improvement (see possible paths below). If you can't change the story at this point, my suggestion is using your notes as a guide to highlight the best aspects of it when taking the next steps, either putting a pitch page together, a treatment, or a presentation.
Tips for Improvement
The most important thing here: if adapted, the production will have to decide between recognizing the story as a standard action movie with comical elements (as it is now) or turning it into an all-out comedy. Picking the correct tone would be essential to elevate this story. Besides, since the theme/premise is a bit worn out (staging a kidnapping, a rich woman being taken, an obscure detective who is unprepared to deal with a big case), it should have a surprising turning point, an unpredictable revelation, which is not the case. Also, the characters are flat and require more depth, the dialogue is too expository and should be more subtle (especially for detective stories, in which the mystery brought up by the dialogue could improve the narrative), the actions are not credible and could be rewritten in a smarter, more mature manner.